Where Men Shouldn't Wander
The sequel to 'Too Close for Comfort'45 total reviews
Comment from ELumpkins
This IS GREAT, ALTHOUGH A BIT LONG IT DOES NOT GET BORING, IT RHYMES WELL AND IS PRESENTED AND READS VERY WELL. I GUESS WE SHOULD LEARN FROM THIS POST, DON'T MESS WITH THE FAIRIES. Good WORK
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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This IS GREAT, ALTHOUGH A BIT LONG IT DOES NOT GET BORING, IT RHYMES WELL AND IS PRESENTED AND READS VERY WELL. I GUESS WE SHOULD LEARN FROM THIS POST, DON'T MESS WITH THE FAIRIES. Good WORK
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Thanks for the great review. I know it's a bit long, but I couldn't figure out what to cut and still have it make sense. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from visionary1234
I enjoyed this totally fun write Cindy - I can just hear it being read (or sung) aloud to an entranced crowd (not necessarily of children - I think adults would be laughing with just as much delight). And of course, loved the "they got what they deserved" payback :)Sharyn
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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I enjoyed this totally fun write Cindy - I can just hear it being read (or sung) aloud to an entranced crowd (not necessarily of children - I think adults would be laughing with just as much delight). And of course, loved the "they got what they deserved" payback :)Sharyn
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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I'm glad you enjoyed it. This one was fun to write. Thanks for the kind words and the great review.
Comment from Angel Blessings
I absolutely love everything about this poem! The meaning, the flow, the rhyming, the presentation. I loved the meaning. Leave those darn Faires alone! LOL. Thank you for sharing!
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I absolutely love everything about this poem! The meaning, the flow, the rhyming, the presentation. I loved the meaning. Leave those darn Faires alone! LOL. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Thanks for the six! I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. Thanks again for the kind words and the wonderful review.
Comment from Mai Mai
They won't allow me to say Bravo! and leave it at that so now I have to babble on. This is superb. I love the story you told. It made me smile I love your rhyming scheme. It is beautifully done. Perfect work!!! Good luck.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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They won't allow me to say Bravo! and leave it at that so now I have to babble on. This is superb. I love the story you told. It made me smile I love your rhyming scheme. It is beautifully done. Perfect work!!! Good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. Thanks for the six and for your kind words.
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
Great Quatrain AABB rhyming scheme. Great flow. A story narrative that is very good and holds reader attention. The ending very amusing. The artwork goes well with the theme of this poem. Good rhyming with "paid" and "made". I especially liked this line: "Tsunamis in his stomach and tornados in his head." A great read! Enjoyable story!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Great Quatrain AABB rhyming scheme. Great flow. A story narrative that is very good and holds reader attention. The ending very amusing. The artwork goes well with the theme of this poem. Good rhyming with "paid" and "made". I especially liked this line: "Tsunamis in his stomach and tornados in his head." A great read! Enjoyable story!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. It was fun to write, and of course the last one just begged for a sequel. Thanks for the kind words and the great review.
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You are very welcome. MN :)
Comment from prayingpoet
This may be written for children in mind, but I sure enjoyed it as much as any child would. Great word pictures, great content, THANKS!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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This may be written for children in mind, but I sure enjoyed it as much as any child would. Great word pictures, great content, THANKS!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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The fairy poems are for everyone. The kids like them, but it seems the grownups do too. Glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the wonderful review.
Comment from ameen786
Hello Cindy, my friend, a wonderful story/poem with a great message; love the flow with excellent rhyme and rhythm; you beautifully brought home the message in the last stanza, thanks for sharing this delightful poem.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Hello Cindy, my friend, a wonderful story/poem with a great message; love the flow with excellent rhyme and rhythm; you beautifully brought home the message in the last stanza, thanks for sharing this delightful poem.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. It was fun to write. Thanks for the stars and the kind words.
Comment from rjuselius
haha. absolutely love this one. i love enchanting characters or creatures, they all remind us for having a little magic in our lives.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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haha. absolutely love this one. i love enchanting characters or creatures, they all remind us for having a little magic in our lives.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Six stars! Thanks! I'm glad you liked it that much. Thanks for an awesome review.
Comment from Ricky1024
Well... Whence i hadeth a read, I found, yes indeed utter laughter and thought of 'This person must be on weed!"
But yes indeed, it started to blend well and send well telling a tale and a fable that will work well at the Dinner table!
A lesson to be learnrd of "Capture and 'enrature!
Greed and lack of lust must always be follo9wed with love...
"IN...God...WE...TRUST!!!
But, if thee shalle'th must, and if ye shalle'th touch, then ye must be turned into a fine, powdered DUST!
Thanks and say a 'Fairy Prayer' to the ones that got themselves STUCK!.
Richard Edward smrkovsky.
Nice alliteration's, imagery, and as a non-prose piece, it linked wonderfully well!
Are you sure that you didn't tap my left hemi-sphere!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Well... Whence i hadeth a read, I found, yes indeed utter laughter and thought of 'This person must be on weed!"
But yes indeed, it started to blend well and send well telling a tale and a fable that will work well at the Dinner table!
A lesson to be learnrd of "Capture and 'enrature!
Greed and lack of lust must always be follo9wed with love...
"IN...God...WE...TRUST!!!
But, if thee shalle'th must, and if ye shalle'th touch, then ye must be turned into a fine, powdered DUST!
Thanks and say a 'Fairy Prayer' to the ones that got themselves STUCK!.
Richard Edward smrkovsky.
Nice alliteration's, imagery, and as a non-prose piece, it linked wonderfully well!
Are you sure that you didn't tap my left hemi-sphere!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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I'm glad you liked it. Yes, capturing them was a really bad idea. Thanks for the stars and the great review.
Comment from TKField
I liked this poetic fairy tale. What is the deal with fairies. These mythical beings turn up in more poems than you can shake a stick at. This one rhymed right along and told the story in a straightforward way that was easy to understand.
"She saw the strangest papers on the ground
Still more was hanging all around."
It should be "were hanging all around" since there is more than one paper.
This should be a big hit with the sippy cup crowd.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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I liked this poetic fairy tale. What is the deal with fairies. These mythical beings turn up in more poems than you can shake a stick at. This one rhymed right along and told the story in a straightforward way that was easy to understand.
"She saw the strangest papers on the ground
Still more was hanging all around."
It should be "were hanging all around" since there is more than one paper.
This should be a big hit with the sippy cup crowd.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thanks for catching the mistake. I really should know better. I'll fix it right away. Thanks for the wonderful review.
