All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 " One Pure Note"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Maria C.
Wow, that is a great free verse. It has all the poetic devices needed to make the sound read well. Quite a few great examples of assonance with bone/lonely, soul cold, blown/whole, hold, so/from/home. Gorgeous simile with the sound likened to a finger running round the rim of sparkling crystal. Lovely imagery, and appeal to the senses.
Very uplifting. Good luck in the contest.
Maria C.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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Wow, that is a great free verse. It has all the poetic devices needed to make the sound read well. Quite a few great examples of assonance with bone/lonely, soul cold, blown/whole, hold, so/from/home. Gorgeous simile with the sound likened to a finger running round the rim of sparkling crystal. Lovely imagery, and appeal to the senses.
Very uplifting. Good luck in the contest.
Maria C.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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oh good! so glad you liked it Maria - I always think this kind of prompt can be really boring if there's no contrast to it - so glad you came on the journey with me!
Comment from mystery poet
This is like a well composed and orchestrated
single note symphony. Wow, I am somewhere in
orbit and hope I can fall back to earth slowly.
Wonderfully uplifting, for sure...Great entry
for this contest!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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This is like a well composed and orchestrated
single note symphony. Wow, I am somewhere in
orbit and hope I can fall back to earth slowly.
Wonderfully uplifting, for sure...Great entry
for this contest!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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lovely! so glad you enjoyed the journey with me, my dear - because that is what it is, isn't it? good to know we can travel from depths, to the heights - probably many times in our lifetimes! :)
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I absolutely love reads like this one.
Can we do this again sometime?
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You're ON!!! :)
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I'll be waiting!
Comment from mermaids
I like your free verse form and structure of words you use here. I also like how this poem is the voice of the author coming through clearly. The beach is indeed an uplifting place as your words describe.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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I like your free verse form and structure of words you use here. I also like how this poem is the voice of the author coming through clearly. The beach is indeed an uplifting place as your words describe.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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thx mermaids ... with a name like yours, you should know, right?
Comment from wanderlost
I thought about joining this competition, but I have a hard time writing uplifting poetry, But you dont! Good work!
Wanderlost
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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I thought about joining this competition, but I have a hard time writing uplifting poetry, But you dont! Good work!
Wanderlost
Comment Written 24-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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thx so much wanderlost - this is a prompt that's really easy to write "trite" for - so hopefully I managed to avoid that! Thx so much for reading AND enjoying, my dear!
Comment from Bill Schott
This does uplift as the words keep rising up and up. This poem skips through the mind forming images and occassionally flashing some alliteration or rhyme to keep it happy. Nice.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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This does uplift as the words keep rising up and up. This poem skips through the mind forming images and occassionally flashing some alliteration or rhyme to keep it happy. Nice.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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thx so much Bill!
Comment from Gregory K Shipman
A most exceptional display of a writer's skill and dexterity. From a lonely despair, to a single note of music and therein lies inspiration and optimism. The poem is rich in all the things that make a poem complete
I thank you for giving me this work to read... it has accomplished what good writing does... deliver great satisfaction
greg
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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A most exceptional display of a writer's skill and dexterity. From a lonely despair, to a single note of music and therein lies inspiration and optimism. The poem is rich in all the things that make a poem complete
I thank you for giving me this work to read... it has accomplished what good writing does... deliver great satisfaction
greg
Comment Written 24-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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aaah - you found it! good!
Comment from megg_2020
I think out of all the entries for this contest. Yours was the only one that uplifted at the end. I for one am going to throw a vote your way. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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I think out of all the entries for this contest. Yours was the only one that uplifted at the end. I for one am going to throw a vote your way. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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yeah, megg! thank you so much! this prompt can be awfully boring if you let it - I'd far rather take you on a journey, so by contrast, you get the message of the prompt ... subtlety is the order of the day I think yes?
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A well thought out premise in this free verse poem. I like your occasional rhymes and original descriptions (soul cold, a singing salt-water Ophelia, beach of empty skulls screaming gulls and madness). Excellent. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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A well thought out premise in this free verse poem. I like your occasional rhymes and original descriptions (soul cold, a singing salt-water Ophelia, beach of empty skulls screaming gulls and madness). Excellent. :) Nancy
Comment Written 24-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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thx so much Nancy!
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your poem is sensationally written with strong imagery painted by your words.
The art work is priceless you used.
In your poem you used many fabulous poetic devices of alliteration and metaohor.
You used a meaningful bitter-sweet narrrative,
And your musical rhythm is excellent
and catchy.
I enjoyed your lines:
but then I hear on ocean's frigid air
someone singing joy
high and pure enough
to crack the classic chandelier,
like a finger running round the rim
of sparkling crystal glass
in sunlight, and as those notes float
around me, I know
happiness
is not a myth,
it's music
in the mists
and I can find it
Wow, your poem is superbly uplifting.
I'd recommentx your poem titied One Pure Note to other reviewers.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
Keep on writing poetic gems,
Missy.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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Poet,
Your poem is sensationally written with strong imagery painted by your words.
The art work is priceless you used.
In your poem you used many fabulous poetic devices of alliteration and metaohor.
You used a meaningful bitter-sweet narrrative,
And your musical rhythm is excellent
and catchy.
I enjoyed your lines:
but then I hear on ocean's frigid air
someone singing joy
high and pure enough
to crack the classic chandelier,
like a finger running round the rim
of sparkling crystal glass
in sunlight, and as those notes float
around me, I know
happiness
is not a myth,
it's music
in the mists
and I can find it
Wow, your poem is superbly uplifting.
I'd recommentx your poem titied One Pure Note to other reviewers.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
Keep on writing poetic gems,
Missy.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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thx so much missy!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I never have a 6 left when I want one! This is such a beautiful, well written, amazing poem! The style, I haven't seen before, this makes me wonder if it is just yours, which I would applaud if it is. It works so well down the page, speeding up, then slowing down to speed again, making the reading exciting and heart pounding. If this is not a winner, then I don't know what is. Excellent!! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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I never have a 6 left when I want one! This is such a beautiful, well written, amazing poem! The style, I haven't seen before, this makes me wonder if it is just yours, which I would applaud if it is. It works so well down the page, speeding up, then slowing down to speed again, making the reading exciting and heart pounding. If this is not a winner, then I don't know what is. Excellent!! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 24-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2012
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aah - thank you sandra - this is my favorite writing style!
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I hope to see more of it. If I am not already a fan, I would like to be one, once I know who you are!!!
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you will - I'm surprised we haven't already fanned each other! will do as soon as the "blind" is taken off, promise!
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That way I will know who you are! Good luck in the contest, I will go and vote for you! xsx
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Hey, you are in the lead!! I'm the only one who has voted so far!! xsx
