A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "A Can of Worms!"Metre ... Freeverse
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Comment from juliedickson55
I can't pretend to understand this poem.
It's definitely interesting, alternating between
crumple, crumple and the rather macabre words following...
very clever.
good alliteration:
Desperately disparaging
swathing, squirming
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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I can't pretend to understand this poem.
It's definitely interesting, alternating between
crumple, crumple and the rather macabre words following...
very clever.
good alliteration:
Desperately disparaging
swathing, squirming
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Excellent, much appreciate.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very well written poem I like the format and the picture also the structure and the flow of the poem when read out thank you for sharing
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This is a very well written poem I like the format and the picture also the structure and the flow of the poem when read out thank you for sharing
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Much thank yous...
Comment from Cumbrianlass
This is really good, Bic. Fanastic use of words, and I like the metaphor of the worms - you've exploited it with great skill.
Good job.
Av
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This is really good, Bic. Fanastic use of words, and I like the metaphor of the worms - you've exploited it with great skill.
Good job.
Av
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
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Thanks AV much appreciate...
Comment from J. Dark
This is deliciously clever and a masterful weaving of words. The honesty and message within left me in enjoyable bittersweet discomfort! Possibly my favourite work of yours so far and I would have loved to have awarded you a six for this!
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D :-)
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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This is deliciously clever and a masterful weaving of words. The honesty and message within left me in enjoyable bittersweet discomfort! Possibly my favourite work of yours so far and I would have loved to have awarded you a six for this!
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D :-)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Excellent Mrs D glad you enjoyed...
Comment from TammyGail
That's some imagery you have with your ink B.. It was a perfect fit for sure and indeed you are correct sometimes that can is best left closed - thanks for sharing always a pleasure
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That's some imagery you have with your ink B.. It was a perfect fit for sure and indeed you are correct sometimes that can is best left closed - thanks for sharing always a pleasure
Comment Written 10-Oct-2012
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Excellent T... much appreciate your appraisals and critiques as you are one of the queens of verse who opened my mind to another realm... cheers T.
Comment from CheyLGwriter
People really make you feel like this with all the mask and layers they hide behind. When we open ourselves to truly being seen, we may find more blessings than we know. I really enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.
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People really make you feel like this with all the mask and layers they hide behind. When we open ourselves to truly being seen, we may find more blessings than we know. I really enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2012
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Excellent...
Comment from sunnilicious
That's a horror thriller poem. It's so... graphic. Gory details. Not enjoyable to read as that stuff is yucky. It seems very Halloween.
Excellent work.
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That's a horror thriller poem. It's so... graphic. Gory details. Not enjoyable to read as that stuff is yucky. It seems very Halloween.
Excellent work.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2012
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Excellent, much appreciate.
Comment from c_lucas
The saying, "Opening a can of worms," refers to asking for trouble. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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The saying, "Opening a can of worms," refers to asking for trouble. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Thanks Charlie... much appreciated.
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You're welcome, BP. Charlie
Comment from megclare
Great sustained metaphor that gives new depth to the old saying "a can of worms". Some vivid phrases, " Unearth
prosthetic beauty." and "writhing
worms of canned intent;" struck me in particular. An interesting, if not a comfortable, read.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2012
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Great sustained metaphor that gives new depth to the old saying "a can of worms". Some vivid phrases, " Unearth
prosthetic beauty." and "writhing
worms of canned intent;" struck me in particular. An interesting, if not a comfortable, read.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2012
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Excellent just as its meant to be...
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes I liked this I haven't heard this expression in a long time you could be opening a can of worms the meaning being sometimes things are best left alone well done my friend this reads very well regards Jill
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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2012
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Yes I liked this I haven't heard this expression in a long time you could be opening a can of worms the meaning being sometimes things are best left alone well done my friend this reads very well regards Jill
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Comment Written 10-Oct-2012
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Thanks much appreciated...
