Comment from suep

Excellent

It's so much fun coming across things that look like something else. This is an amazing tangled tree trunk. You've penned a wonderful poem to accompany this great find. Your words 'wrinkled with age' and 'tangled root' fit this picture perfectly and I love the title and last line. Nice job with age/stage/root/foot. Very well done ... Best wishes in the contest! :)

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2016

Thank you suep. I am pleased you enjoyed it.

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

I like the message line in this short poetic presentation. I have nothing to suggest for it, as it needs no corrections. This was a very enjoyable poem to have read and written this response for... John

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2016

Thank you John.

Comment from playinaround

Excellent

Excellent play on words. Perfect picture as well. This is a contender in the competition. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest! Very clever! Have a great day!

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2016

Thank you playinaround.

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

HAHA! I like it. And yes, I can see how you found that picture inspiring - and amusing. The inspiration comes through in the message too! Well done.

Av

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2016

Thank you, Cumbrianlass, I am please you saw it and got a chuckle.

Comment from jppoet

Excellent

HI TOM, JUST FOUND IT AND WORTH THE HUNT. ONLY FOR A MORE GRACEFUL METRICAL DANCE OF ITS LAST LINES, I WOULD HAVE LOVED THEM MORE AS:

"AND YOU MAY HAVE A TANGLED ROOT"
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"PUT EVER FORWARD YOUR BEST FOOT."
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JOHN

 Comment Written 20-May-2013

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reply by the author on 20-May-2013

I liked your suggestion and made the change.

reply by jppoet on 20-May-2013

Good..jp

Comment from donette1914

Exceptional

this was so funny and so good!!! the photo fit so perfectly and this was so cute and I love this piece! thankyou for sharing this wonderful poem.

 Comment Written 20-May-2013

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reply by the author on 20-May-2013

Thank you so much donetee. It pleases me that you liked it. You may have noticed, it is one of several poems in a book I am writing where the photograph takes on animated characteristics. You might enjoy some of the others too.

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Good

I like this poem; it is succinct and to the point. I think it has a good message to share. It almost feels like a poetic fable with the way certain words are capitalized. I love the photo. I think I might add a comma after "Root" and that's all I would change. Nice!

 Comment Written 20-May-2013

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reply by the author on 20-May-2013

Thank you crystieCookie, did you intend then to give a 4 rating?

reply by CrystieCookie999 on 20-May-2013

I guess a 4, I wish they had a 4.5; I might end up giving more 5's in the future.

reply by the author on 20-May-2013

OK, just calibrating your rating criteria. I see you are an English BA, and established author, new to the site. Some reviewers accidentally hit the wrong key. Just making sure that you gave out what you intended. Welcome to the site!
By the way. I took you advice and added the comma.

Comment from Nanette Mary

Excellent

Hullo Treischel ....

Having seen several of these ancient tangled-root trees during a visit to Japan, your words brought back great memories and thus gave life to what you have written.
With your well-chosen words, this is good but I believe there is room for a bit of improvement in the rhythm of your last line.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012

Thanks

Comment from Thatguypk

Excellent

This combination of photographic art and poetry works very well indeed. It would be an interesting experiment to see if another writer could take the same images and come up with a completely different interpretation. :-)

But I do like yours!

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012

I find roots a wonderful subject matter. There's another one in my book called The Watching Whistler you might find amazing.

Comment from catatrance

Excellent

I liked your poem because it conveys the harsh reality of one reaching old age and withering gradually, along with a pinch of humor. Great work Treischel.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012

Thanks for your nice review. Well all get there sooner or later.