All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Red Velvet Moment"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Thomas Raine
I use to perform on stage when I was a teenager, but it really wasn't my thing; I found myself more inclined to background work, setting up the lights, being a part of the sound team. Eventually I started writing and found my real pleasure in creating scenes and characters and giving them life on the page.
I think you captured well the anxiety, anticipation and excitement of acting. Well done,
- TR
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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I use to perform on stage when I was a teenager, but it really wasn't my thing; I found myself more inclined to background work, setting up the lights, being a part of the sound team. Eventually I started writing and found my real pleasure in creating scenes and characters and giving them life on the page.
I think you captured well the anxiety, anticipation and excitement of acting. Well done,
- TR
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Thx so much, TR!:) Sharyn
Comment from juliedickson55
Great slam.
It incorporates all of the feelings, fears and emotions of a performer before she goes on...you've captured it well.
Sneaking a few well-place rhymes into the poem makes it flow along.
I found myself rooting for the performer.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Great slam.
It incorporates all of the feelings, fears and emotions of a performer before she goes on...you've captured it well.
Sneaking a few well-place rhymes into the poem makes it flow along.
I found myself rooting for the performer.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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yay! thx Julie! :) Sharyn
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
Great poetic work on stage fright-akin to public speaking, in this case, singing. Loved this: "The fiddler smiles meets my eyes, now it's just me an' the light". Strange how the anxiety over what will be is worse than the actual doing. Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Great poetic work on stage fright-akin to public speaking, in this case, singing. Loved this: "The fiddler smiles meets my eyes, now it's just me an' the light". Strange how the anxiety over what will be is worse than the actual doing. Enjoyed!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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absolutely! the "doing" is easy - the fear of doing isn't! :)S
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Strange how we humans think sometimes....
MN :)
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Best not to 'puke' if you're 'flying', Sharyn, as you'll get a facefull. :-)
Nice snappy and witty read with scattered internal rhyme for extra interest.
I didn't get 'follow spot fades', but did really enjoy the read.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Best not to 'puke' if you're 'flying', Sharyn, as you'll get a facefull. :-)
Nice snappy and witty read with scattered internal rhyme for extra interest.
I didn't get 'follow spot fades', but did really enjoy the read.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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note the ORDER silly ... and the follow spot fades in/ hear a pin/ drop ... remember run-on lines???? theatrical term though ... :)
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OK, I'm out of practice...at reviewing too. :-) x
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that's ok - gushy gushy grandads do that sort of thing dear ! :))) how's your new home?
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Have settled in great thanks, Sharyn. It's a bit small for an Earl (just a studio flat) but it suits me fine. I've had to dismiss the servants though as there's no room for them here. ;-) xx
Comment from Allison78
I think this is such a fantastic poem you have written! It's like I'm right there with you. Very dramatic and exciting. Well written, great job!
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I think this is such a fantastic poem you have written! It's like I'm right there with you. Very dramatic and exciting. Well written, great job!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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oh wonderful! thank you so much for being there with me, Allison, AND thank you for your wonderful '6'!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from Oldsteamer
I can hear the aria.
That must be you.
At first I thought of cake but then any production is like baking a cake.
Mix everything together and add HEAT.
Again a great entertainer.
Was gripping. I was holding my breath.
-R-
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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I can hear the aria.
That must be you.
At first I thought of cake but then any production is like baking a cake.
Mix everything together and add HEAT.
Again a great entertainer.
Was gripping. I was holding my breath.
-R-
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Well absolutely, Reg! You can breathe now ... me too! whew! Bless you for reading & enjoying, and, of course, for your lovely six! I'm honored!
:) Sharyn
Comment from Titanx9
I love the intensity in this poem. The words create crescendos, crests and glens of expectations. Your author notes help the reader experience the last iota of emotion in this piece. This was a thoroughly enjoyable read! Good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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I love the intensity in this poem. The words create crescendos, crests and glens of expectations. Your author notes help the reader experience the last iota of emotion in this piece. This was a thoroughly enjoyable read! Good luck!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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ths so much, Titan - didn't win, but a fun write! :)
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sharyn, a interesting narrative with interaction, love your style you had me talking and thinking along and once again prove why you are a writing force to be watched with anticipation, because you never know which way you will go and what will be delivered. It's always a pleasure to read your magic thoughts. I have public speaking anxiety,so I relate completely. Thank you again. Kindest wishes James xx
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Hi Sharyn, a interesting narrative with interaction, love your style you had me talking and thinking along and once again prove why you are a writing force to be watched with anticipation, because you never know which way you will go and what will be delivered. It's always a pleasure to read your magic thoughts. I have public speaking anxiety,so I relate completely. Thank you again. Kindest wishes James xx
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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thank you so much,James! :) Sharyn
Comment from lappmellott
I so enjoyed reading your poem. I believe every one of us have felt those same emotions at one time or another in our lives. Stepping out of the box and trying something new, even something you love, is a very frightening and doubtful thing for us as humans. Good job.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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I so enjoyed reading your poem. I believe every one of us have felt those same emotions at one time or another in our lives. Stepping out of the box and trying something new, even something you love, is a very frightening and doubtful thing for us as humans. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much - and yes, there are parallels to simply stepping "out of the box" as you so correctly point out, my dear! :) Sharyn
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You're welcome.
Comment from Sasha
Where are the 6' when you need one. This is just spectacular. I was mesmerized from the first line right up to the last word. This a superb entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best. Awesome work with this one.
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Where are the 6' when you need one. This is just spectacular. I was mesmerized from the first line right up to the last word. This a superb entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best. Awesome work with this one.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Thx so much Smg for reviewing and for a virtual '6'! :) Sharyn
