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What is to come after the first, then last breath.
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Comment from
jcon92
Fits the 5-7-5 format. The display works well to your purpose. I liked the simplicity of your poem. Read it a few times and I'm not sure of the message you're trying to convene but that could very well be through fault of my own. Not a bad poem by any means.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2012
Thank you! I will alter it!
Comment from
terry drake
Well I don't know what the gate has to due with your senryu three line pome. You qualify for the 5-7-5 challenge and the poem discussed light.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2012
I really appreciate the feedback! I will try my very best to alter it!
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