Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from suneagle
Fascinating reading, with good suspense and a great hook to have readers clamouring for more.
She made the sign of the cross[, and] then reached for the knob.
She waited for a reaction; and when none came, she smiled with satisfaction.
(The conjunction "and" is not necessary following a semi-colon.)
She noted it was set at [seventy-two] degrees.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Fascinating reading, with good suspense and a great hook to have readers clamouring for more.
She made the sign of the cross[, and] then reached for the knob.
She waited for a reaction; and when none came, she smiled with satisfaction.
(The conjunction "and" is not necessary following a semi-colon.)
She noted it was set at [seventy-two] degrees.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Hi, suneagle. Thank you for your perceptive and helpful review. I really appreciate the support. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from suneagle
Fascinating reading, with good suspense and a great hook to have readers clamouring for more.
She made the sign of the cross[, and] then reached for the knob.
She waited for a reaction; and when none came, she smiled with satisfaction.
(The conjunction "and" is not necessary following a semi-colon.)
She noted it was set at [seventy-two] degrees.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Fascinating reading, with good suspense and a great hook to have readers clamouring for more.
She made the sign of the cross[, and] then reached for the knob.
She waited for a reaction; and when none came, she smiled with satisfaction.
(The conjunction "and" is not necessary following a semi-colon.)
She noted it was set at [seventy-two] degrees.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Thanks again! Apparently this review went through twice. Don't think I've ever seen that happen before LOL. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from JW
Hmm. It seems like Mrs. Findley did not run across Casper the Friendly Ghost. :-)
You did a really good job of writing this chapter and leaving the reader in suspense.
No spags were found. JW
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Hmm. It seems like Mrs. Findley did not run across Casper the Friendly Ghost. :-)
You did a really good job of writing this chapter and leaving the reader in suspense.
No spags were found. JW
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Hi, Jonathon. Thanks for my laugh for the day. Appreciate your review and support, my friend. Take care.. Bev
Comment from Showboat
Hey Bev,
Oh, very good job on this one! Kept the creep in creepy, for sure! I grew up in a very old town in New Jersey and we had several houses reputed to be haunted, one called the Hermitage. Very scary stuff.
Very enjoyable chapter, my friend.
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Hey Bev,
Oh, very good job on this one! Kept the creep in creepy, for sure! I grew up in a very old town in New Jersey and we had several houses reputed to be haunted, one called the Hermitage. Very scary stuff.
Very enjoyable chapter, my friend.
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Hi, Gayle. Thanks so much, my friend! I really appreciate you taking time out to read the chapter. And your generous review is most appreciated, as well. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Writingfundimension,
By the sound of it, the priest needs to call in an exorcist sharpish. He's got something really nasty infesting his Rectory.
Good hook at the end there, now we await the next installment to read what has terrified the dog and the housekeeper.
Hopefully she's suffered nothing fatal.
Patrick
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Hi Writingfundimension,
By the sound of it, the priest needs to call in an exorcist sharpish. He's got something really nasty infesting his Rectory.
Good hook at the end there, now we await the next installment to read what has terrified the dog and the housekeeper.
Hopefully she's suffered nothing fatal.
Patrick
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Hello, Patrick. Thank you so much for the great review. Yes, an exocism is planned down the road a bit. I really appreciate your support! Just curious, have you ever witnessed one?
Warmest regards, Bev
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Yes, scary. There were no 'manifestations,' but some very strange things happened during the service. Things broke, fell down or moved. The temperature went down - altough that might have been psychsomatic, there was apparently no actual change in temperature. Normally an exorcist doesn't take company with him, as there is a risk to the 'assistant' but on this occassion he needed someone to carry some of the 'equipment' and hold the book. The preparation included making a full confession beforehand, followed by my performing a rite of penance, and then absolution. Plus I was warned to focus my thoughts on the things I was carry and 'pray, pray, pray. Don't think of anything, don't react to anything, focus on praying.'
As I said, scary. Ghost busters it was not, but the 'rite' involved candles, readings from the Bible, sprinkling with holy water - lots of it - and the invocation of Christ's help in overcoming the evil present. It was really quite simple, very quietly delivered, with no big movie style drama, just a 'spiritual' cleansing of each room and everything in it.
Patrick
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Hi, Patrick. Thanks so much for sharing this event with me. It is as you say, very essential that the thoughts not wander during the ritual. Apparently, the most exorcisms peformed by the Catholic church, according to the writing of a priest who was recently trained in Rome, take place in Italy. The thinking is that it is because of curses and satanic worship (which the freemasons have been accused of). I do know that Padre Pio had quite a few go-arounds with demons and they were quite violent in nature. I think that the energy that we call demonic is an energy that consists of many elements and is fed by belief. Anyway, I'm going on here. Thanks again, Patrick.
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One reason they try to exclude anyone under 30 from such rituals ... The mind is too easily distracted.
Patrick
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If you have access to an UK "Book of Common Prayer" (1662 version) try looking up the Service of Comminations - otherwise known as 'Laying a curse' or the Invocation of God's Wrath upon unrepentant sinners.
Patrick
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Thanks, Patrick. I do have the Catholic rite for exorcism, very fascinating reading. Amazing how some of these guys can keep this up for hours. And you're right about the age. I'm not sure I could keep focused that long with the kind of pressure applied. Thanks again! Bev
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Oh goodness, I am so not good with the scary stuff. This scared the daylights out of me. Thank goodness its daylight.
Wow. Well penned as always, though I am always impressed with your ability to hold the reader captive as we read.
Great cliff hanger, my friend.
Thanks for sharing an exceptional work.
Maureen
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Oh goodness, I am so not good with the scary stuff. This scared the daylights out of me. Thank goodness its daylight.
Wow. Well penned as always, though I am always impressed with your ability to hold the reader captive as we read.
Great cliff hanger, my friend.
Thanks for sharing an exceptional work.
Maureen
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Maureen, thank you dear lady for this wonderfully supportive and generous review. I'm sorry to scare such a sweet lady as yourself, I truly am. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is superb descriptive writing, Bev..
I would happily read on if you'd written
more - but have chosen to leave us hanging
in suspense - I hope the housekeeper
survives.
You're such a natural at painting
the scene and showing actions that make
the story flow so easily.
I guess I've said just about everything there is to say about your work -- so I'll let the six speak for itself.
Margaret
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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This is superb descriptive writing, Bev..
I would happily read on if you'd written
more - but have chosen to leave us hanging
in suspense - I hope the housekeeper
survives.
You're such a natural at painting
the scene and showing actions that make
the story flow so easily.
I guess I've said just about everything there is to say about your work -- so I'll let the six speak for itself.
Margaret
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Maragaret, such praise from of a superb descriptive writer such as yourself, is truly humbling. I appreciate your generosity, both in following my story and in sharing your insights. You are really a most gracious lady! Hugs, Bev
Comment from TammyGail
Excellent work once again Bev - you always weave such such amazing inkling linking them together and crafting something grand - thanks for the read - always enjoyed your words stands in a league all its own - thanks for sharing
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Excellent work once again Bev - you always weave such such amazing inkling linking them together and crafting something grand - thanks for the read - always enjoyed your words stands in a league all its own - thanks for sharing
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Tammy, thank you so much for this totally gracious and generous review. Your words mean so much!! Bless you ... Bev
Comment from rushingwater
Woo hoo this is quite compelling and interesting. I am just jumping in and appreciated the back ground information. Your detail was excellent in creating the images to make this story come to life. Love the characters and how you added even more to Mrs.Findley. Storyline held solid, clear and concise. Great write ..
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Woo hoo this is quite compelling and interesting. I am just jumping in and appreciated the back ground information. Your detail was excellent in creating the images to make this story come to life. Love the characters and how you added even more to Mrs.Findley. Storyline held solid, clear and concise. Great write ..
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Hi, rushingwater. Thank you for choosing to read my chapter! I very much appreciate your generous and supportive review. Glad you enjoyed the write. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did a great job writing this chapter where the rectory's housekeeper battles what she thinks is a ghost to get into the rectory and then is attacked and thrown against the closet. will father brian make it to her in time?
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did a great job writing this chapter where the rectory's housekeeper battles what she thinks is a ghost to get into the rectory and then is attacked and thrown against the closet. will father brian make it to her in time?
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much, sweet. I really appreciate your sticking with my story. And your generous review is most kind! Warm regards, Bev
