Painting With Words
Acrostic Poem60 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
"Painting is poetry that is seen rather than felt, and poetry is painting that is felt rather than seen." Leonardo da Vinci
You have painted with your words just what da Vinci must have had in mind. Then complimented with great artwork as well. Best wishes with your entry.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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"Painting is poetry that is seen rather than felt, and poetry is painting that is felt rather than seen." Leonardo da Vinci
You have painted with your words just what da Vinci must have had in mind. Then complimented with great artwork as well. Best wishes with your entry.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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What a great quote, Jean. I got the inspiration because the local artists guild, about 150 paintbrushes strong, has chosen to paint to my poems as their winter assignment. I won't say illustrate, as that has another meaning altogether. Then in May there will be a gallery showing of the artwork and poetry. It seemed to me that if they could paint my words, I must have painted a picture too. Leave it Leonardo to trump my idea! Thank you for taking the time to R & R my words- Wendy
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lol. Congratulations to both you and the artists. Have fun.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow - this is an incredible poem - fabulous rhyme, and how on earth you managed to get the metering so perfect too, in an acrostic, is amazing. I love everything about this beautiful poem - it slips off the tongue in a magical cadence with wonderful phrases to describe 'painting with words' like "Non sequiturs that cast a thrall/ Gestalt achieved" - I started to write more phrases I liked and then realized I couldn't pick more because I love them all. Simply outstanding poetry!
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Wow - this is an incredible poem - fabulous rhyme, and how on earth you managed to get the metering so perfect too, in an acrostic, is amazing. I love everything about this beautiful poem - it slips off the tongue in a magical cadence with wonderful phrases to describe 'painting with words' like "Non sequiturs that cast a thrall/ Gestalt achieved" - I started to write more phrases I liked and then realized I couldn't pick more because I love them all. Simply outstanding poetry!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Good Morning from Roanoke. Thank you so much for the read and review. I am so glad you enjoyed it. The Artist's League (about 150 paintbrushes strong) is busily painting to my poems as their winter assignment. I started to think of the words they were painting and my mind took a slight veer to the painting with words concept. I can't wait to see how all the art comes out. Very excited, but a bit hesitant too as I have no input--other than the poems themselves--into the works. There will be a showing here in the western part of VA which will include the poetry next May. Exciting stuff. Gotta go fix breakfast for the hungry guests. Thank you for the extra star, too.
Comment from Espresso momma
Very nice. Painting with words isn't always easy for some. But when we can do it, it makes a beautiful work of art. Thanks for sharing, enjoy your weekend.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Very nice. Painting with words isn't always easy for some. But when we can do it, it makes a beautiful work of art. Thanks for sharing, enjoy your weekend.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the R & R. The local painting group is painting to several of my paintings for their winter challenge and it got me thinking along these lines. I am so glad you liked it and thank you, the weekend was busy, but the guests were delightful and that makes the work easy. Hope yours is going well too.
Comment from donaldww
I enjoyed your acrostic poem with triptych Mona Lisa and duo Picasso female partners in paint.
I wasn't sure I got no strictures. Do you mean Picasso had no strictures or the poem has none. His structures were defined.
There's some gobbledygook in your author notes. I wish FS would upgrade the site to allow a few extended-ASCII characters in the notes. Kind of silly to have quote marks and em's turn into nonsense if you cut and paste.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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I enjoyed your acrostic poem with triptych Mona Lisa and duo Picasso female partners in paint.
I wasn't sure I got no strictures. Do you mean Picasso had no strictures or the poem has none. His structures were defined.
There's some gobbledygook in your author notes. I wish FS would upgrade the site to allow a few extended-ASCII characters in the notes. Kind of silly to have quote marks and em's turn into nonsense if you cut and paste.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Good morning, and thanks for taking a peek at my three paintings. By strictures, I am talking of the poem. Unlike a villanelle, or lento which have absolute format designs, free verse starts with none that are externally defined-the highly structured, traditional realism vs. the abstract in form. Way too much wording before my first cup of coffee. ;)
Comment from Deborah Marie
Lovely photo to go with your poem which is already full of imagery that I can appreciate. It is always cleverly written full of descriptive words. I enjoyed reading your poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Lovely photo to go with your poem which is already full of imagery that I can appreciate. It is always cleverly written full of descriptive words. I enjoyed reading your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Well good evening to you. Thank you for reading and reviewing the poem. I am so glad you enjoyed it. I have been crafting tonight, not writing, so I just got your message. Are you making anything fun now? I just finished a Santa that is headed to a charity auction. Got the hot glue gun burns to prove it. ;)
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Just reviewing and posting some new poems. Will craft sometime soon as I like to make holiday gifts. :-)Deb
Comment from phill doran
Hello there
The six is because this reads so well, the 'acrostic' nature of the words becomes really irrelevant, that is good writing in deed.
My only 'nit' is on line 10.
As I say, the piece READS wonderfully, nothing halting - except on that line where you have "...Inviting rhymes, which bard combines..." Clearly this is not how you'd say it, rather you'd say "Inviting rhymes, which A bard combines.." but it is not the absence of 'A' which throws the line off (for me) but rather the use of 'which'.
For example, if I read "...Inviting rhymes, a bard combines..." this scans, has meaning and is very close to (if not exactly) speech.
But, I cannot let my opinion on such a pedantic point cloud the wonderful, wonderful writing...like;
"...strictures, structure..." (lovely on the tongue)
"...metered paintbrush..." (I really like that one)
Oh, Such a pleasure to read and well worth 2 cents!
I wish you well with this
cheers
phill
PS: Perhaps only people who remember typewriters use the --. Should this punctuation really not just be a single hyphen with a space either side like "...Harmonics - drawn..."?
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Hello there
The six is because this reads so well, the 'acrostic' nature of the words becomes really irrelevant, that is good writing in deed.
My only 'nit' is on line 10.
As I say, the piece READS wonderfully, nothing halting - except on that line where you have "...Inviting rhymes, which bard combines..." Clearly this is not how you'd say it, rather you'd say "Inviting rhymes, which A bard combines.." but it is not the absence of 'A' which throws the line off (for me) but rather the use of 'which'.
For example, if I read "...Inviting rhymes, a bard combines..." this scans, has meaning and is very close to (if not exactly) speech.
But, I cannot let my opinion on such a pedantic point cloud the wonderful, wonderful writing...like;
"...strictures, structure..." (lovely on the tongue)
"...metered paintbrush..." (I really like that one)
Oh, Such a pleasure to read and well worth 2 cents!
I wish you well with this
cheers
phill
PS: Perhaps only people who remember typewriters use the --. Should this punctuation really not just be a single hyphen with a space either side like "...Harmonics - drawn..."?
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Well, good afternoon to you from a very happy poet. Your thorough and delightful review has brought a huge smile to my face. You are absolutely right about the rough patch at "bard" which I neglected to re-do after I switched it to singular and changed things elsewhere. My ability to focus vanished around the time I blew out the candles on my 60th-Birthday cake. The dash, hmm, my typewriter days too. Thank you for telling me how to do it on these new fangled contraptions. I wondered, then shrugged. Your six is worth 10 others to me because I so admire the words you manage to string together in the most scintillating combinations. Thank you, thank you, and thank you again.
Comment from adewpearl
Solid acrostic for Painting With Word
Picasso-like - I would add the hyphen
indicitive - do you mean indicative or is this a different word?
great alliteration and consonance in strictures/structure
and in teasing taunting
Gestault achieved - Gestalt
good alliteration in words can wed
and taut tapestries
I love your descriptions of rhymes and free verse and the great reference to Picasso paintings
I really like the rhyme in the final stanza and the simile of poetry as words strung like pearls :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Solid acrostic for Painting With Word
Picasso-like - I would add the hyphen
indicitive - do you mean indicative or is this a different word?
great alliteration and consonance in strictures/structure
and in teasing taunting
Gestault achieved - Gestalt
good alliteration in words can wed
and taut tapestries
I love your descriptions of rhymes and free verse and the great reference to Picasso paintings
I really like the rhyme in the final stanza and the simile of poetry as words strung like pearls :-) Brooke
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Once again, the spell check changes the word in the text, but it doesn't save. Perhaps if I try changing it manually it will work . I appreciate the catches and should have learned my lesson yesterday to go back and check...sigh. Thank you for the read and review. Back to "edit" for another try.
Comment from Joannforsberg
Wonderful how you combined painting and writing poems together in this.
The metered paintbrushes is brilliant. And words strung like pearls.
The ending was perfect: a scene unfurls.
Great, great poem.
Blessing, Jo
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Wonderful how you combined painting and writing poems together in this.
The metered paintbrushes is brilliant. And words strung like pearls.
The ending was perfect: a scene unfurls.
Great, great poem.
Blessing, Jo
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Good morning Jo. Wow, you sure put the sweet in my coffee. I am so glad that you liked the poem. It is one of those that fought me the whole way, so your comments make me glad I hung in there for the whole twelve rounds. Thank you for the read, the review, and those yummy stars--Wendy
Comment from terry drake
Wow! That was really good. Your rhymes were magnificent and the cadence was a waltz. I enjoyed the message in the verse and the rhythm of your lines. Great job.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Wow! That was really good. Your rhymes were magnificent and the cadence was a waltz. I enjoyed the message in the verse and the rhythm of your lines. Great job.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much Terry for the kind review. I am glad you liked the dance and the painting.
Comment from mumsyone
This is a great acrostic poem, and a good entry for the contest. It makes me think of "Word Painting," a book by Rebecca McClahahan. Good luck in the voting booth.
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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This is a great acrostic poem, and a good entry for the contest. It makes me think of "Word Painting," a book by Rebecca McClahahan. Good luck in the voting booth.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my words. I'm glad you liked my painting and I will try and take a peek at the book you mentioned. I also appreciate the good wishes and the stars
