All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Pineapple Paradise?"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Spike the second
Wonderful poem
And what a great subject. I know worldwide sonar has been a big problem with whales and dolphins beaching in sheer confusion> I thought our only problem now was North Koreans and terrorists and as far as I know North Korea are not likely to send subs all around the world and terrorists don't have them. I think our navies (here in the UK also) still believe they are in some sort of James Bond story.
Best of luck in the contest. I think you stand a great chance.
Spike
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Wonderful poem
And what a great subject. I know worldwide sonar has been a big problem with whales and dolphins beaching in sheer confusion> I thought our only problem now was North Koreans and terrorists and as far as I know North Korea are not likely to send subs all around the world and terrorists don't have them. I think our navies (here in the UK also) still believe they are in some sort of James Bond story.
Best of luck in the contest. I think you stand a great chance.
Spike
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Trust the US to REALLY screw things up Spike. :) Sharyn
Comment from Curtis Hatch
The poem is beautifully and eloquently written. The imagery is excellent and helps the mind's eye to see beyond the words. It is an exceptional work, and the graphics add to the allure of the piece.
Godspeed,
Curtis
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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The poem is beautifully and eloquently written. The imagery is excellent and helps the mind's eye to see beyond the words. It is an exceptional work, and the graphics add to the allure of the piece.
Godspeed,
Curtis
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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thanks so much Curtis :) Sharyn
Comment from tammipratt
I think the artwork is fabulous for this piece and complements it very well. A great story in this poem and I thought it was well told. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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I think the artwork is fabulous for this piece and complements it very well. A great story in this poem and I thought it was well told. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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thank you tammi :) I see you're a Brisbanite too! :) Sharyn
Comment from Spitfire
Wow! Your notes put this on a par with interpretative literature. Impressive movement from dark to light and then back again with focus on the whales. This is more than description, but a well-crafted universal message. Easy to see you are in love with your island.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Wow! Your notes put this on a par with interpretative literature. Impressive movement from dark to light and then back again with focus on the whales. This is more than description, but a well-crafted universal message. Easy to see you are in love with your island.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Wow back to you spits! Thank you very much! Finally managed to wrest a magic '6' from you, hmm? I'm so delighted that you liked this one - a weird prompt, but after a while rather fun to run with it.
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from Angel Blessings
I liked your presentation, the poem flowed very well. The color choice was good. Liked the overall meaning of your poetry. Very well done. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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I liked your presentation, the poem flowed very well. The color choice was good. Liked the overall meaning of your poetry. Very well done. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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thx so much Angel! :) Sharyn
Comment from GWHARGIS
Despite the rules and many regulations of this poem you managed to get something very meaningful and interesting out of it. The comparison of the Pineapple and the light and dark was very interesting. Nice job.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Despite the rules and many regulations of this poem you managed to get something very meaningful and interesting out of it. The comparison of the Pineapple and the light and dark was very interesting. Nice job.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Strange prompt, hmm? Thx so much GW! :) Sharyn
Comment from LucidDreem
I'm not too good at interpreting poetry, but I appreciated the imagery of this and the way it flowed. I liked the picture and color you chose, too. Very pineappley.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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I'm not too good at interpreting poetry, but I appreciated the imagery of this and the way it flowed. I liked the picture and color you chose, too. Very pineappley.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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What a fascinating review! :)
Comment from AprilShower
It seems we can make even beautiful places ugly. Animals often suffer from mankind's lack of care. This poem covers it all. Hawaii is a beautiful place. I like the shapes within your poem.
April
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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It seems we can make even beautiful places ugly. Animals often suffer from mankind's lack of care. This poem covers it all. Hawaii is a beautiful place. I like the shapes within your poem.
April
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thx April! :)
Comment from c_lucas
A wierd form of poetry, I will leave in the box. A unique structural poem with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read. In the late forties>earlies fifties, atom bombs were tested in isolated South Seas island, even having live troops within a few miles from Zero site. They needed the cold war to make nuclear weapons popular. Very well written. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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A wierd form of poetry, I will leave in the box. A unique structural poem with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read. In the late forties>earlies fifties, atom bombs were tested in isolated South Seas island, even having live troops within a few miles from Zero site. They needed the cold war to make nuclear weapons popular. Very well written. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you Charlie ... and thank you for improving your reviews, too dear! :)
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You're welcome, Sharlyn. Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
excellent alliteration throughout
strong selection of high-impact verbs
vivid descriptive detail that shows the compelling contrast between the paradise side of paradise and the seamy underbelly side
good internal rhyme in back in black
good alliteration in what price paradise
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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excellent alliteration throughout
strong selection of high-impact verbs
vivid descriptive detail that shows the compelling contrast between the paradise side of paradise and the seamy underbelly side
good internal rhyme in back in black
good alliteration in what price paradise
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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thx Brooke! :) Sharyn
