Smile
A beautiful smile is refreshing7 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Smiles are so very important to reassure us. I admired your use of alliteration in this 5-7-5 to add to its intensity. I liked the stressed "-ed" sounds as well. Best wishes in the contest. Smiles- Joan
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Smiles are so very important to reassure us. I admired your use of alliteration in this 5-7-5 to add to its intensity. I liked the stressed "-ed" sounds as well. Best wishes in the contest. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
Comment from hubba marwa
Very nicw pooem,the choice of words is simple but really touching which grips the reader all along , For me your poem creates maximum of effect with the minimum of words !!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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Very nicw pooem,the choice of words is simple but really touching which grips the reader all along , For me your poem creates maximum of effect with the minimum of words !!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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thanks for your precios comments.
love.
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Pleasure !
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Pleasure !
Comment from Bundhoo
Great ! Great ! Grreat!
Your poem is nice but why any pic is not here.I think it will be perfect if pic will be here.Your poem is short but nice.I wish you best of luck for the contest.
Regards Bundhoo!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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Great ! Great ! Grreat!
Your poem is nice but why any pic is not here.I think it will be perfect if pic will be here.Your poem is short but nice.I wish you best of luck for the contest.
Regards Bundhoo!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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Thanks for your precious comments
Love
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You are welcome,are u from Pakistan?
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yea,I M PAKISTANI.
HOW you judged?
REGARDS.
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I think Aramn is a Pakistani name!
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
This is very lovely in its simplicity. Is calmed two syllables? I love that second line: "deep, doleful, deserted heart." I also like the use of punctuation in the piece. Good work and good luck in the contest! Holly
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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This is very lovely in its simplicity. Is calmed two syllables? I love that second line: "deep, doleful, deserted heart." I also like the use of punctuation in the piece. Good work and good luck in the contest! Holly
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Thanks for your precious comments
Love.
Comment from zlp22
A smile never killed anyone. Good word flow, all the rules of the contest were followed. I think a picture would have made a good lead in. Good luck.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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A smile never killed anyone. Good word flow, all the rules of the contest were followed. I think a picture would have made a good lead in. Good luck.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Thanks for your precious comments.
Love.
Comment from sweetfeather
Wow, I really liked your poem! You caught the feeling of the moment of the smile. You show in essece the power of the smile. "Deep, doleful,deserted heart" what a fantastic verbal flow this hasd! You did a great job!!!!!!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Wow, I really liked your poem! You caught the feeling of the moment of the smile. You show in essece the power of the smile. "Deep, doleful,deserted heart" what a fantastic verbal flow this hasd! You did a great job!!!!!!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Thanks for your precious comments,
lot of smile.
Love
Comment from terry drake
You have a 5-7-4 poem in response to the challenge for a 5-7-5 syllable count three line poem. You need to look at your last line one more time and resubmit.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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You have a 5-7-4 poem in response to the challenge for a 5-7-5 syllable count three line poem. You need to look at your last line one more time and resubmit.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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Thanks for your kind review. The word was calmed, my editor mistook it with pleased.
