All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Red Velvet Moment"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about stage fright that can grip one before they go on stage. i enjoyed reading it
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this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about stage fright that can grip one before they go on stage. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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thx so much sweets! :) Sharyn
Comment from Joan E.
I have read a few of these "feelings" entries, and I enjoyed your syncopated version--thanks for instructions on how to best read the work. I enjoyed the energy and immediacy, plus all the echoing sounds. I also liked your "fiddle/fiddler" and "red velvet song" metaphors. Thanks for sharing the "moment" and appealing presentation. Hugs- Joan
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I have read a few of these "feelings" entries, and I enjoyed your syncopated version--thanks for instructions on how to best read the work. I enjoyed the energy and immediacy, plus all the echoing sounds. I also liked your "fiddle/fiddler" and "red velvet song" metaphors. Thanks for sharing the "moment" and appealing presentation. Hugs- Joan
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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thank you so much, Joan! :) Sharyn
Comment from God's Writer
A great poem my dear one. So full of life's ups and downs. You have such a beautiful mind. Well planned and written.
Thank you for writing this elegant poem.
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A great poem my dear one. So full of life's ups and downs. You have such a beautiful mind. Well planned and written.
Thank you for writing this elegant poem.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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thank you so much, Erick! :) Sharyn
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You are welcome.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a beautiful piece of poetry that explores various shades of emotions. The flow is great; very musical. I particularly liked the ending lines. kudos
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This is a beautiful piece of poetry that explores various shades of emotions. The flow is great; very musical. I particularly liked the ending lines. kudos
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much, Perp!
Comment from 9999pool
yearning and wanting something more from a mundane life can play tricks in our minds to make irrational decisions. Temptation abounds, and sometimes there's no turning back. We may want to "want to puke ... want to fly!" but it is gonna be higher than what we had wanted. Finally restraint and the conscience to do the right thing! That was the emotions and feelings I got. This one is fun. What do you expect from the tapping of 1 2 3...1.2.3...1/2/3..and there she goes again..with the tap tap tap..should i or should I not..maybe? Good write..swift poem and must read fast to pickup the pace of temptation..lest we decide otherwise. Do it before the tapping wake us up from our yearnings! Cheers.
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yearning and wanting something more from a mundane life can play tricks in our minds to make irrational decisions. Temptation abounds, and sometimes there's no turning back. We may want to "want to puke ... want to fly!" but it is gonna be higher than what we had wanted. Finally restraint and the conscience to do the right thing! That was the emotions and feelings I got. This one is fun. What do you expect from the tapping of 1 2 3...1.2.3...1/2/3..and there she goes again..with the tap tap tap..should i or should I not..maybe? Good write..swift poem and must read fast to pickup the pace of temptation..lest we decide otherwise. Do it before the tapping wake us up from our yearnings! Cheers.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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you got it, dear - tap tap tap to get the beam of the poem if you need it - but if you read it fast, you probably won't need it! :) Sharyn
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Welcome, Sharyn. Cheers. Ritchie.
Comment from Starlit Ink
Wanting to puke and fly at the same time - it's either love or too much tequila. :) This is creative and conveys strong emotion that takes the reader for a ride. I like the imagery of the fiddle music also. You fulfilled the prompt, as the poem definitely explores emotions.
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Wanting to puke and fly at the same time - it's either love or too much tequila. :) This is creative and conveys strong emotion that takes the reader for a ride. I like the imagery of the fiddle music also. You fulfilled the prompt, as the poem definitely explores emotions.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
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thx so much, Starlit! :) Sharyn
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Definitely loads of different feelings in this fast moving very well written poem you have done really well I enjoyed my friend good luck regards Jill
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Definitely loads of different feelings in this fast moving very well written poem you have done really well I enjoyed my friend good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
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thx, Jill!
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Your poem is different and I enjoyed reading it very much. I could feel the nervouse energy all the way through. Good luck in the contest.
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Your poem is different and I enjoyed reading it very much. I could feel the nervouse energy all the way through. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
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thx so much KY!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was great, like a roller coster ride, finished as soon as you started!! Loved your author notes as well, I was tapping away! LOL brilliant, it was really overflowing with feelings, just a wonderful write and a great read. xsx Sandra. ps, good luck in the contest!
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That was great, like a roller coster ride, finished as soon as you started!! Loved your author notes as well, I was tapping away! LOL brilliant, it was really overflowing with feelings, just a wonderful write and a great read. xsx Sandra. ps, good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
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thx Sandra! didn't win, but fun to write! :) Sharyn
Comment from fairydancer
I love this poem. Free style done well is my favourite kind of poetry, and this is done well. I have not heard of "slam style" before but love the idea of it. I often use a rant or rap rhythm in my free style, but most times the rhythm just creates itself!
Your title is a master stroke! What a great phrase.
Great entry, good luck - Cally :)
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I love this poem. Free style done well is my favourite kind of poetry, and this is done well. I have not heard of "slam style" before but love the idea of it. I often use a rant or rap rhythm in my free style, but most times the rhythm just creates itself!
Your title is a master stroke! What a great phrase.
Great entry, good luck - Cally :)
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Bless you Cally! and congrats on YOUR win in this one!! :) Sharyn
