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Comment from MidnightWriter4U
Newborns are a taste of Heaven on this earth. Pure Angels. This is a wonderfully expressed poetic work for a loved one. I especially liked this: "It snuggles on the bosom giving a faint Smile As it melts a mother's heart with its tiny Charms". A really enjoyable read!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Newborns are a taste of Heaven on this earth. Pure Angels. This is a wonderfully expressed poetic work for a loved one. I especially liked this: "It snuggles on the bosom giving a faint Smile As it melts a mother's heart with its tiny Charms". A really enjoyable read!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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I really appreciate this wonderful review.
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You are most welcome--a wonderful piece of poetry! MN :)
Comment from Rondeno
Brilliant! I have always loved the pantoum form, and here you execute it with great beauty and craftsmanship. What a gift for Isaac!
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Brilliant! I have always loved the pantoum form, and here you execute it with great beauty and craftsmanship. What a gift for Isaac!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you for this gift of a review and the highest star rating.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is very well written. I like the simplicity of the language used. I also like the repetition of some lines. very well done with a lot of meaning. cheers
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This is very well written. I like the simplicity of the language used. I also like the repetition of some lines. very well done with a lot of meaning. cheers
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you, Perp
Comment from Jina Sarma
your first attempt is successful, your grandson is so beautiful. in your poem there is emotion and feeling that are so special thing; you are like a poetry king. your rhymes are nice.
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your first attempt is successful, your grandson is so beautiful. in your poem there is emotion and feeling that are so special thing; you are like a poetry king. your rhymes are nice.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much. I'm blushing and humbled.
Comment from Janet Foor
Isaac will be great fun for Christmas this year now that he is a year old.
I enjoyed readings your pantoum about the birth of your grandson and your vivid description for that day. I liked your analogy to the Christ child and his mother. Your repeating lines and rhyme worked very well. Good work merry Christmas,
Janet
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Isaac will be great fun for Christmas this year now that he is a year old.
I enjoyed readings your pantoum about the birth of your grandson and your vivid description for that day. I liked your analogy to the Christ child and his mother. Your repeating lines and rhyme worked very well. Good work merry Christmas,
Janet
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Thank younJanet for that warm wonderful review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Nicely done pantoum. I just wonder why you put capital letters on some words that don't need them. Seems rather random. Examples: Newborn Child, Arms, Smile, Charms, Ever Born, etc. It's distracting and takes away from the experience of reading an otherwise lovely poem.
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Nicely done pantoum. I just wonder why you put capital letters on some words that don't need them. Seems rather random. Examples: Newborn Child, Arms, Smile, Charms, Ever Born, etc. It's distracting and takes away from the experience of reading an otherwise lovely poem.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
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Ah, but those are the very words I wanted you to notice and absorb. See, it worked! Thanks for the nice review. I appreciate your input.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
This was lovely, first try at the pantoum or not. Lovely verse with an easy flow.
This poem was very personal to you and you have shared the emotion, love and feelings with the reader. Nice job. Robin Gilmor
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This was lovely, first try at the pantoum or not. Lovely verse with an easy flow.
This poem was very personal to you and you have shared the emotion, love and feelings with the reader. Nice job. Robin Gilmor
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and so many stars. I'm delighted.
Comment from guinea
This is a beautiful poem showing the bond between a mother and baby. There is nothing more beautiful.The imagery is great. Nice picture.
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This is a beautiful poem showing the bond between a mother and baby. There is nothing more beautiful.The imagery is great. Nice picture.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
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Thank guinea
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Thank guinea
Comment from lappmellott
I enjoyed reading your pantoum poem. I think it's very well done. The picture of your daughter and your grandson will remain very special to you all through your life.
As a mother, I can certainly tell you that there is nothing more meaningful than when your child is first laid in your arms after giving birth. Good job on the piece.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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I enjoyed reading your pantoum poem. I think it's very well done. The picture of your daughter and your grandson will remain very special to you all through your life.
As a mother, I can certainly tell you that there is nothing more meaningful than when your child is first laid in your arms after giving birth. Good job on the piece.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much. You make me smile.
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Thank you so much. You make me smile.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Dawn Munro
If this is your first attempt, I have to congratulate you because I think you have done a splendid job with it - I simply adore this beautiful pantoum. The love simply leaps from each line and the rhyme is spot-on.
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If this is your first attempt, I have to congratulate you because I think you have done a splendid job with it - I simply adore this beautiful pantoum. The love simply leaps from each line and the rhyme is spot-on.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for this nice review, Dawn.
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It was my pleasure.
