All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 " One Pure Note"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from McMurry903
Sharyn,
I love how you showed despair then with beautiful imagery you took the reader back up and clearly pointed out the tranquilly and peace that surrounds. I get the message that one can't really appreciate the highs in life without an understanding of the lows.I'm glad to have a six to award you for this one because it was very uplifting to me and I enjoyed so very much. Congrats on the win! Brian :)
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Sharyn,
I love how you showed despair then with beautiful imagery you took the reader back up and clearly pointed out the tranquilly and peace that surrounds. I get the message that one can't really appreciate the highs in life without an understanding of the lows.I'm glad to have a six to award you for this one because it was very uplifting to me and I enjoyed so very much. Congrats on the win! Brian :)
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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and I'm awfully glad you had a six for me, too, Brian! thank you SSOOOOOOOOOO much my dear! :)
Sharyn
Comment from LucidDreem
Good imagery and word composition. I wasn't with the flow the whole time, but i don't think that's too important in a poem like this.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Good imagery and word composition. I wasn't with the flow the whole time, but i don't think that's too important in a poem like this.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Read it aloud LD - you'll find theh flow - trust me on this! :)
Sharyn
Comment from judiverse
Great descriptive words bone lonely and soul cold. In her despair the narrator says she could become a "salt water Ophelia." It's a great thought that hearing the music makes her feel that happiness is not a myth. After seeing only the desolate beach, she now finds all manner of beauty--graceful birds, glorious colors. The music has awakened her senses to feel again and heal again. Beautifully expressed, and congratulations on the contest win! Your poem fit the bill. judiverse
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Great descriptive words bone lonely and soul cold. In her despair the narrator says she could become a "salt water Ophelia." It's a great thought that hearing the music makes her feel that happiness is not a myth. After seeing only the desolate beach, she now finds all manner of beauty--graceful birds, glorious colors. The music has awakened her senses to feel again and heal again. Beautifully expressed, and congratulations on the contest win! Your poem fit the bill. judiverse
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thx so much Judi! :) Sharyn
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You're so welcome. judi
Comment from Zinnia48
this is gorgeous! Favorite bone lonely
I stay soul cold
alone, wind-blown
half a whole
it's music
in the mists
and I can find it
through the miracle
that's me
thanks to you and your muse! Caroline
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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this is gorgeous! Favorite bone lonely
I stay soul cold
alone, wind-blown
half a whole
it's music
in the mists
and I can find it
through the miracle
that's me
thanks to you and your muse! Caroline
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thank you so much Caroline - I'm totally delighted with a special '6'!
Blessings
Sharyn
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
Way uplifting! If one could only guess the sole thing that could cheer each lonely heart.... For some, it might be as simple as "attitude". For others, much more complicated. Love the artwork! Wish I were sitting there right now.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Way uplifting! If one could only guess the sole thing that could cheer each lonely heart.... For some, it might be as simple as "attitude". For others, much more complicated. Love the artwork! Wish I were sitting there right now.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thx so much MW! :) Sharyn
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You are welcome, my friend. (Linda) MN :)
Comment from words
Well done.
I see why you won the contest.
Congratulations.
I especially liked:
I close my tired eyes
and feel the sun's nurture
soaking through my skin
and traveling
through the miracle
that's me
I do agree ... it is always the wonder of it all that revives me. Hugs, d
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Well done.
I see why you won the contest.
Congratulations.
I especially liked:
I close my tired eyes
and feel the sun's nurture
soaking through my skin
and traveling
through the miracle
that's me
I do agree ... it is always the wonder of it all that revives me. Hugs, d
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thx so much words d.! and "yes"! to the wonder! :)Sharyn
Comment from Curly Girly
Congratulations on your win, this was a lovely poem. Well written and well presented. You seem to be topping the charts lately - you must be very happy! CG
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Congratulations on your win, this was a lovely poem. Well written and well presented. You seem to be topping the charts lately - you must be very happy! CG
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thx so much CG - must be something about those weekends, hmm?
Should be more of them!
Blessings, :) Sharyn
Comment from fictionwriter
For me, music is just that healing and refreshing, bringing me back from despair and loneliness. I loved this poem and could really relate. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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For me, music is just that healing and refreshing, bringing me back from despair and loneliness. I loved this poem and could really relate. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thx so much fw - yep - music it is! :) Sharyn
Comment from Treischel
Beautifully sculpted words highlight this impressively imaged word painting on how a day at the beach can turn from depressed loneliness to joyful togetherness and how that colors the perceptions. Exquisitely written with perceptive pauses and tailored phrasing, this is a work of art.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Beautifully sculpted words highlight this impressively imaged word painting on how a day at the beach can turn from depressed loneliness to joyful togetherness and how that colors the perceptions. Exquisitely written with perceptive pauses and tailored phrasing, this is a work of art.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Bless you, Trischel! :) Sharyn
Comment from gazzagodbod
love to close my eyes in the heat of the sun too fabulous writing here my friend as always so enjoy reading your work thank you xxgazzaxx
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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love to close my eyes in the heat of the sun too fabulous writing here my friend as always so enjoy reading your work thank you xxgazzaxx
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thx so much gazza - bless you!:) Sharyn
