Chilled Ballerinas
Haibun20 total reviews
Comment from sgalletti
Oh my Debbie! I am finally here, reviewing this lovely haibun. My apologies for being off-site for awhile. Lovely alliteration in this piece with frost/girst flakes/freelyreflects/fence and then I could go on with the delightful poke playfully and ice cold caps. You've captured the kigo in your haiku with the "gusty winds" and have a strong active verb to connect your first two lines with "twirl." "Chilld=ed ballerinas" is a great satori. This haibun is beautifully executed. Hugs, Sue
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
Oh my Debbie! I am finally here, reviewing this lovely haibun. My apologies for being off-site for awhile. Lovely alliteration in this piece with frost/girst flakes/freelyreflects/fence and then I could go on with the delightful poke playfully and ice cold caps. You've captured the kigo in your haiku with the "gusty winds" and have a strong active verb to connect your first two lines with "twirl." "Chilld=ed ballerinas" is a great satori. This haibun is beautifully executed. Hugs, Sue
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Sue, thank you so very much. This means so much coming from an accomplished poet like you. I am truly honored!!!Debbie
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
this is very well written my friend so much imagery enclosed in this poem well done I enjoyed this beautifully presented piece regards Jill
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
this is very well written my friend so much imagery enclosed in this poem well done I enjoyed this beautifully presented piece regards Jill
Comment Written 01-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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Thank you!!! Debbie
Comment from Deborah Marie
Stunning photo for a beautifully written poem. I love your poems' set up and the way you describe "snowflakes" callimg them "chilled ballerinas." Clever use of descriptive wording producing impressive. In the photo I just love the way the snowflake loooks like a "chilled ballerina..." And, your color scheme is impressive. Peace, Deb
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
Stunning photo for a beautifully written poem. I love your poems' set up and the way you describe "snowflakes" callimg them "chilled ballerinas." Clever use of descriptive wording producing impressive. In the photo I just love the way the snowflake loooks like a "chilled ballerina..." And, your color scheme is impressive. Peace, Deb
Comment Written 01-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed~Debbie
Comment from EMB
You know, Debbie, without the picture, I would've been lost with this one. (Well, as far as the title goes.) LOL Reading it as simply a great wintery poem, there's no problem. And I do think the haiku would give me the vision of the wind looking like a ballerina as she does her pirouettes. :)
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
You know, Debbie, without the picture, I would've been lost with this one. (Well, as far as the title goes.) LOL Reading it as simply a great wintery poem, there's no problem. And I do think the haiku would give me the vision of the wind looking like a ballerina as she does her pirouettes. :)
Comment Written 31-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013
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The picture really made this poem. Thank you!!! Debbie
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Beautiful. Verse and picture lend mystic ice to each other in this verse. Easy flow in a glow of purple that emphasis the subject. "crooked fence post topped with ice cold caps" alliteration poetically expressed. Happy New Year. Robin :)
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
Beautiful. Verse and picture lend mystic ice to each other in this verse. Easy flow in a glow of purple that emphasis the subject. "crooked fence post topped with ice cold caps" alliteration poetically expressed. Happy New Year. Robin :)
Comment Written 31-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
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Thank you so very much. Happy New Year!!! Debbie
Comment from adewpearl
love the title and the personification in it even if traditionalists might complain about personification in the haiku
nice alliteration in first flakes freely fall
gorgeous detail of setting with strong sensory appeal
nice alliteration in cold caps poke playfully
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
love the title and the personification in it even if traditionalists might complain about personification in the haiku
nice alliteration in first flakes freely fall
gorgeous detail of setting with strong sensory appeal
nice alliteration in cold caps poke playfully
Comment Written 31-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
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Thank you so very much, Brooke. There is so much controversy over haikus and senryus, I usually just call them 5-7-5 poems, but with the haibun, I can't do that.Hope you are having a wonderful New Year's eve~Debbie
Comment from McMurry903
This is a beautiful haibun poem. I love the strong imagery as you set a scene of a winter wonderland. Excellent haiku as well! I don't get to see much snow here in Mississippi so I appreciate splendid snow filled poems such as this one. Great work!
Happy New Years!
Brian
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
This is a beautiful haibun poem. I love the strong imagery as you set a scene of a winter wonderland. Excellent haiku as well! I don't get to see much snow here in Mississippi so I appreciate splendid snow filled poems such as this one. Great work!
Happy New Years!
Brian
Comment Written 31-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
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We have 12 inches I would gladly send you, LOL. Thank you so very much. Happy New Year!!! Debbie
Comment from Jumbo J
Wow Debbie this poem had a beautiful calm about it. You took me on a journey with these words and it was intoxicating. Thank you not everyone can do that. Kindest thoughts and heartfelt wishes to someone I admire and hold in high esteem. James xx
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
Wow Debbie this poem had a beautiful calm about it. You took me on a journey with these words and it was intoxicating. Thank you not everyone can do that. Kindest thoughts and heartfelt wishes to someone I admire and hold in high esteem. James xx
Comment Written 31-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much, James. This just came to mind at 3 AM when I couldn't sleep. Sometimes my poems just write themselves. Thank you so very much. Happy New Year!!! Debbie xx
Comment from juliedickson55
nice haiku to wind up the ending of your poem...
I can picture the twirling ballerinas, turning and turning on tiptoes, their crisp costumes starched and hair pinned up...
Lovely metaphor for chilly wintery white.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
nice haiku to wind up the ending of your poem...
I can picture the twirling ballerinas, turning and turning on tiptoes, their crisp costumes starched and hair pinned up...
Lovely metaphor for chilly wintery white.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
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Thank you so very much. Happy New Year!!! Debbie
Comment from Gungalo
gusty winds briskly
twirl fresh- fallen hexagons
chilled ballerinas
Your haibun is tastefully accomplished Debbie. I think you have the hang of it now for this is very beautiful and mood setting.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
gusty winds briskly
twirl fresh- fallen hexagons
chilled ballerinas
Your haibun is tastefully accomplished Debbie. I think you have the hang of it now for this is very beautiful and mood setting.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2012
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Maybe I am finally getting the hang of it, Yes? Thank you so very much. Happy New Year!!! Debbie
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Maybeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.