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Comment from Angel Debbie
when the day is done
the shops and courts have all closed
as the sun goes down
say goodbye to the rat race
it puts a smile on your face
It Sure does Quitting time and relaxing time. What we all strive for at the end of the day! Great Job. Thank You for sharing. Nice picture also.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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when the day is done
the shops and courts have all closed
as the sun goes down
say goodbye to the rat race
it puts a smile on your face
It Sure does Quitting time and relaxing time. What we all strive for at the end of the day! Great Job. Thank You for sharing. Nice picture also.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Great thoughts, thank you Angel
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Another one of your very interesting pictures to compliment and encourage your lovely piece. Hoping you and yours enjoy a very happy and safe new year.
Robin :)
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Another one of your very interesting pictures to compliment and encourage your lovely piece. Hoping you and yours enjoy a very happy and safe new year.
Robin :)
Comment Written 26-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Thank you Robin. Happy and safe new year to you too.
Comment from 9999pool
The end of the work day. Time to rejoice. Time to whack the night away. To be with loved once over dinner, to chat, to argue and to hugs. Such joy when the sun goes down. If the sun goes down on the wrong side of life, we can also lament, complain and yet wake up the next morning - too busy to think of our problems until the sun goes down, LOL. Cheers. Ritchie.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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The end of the work day. Time to rejoice. Time to whack the night away. To be with loved once over dinner, to chat, to argue and to hugs. Such joy when the sun goes down. If the sun goes down on the wrong side of life, we can also lament, complain and yet wake up the next morning - too busy to think of our problems until the sun goes down, LOL. Cheers. Ritchie.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Thank you, for the review.
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Welcome. Happy holidays. Cheers. Ritchie.
Comment from mystery poet
Your rhyming couplets are awesome.
Oh, the peaceful ending of day in
the city. Quiet and still one can
almost hear God speak. The art is
so well suited to the words of this
splendid tanka.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Your rhyming couplets are awesome.
Oh, the peaceful ending of day in
the city. Quiet and still one can
almost hear God speak. The art is
so well suited to the words of this
splendid tanka.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Thank you Mystery, it was my first Tana attempt.
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Like me, you enjoy trying new writing styles.
Helps us grow as writers. It was my pleasure!
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Good job!!!
Comment from Folorunsho obalugemo
Life's rat races end chiefly at death, when man ceases eternally from his earthly pursuit. And each night too offers him a light rest from his weariness, though many a soul still--either in their bed or out of it--labour on in some sort of business.
Splendid write.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Life's rat races end chiefly at death, when man ceases eternally from his earthly pursuit. And each night too offers him a light rest from his weariness, though many a soul still--either in their bed or out of it--labour on in some sort of business.
Splendid write.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Thank you do much. It was my first tanka.
Comment from Swtdreamz
when the day is done
the shops and courts have all closed
as the sun goes down - ah, the end of a day feels great, because then we can look forward to a new day tomorrow with the possibility of anything happening.
say goodbye to the rat race
it puts a smile on your face- I get so exhausted sometimes; it's nice to just sit back and relax.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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when the day is done
the shops and courts have all closed
as the sun goes down - ah, the end of a day feels great, because then we can look forward to a new day tomorrow with the possibility of anything happening.
say goodbye to the rat race
it puts a smile on your face- I get so exhausted sometimes; it's nice to just sit back and relax.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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Thank you
Comment from nurendi
I enjoyed this poem, as that is exactly how I feel every time I walk out of my office! A simple central image, beautifully conveyed. Well written.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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I enjoyed this poem, as that is exactly how I feel every time I walk out of my office! A simple central image, beautifully conveyed. Well written.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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Thank you nurendi
