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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from donaldww
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The opening lines are replete with figurative language. I get the sense you love words, as do I, and when you open your dictionary or thesaurus, you are on a trip to the candy store.

For the next few months, the bleached beaches are no longer peaches. The important thing is to avoid turning into a beached-whale during this bleak season.

Listening to 'Here Comes the Sun' is one antidote to winter blahs.

Cheers,
DW

Good luck with the lonely voting gremlins.



 Comment Written 01-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
    We do love those words, don't we,DW! and I love that song! :) Didn't win - but voting gremlins are always unpredictable - I just use the prompts because they're there, anyway - would go crazy if I banked on "winning" these things! :))))
Comment from Cornelius2000
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What a good idea, first setting the positive tone of a healthy, happy relationship, and then contrasting it with one that has tragically broken up. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
    Thanks so much, Dave ... contrast is for drama, of course - so each emotion is stronger, yes? Thx so much! :) Sharyn
Comment from Bill Schott
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This is a terrific poem that connects the before and after with poignant and opposite images of a relationship that either ended or was rended. Thanks for your work.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
    Thank you so much, Bill! :) Sharyn
Comment from gazzagodbod
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oo loved this dark masterpiece love the picture the presentation is fab and all that sour cream great work my friend xxgazzaxx

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
    thx gazza!
Comment from OLA THOMAS
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A good free verse, though not done in with specific thyming, but some internal rhyming and alliterations swell the quality of this work. Nice one.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
    thx so much Ola!! :) Sharyn
Comment from Selina Stambi
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I read and gave you six stars for your grandpa story.

This poem is breathtaking in the word pictures that it evokes - bleached beaches, ice cream dreams ...! I had almost forgotten to breathe when I got to the last line!

Really, really lovely. You are a talented writer. I hope you win.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2012


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
    Well bless you so much for reading & enjoying my work, my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from mystery poet
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When first wed in purest white like the white
beaches you describe things are just peachy.
Then in time when things worsen and loses come
the beaches are still white, but void. I like
Powerful lines showing how that gold band has
not shine left. Thanks! Best wishes in contest.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2012


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
    Thx so much mystery poet! :) Sharyn
reply by mystery poet on 30-Nov-2012
    It's a pleasure!!!
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
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Excellent expression of love and loss deeply felt. A most interesting way of expressing it in terms of the beach and lost from sunlight. Love the artwork chosen for this poem. Goes very well with the theme--sets the mood of loneliness. A very enjoyable read!

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2012


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
    thx somuch MW! :) Sharyn
reply by MidnightWriter4U on 01-Dec-2012
    Yw MN :)
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello to you visionary
I like your original images of comparing the the wonders of love ex.)
bleached beaches burst
with sweet peaches and ice-cream dreams

Gert


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2012


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
    Thank you so much, Gert! :) Sharynh
reply by Gert sherwood on 01-Dec-2012
    smiles
    Gert
Comment from Gungalo
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I did read it aloud and it was marvelous. Bleached beaches really figured in as to a common ground. Loved this part:

naked narrow band
third finger
left hand
hiding from the sun

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2012


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
    aaah, thank you so much Gungalo! :) Sharyn
reply by Gungalo on 01-Dec-2012
    Smile.