I weep
An Elegy40 total reviews
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
This is an emotional and poignant work. It plays on the reader's compassion and humanity and reminds us of our own responsibility.
The only thing I would suggest is the addition of a single letter, in your description. Make it "An Elegy" rather than "A Elegy".
Beautiful work!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2015
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This is an emotional and poignant work. It plays on the reader's compassion and humanity and reminds us of our own responsibility.
The only thing I would suggest is the addition of a single letter, in your description. Make it "An Elegy" rather than "A Elegy".
Beautiful work!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2015
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You're very kind, thanks
Comment from tfawcus
This entrenched right in the American Constitution remains a puzzle to many who live elsewhere. When I grew up in England even the policemen on the beat were unarmed. Here in Australia after the Port Arthur massacre in 1996, the parliament, with bipartisan support, introduced strict gun control laws restricting the private ownership of semi-automatic rifles, semi-automatic shotguns and pump-action shotguns as well as introducing uniform firearms licensing. Over 600,000 firearms were destroyed during the amnesty period. It seemed like a no-brainer.
Your poem expresses the anguish felt by many.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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This entrenched right in the American Constitution remains a puzzle to many who live elsewhere. When I grew up in England even the policemen on the beat were unarmed. Here in Australia after the Port Arthur massacre in 1996, the parliament, with bipartisan support, introduced strict gun control laws restricting the private ownership of semi-automatic rifles, semi-automatic shotguns and pump-action shotguns as well as introducing uniform firearms licensing. Over 600,000 firearms were destroyed during the amnesty period. It seemed like a no-brainer.
Your poem expresses the anguish felt by many.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Yep, I used to be a copper in the UK. What angers me is not the love affair with guns, it's the failure to do anything. Thanks for your review
Comment from frogbook
Very sad and true. Quite well written. I admired the ease of flow and use of vocabulary as well as seeing the situation from all sides, the children, those in power and everyone. All have their demons to deal with and many a hard job ahead.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Very sad and true. Quite well written. I admired the ease of flow and use of vocabulary as well as seeing the situation from all sides, the children, those in power and everyone. All have their demons to deal with and many a hard job ahead.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Thank you
Comment from kiwijenny
It is unspeakable what happens
You put it in words...I get so sad for the victims...innocent slaughtered
We are to strive to brighten the corner where we live...speak right follow God ...do right
God bless
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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It is unspeakable what happens
You put it in words...I get so sad for the victims...innocent slaughtered
We are to strive to brighten the corner where we live...speak right follow God ...do right
God bless
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Thanks
Comment from lalajovanoski
I found this piece to be Remarkable and eye opening. Excellently written and such a powerful message to deliver - and exceptionally received. You are concise and directly execute your feelings well. Thank you very much for sharing this
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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I found this piece to be Remarkable and eye opening. Excellently written and such a powerful message to deliver - and exceptionally received. You are concise and directly execute your feelings well. Thank you very much for sharing this
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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You're very kind, thank you
Comment from pattipac
Our nation weeps for those twenty beautiful children, and six heroic adult who fought back when this demented young man entered Sandy Hook school. It is up to us to do what we can to persuade our legislators to take a stand and act before more innocent lives are lost. Pass stringent laws banning semi-automatic rifles for anything but law enforcement agencies and solders, and to pass much needed legislation to help the mentally ill in our nation.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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Our nation weeps for those twenty beautiful children, and six heroic adult who fought back when this demented young man entered Sandy Hook school. It is up to us to do what we can to persuade our legislators to take a stand and act before more innocent lives are lost. Pass stringent laws banning semi-automatic rifles for anything but law enforcement agencies and solders, and to pass much needed legislation to help the mentally ill in our nation.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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Thanks for the review and generous score
Comment from God's Writer
A wonderful message worthy of six stars, but I am out. Wonderful sentiments and something will be done. Thank you for this timely and elegant poem.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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A wonderful message worthy of six stars, but I am out. Wonderful sentiments and something will be done. Thank you for this timely and elegant poem.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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Thank you. You're more optomistic than me.
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You're welcome.
Comment from McMurry903
This is a very moving and deeply touching poem. You expressed thru this great poem the sentiments of many in our grief torn nation, myself included.Very well written, thank you for sharing. Brian
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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This is a very moving and deeply touching poem. You expressed thru this great poem the sentiments of many in our grief torn nation, myself included.Very well written, thank you for sharing. Brian
Comment Written 19-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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Thank you
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This poem must have one of my two remaining precious 6's!
Your excellent poem vividly describes the mindset of so many at this time! Especially great lines--8, 11-12, last two
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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This poem must have one of my two remaining precious 6's!
Your excellent poem vividly describes the mindset of so many at this time! Especially great lines--8, 11-12, last two
Comment Written 19-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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Thank you for your review and generous score.
Comment from misscookie
I*'m sorry I have no more stars to give.
This is a very deep and emotional poem to read it still brings tears to my eyes. You choose the perfect words for this poem and the message is sad but strong. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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I*'m sorry I have no more stars to give.
This is a very deep and emotional poem to read it still brings tears to my eyes. You choose the perfect words for this poem and the message is sad but strong. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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Thanks
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It was my pleasure
