Goldilocks and the Three Bears
The acrostic version43 total reviews
Comment from Joannforsberg
Goldilocks and the Three Bears Congratulations! I truly enjoyed your poem, and did not see that ending coming. I wrote Balderdash in this contest. It was a fun contest to do. Blessings, JoAnn
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Goldilocks and the Three Bears Congratulations! I truly enjoyed your poem, and did not see that ending coming. I wrote Balderdash in this contest. It was a fun contest to do. Blessings, JoAnn
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Thanks, JoAnn - yes, I had fun with this and I remember your entry well.
Steve
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lolā?¦ mine was my first attempt at writing something dark.
Blessings to you, Jo
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Kiwisteveh ...
First of all - congratulations on winning this Contest.
You certainly have a most original ending for the well-loved story of the Three Bears.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Hullo Kiwisteveh ...
First of all - congratulations on winning this Contest.
You certainly have a most original ending for the well-loved story of the Three Bears.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Thank you, Nanette Mary - glad you enjoyed my revised fairy story.
Steve
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
A delightful twist on the tale of "Goldilocks and the Three Bears". The artwork goes very well with this poem. I really like these lines as I always wondered why she had never knocked--LOL!--"In spite of knowing it was sin,
Like a thief she breezed right in." So now I know, the devil made her do it. Great job!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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A delightful twist on the tale of "Goldilocks and the Three Bears". The artwork goes very well with this poem. I really like these lines as I always wondered why she had never knocked--LOL!--"In spite of knowing it was sin,
Like a thief she breezed right in." So now I know, the devil made her do it. Great job!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Thank you!
Steve
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You are welcome. MN :)
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This would be the best acrostic I have ever read! Your rhyming words are clever and never miss a beat. It is fun but is also an amusing and entertaining tale. My very best wishes for the competition.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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This would be the best acrostic I have ever read! Your rhyming words are clever and never miss a beat. It is fun but is also an amusing and entertaining tale. My very best wishes for the competition.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Thank you - high praise indeed. And yes, it was a winner.
Steve
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My congratulations! Well-deserved. G
Comment from rjuselius
hahaha. lol. this is such a witty piece of poetry that it really doesn't need praisies, just the poem will stand on its own.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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hahaha. lol. this is such a witty piece of poetry that it really doesn't need praisies, just the poem will stand on its own.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thanks for the great review and all the stars.
Steve
Comment from Nhala
Excellent job telling that classic story in that format, making it work and rhyme throughout. The cursive writing is a nice touch and you write this in a throwback fashion similar to the original, very good!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Excellent job telling that classic story in that format, making it work and rhyme throughout. The cursive writing is a nice touch and you write this in a throwback fashion similar to the original, very good!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your Acrostic poem is epic and magnificently written with terrific imagery.
I'm sorry I make a rule never to give a six on blind entries because I want to know the poet's or writer's name.
The art work is wicked cool you used
You used excellent rhyme, great alliteration and very fine metaphor usage in your Acrostic story poem. Goldy is a thief who breaks in, eats their food and tears the place up. She needs to be arrested for B & E.
I enjoyed your lines:
Like a thief she breezed right in.
Oatmeal porridge sat there steaming;
Could it be that she was dreaming?
Kids, you know that this was wrong,
She supped a plateful ere too long
I liked your last stanza or Bears word:
Become quite cross if someone ruins
Everything they planned to eat
And Baby's darling little seat.
Regrettably the sleeping sinner
Served the bears for early dinner!
I adore this Acrostic.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
You will be getting my vote.
Would I recommend this poet's Acrostic poem to other reviewers? Heck yes!
Missy.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Poet,
Your Acrostic poem is epic and magnificently written with terrific imagery.
I'm sorry I make a rule never to give a six on blind entries because I want to know the poet's or writer's name.
The art work is wicked cool you used
You used excellent rhyme, great alliteration and very fine metaphor usage in your Acrostic story poem. Goldy is a thief who breaks in, eats their food and tears the place up. She needs to be arrested for B & E.
I enjoyed your lines:
Like a thief she breezed right in.
Oatmeal porridge sat there steaming;
Could it be that she was dreaming?
Kids, you know that this was wrong,
She supped a plateful ere too long
I liked your last stanza or Bears word:
Become quite cross if someone ruins
Everything they planned to eat
And Baby's darling little seat.
Regrettably the sleeping sinner
Served the bears for early dinner!
I adore this Acrostic.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
You will be getting my vote.
Would I recommend this poet's Acrostic poem to other reviewers? Heck yes!
Missy.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you, Missy - your vote helped make this a winner!
Steve
Comment from McMurry903
Beautifully done, I love this style and you used it well. This was a fun and humorous twist to the old fairy tale and I enjoyed it very much. Great job and I wish you the best in this contest!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Beautifully done, I love this style and you used it well. This was a fun and humorous twist to the old fairy tale and I enjoyed it very much. Great job and I wish you the best in this contest!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from eberry4
Oh. yes! Most fairy tales are just ridiculous because they would never happen. I definately like yours better! This was flowy and funny.Great job!Please do another one soon....Eydie
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Oh. yes! Most fairy tales are just ridiculous because they would never happen. I definately like yours better! This was flowy and funny.Great job!Please do another one soon....Eydie
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
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you're welcome...E
Comment from mshirachot
BRAVO!!! This was absolutely delightful! I enjoyed it so much more than the old traditional tale making Goldi out to be some sort of heroine. And those poor maligned bears...oh my! The rhythm and rhyme of this is great and you've went the additional step to make everyone aware that Goldi had some sin issues!
Great writing! Best wishes with this writing prompt.
Blessings to you,
Marsha
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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BRAVO!!! This was absolutely delightful! I enjoyed it so much more than the old traditional tale making Goldi out to be some sort of heroine. And those poor maligned bears...oh my! The rhythm and rhyme of this is great and you've went the additional step to make everyone aware that Goldi had some sin issues!
Great writing! Best wishes with this writing prompt.
Blessings to you,
Marsha
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012
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Thank you, Marsha - glad you enjoyed.
Don't we all have 'sin issues'?
Steve
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LOL...Steve! You are correct. We all do...and sometimes I feel like Paul when he said, "I am the chief of sinners".
Blessings!
Marsha
