The Tale of Ichabod Crane
A Halloween, almost quatrain.23 total reviews
Comment from juliedickson55
Wow, I like this...retelling of the story, in poetic format, nicely done.
The different quatrain type lines, good rhymes and flow in your poem.
It reads almost like a ballad, a nice tale with a twist.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Wow, I like this...retelling of the story, in poetic format, nicely done.
The different quatrain type lines, good rhymes and flow in your poem.
It reads almost like a ballad, a nice tale with a twist.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Good Morning Julie. Thank you for the read and review. This is a new form that I am trying out and I appreciate your input. I wasn't sure if people were going to like it. I have always loved this story and it was fun to smoosh it into verse. Oh, and thank you for the stars too. --Wendy
Comment from Chris Tee
I think the shortened last line in each quatrain here is very affective and interesting. This is indeed an absolutely wonderful piece of poetry and I wonder why it is not in the contest. Well done indeed.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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I think the shortened last line in each quatrain here is very affective and interesting. This is indeed an absolutely wonderful piece of poetry and I wonder why it is not in the contest. Well done indeed.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Thank you Chris. I didn't notice that the preview button was on "no"--something that had never happened before--and when I went to save it, it published. I had just moved it onto a general page because I my computer was going in for a dusting and cleaning and I wanted to get to it. Alas, once published, no contest. So I wrote another and put it in the contest. Thanks for asking though. I had fun squishing one of my favorite stories into verse. I also appreciate the input on the new form I am trying it out here and I was looking for that specifically in reviews.
Comment from squid152
You did an excellent job retelling this classic tale. The story scared me as a child and still scares me as an adult. Great pic!-Squid
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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You did an excellent job retelling this classic tale. The story scared me as a child and still scares me as an adult. Great pic!-Squid
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my words. The story has long been a favorite of mine and it was fun to try to squish it into verse. I am trying out a new meter form with the 8-8-8-4 stanza. What did you think?
Comment from artemis53
What a great piece, rosehill. The Legend of Sleepy hollow has always been a favorite of mine and you have whittled it down beautifully in this poem.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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What a great piece, rosehill. The Legend of Sleepy hollow has always been a favorite of mine and you have whittled it down beautifully in this poem.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my words. The story has long been a favorite of mine. I remember how it used to give me chills when my father read it and I never really satisfied my mind as to who was really on that horse. It was fun to try to squish it into verse. I am trying out a new meter form with the 8-8-8-4 stanza. I would love to know what you think.
Comment from adewpearl
excellent abcb rhyming, and I like the cadence of the 8/8/8/4
good consonance of hard C sounds in cloaked/black/sky/screams/dark
good alliteration in hollow haunt
prowl - perfect verb choice
good alliteration in ghosts and goblins and in time for
tales
vivid, spooky descriptive detail
You create a scary atmosphere most effectively
Love the ending :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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excellent abcb rhyming, and I like the cadence of the 8/8/8/4
good consonance of hard C sounds in cloaked/black/sky/screams/dark
good alliteration in hollow haunt
prowl - perfect verb choice
good alliteration in ghosts and goblins and in time for
tales
vivid, spooky descriptive detail
You create a scary atmosphere most effectively
Love the ending :-) Brooke
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Thanks so much Brooke. This is the poem I was referring to in the question I asked you earlier. The form seems so suited to tale telling. I originally wrote this with a monotetra style fourth line repeat. It was eerie enough, but it slowed down the feel-- particularly in the chase. So, I cut it in half. I will try another in this form and see if it still works. Again, I appreciate your taking the time from your own writing to read and review mine.
Comment from visionary1234
Excellent galloping ballad with a really interesting quatrain form - I like the four feet at the end of each line ... moves us through very quickly this wonderful legend of ghosts & mystery!!! Great write!!!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Excellent galloping ballad with a really interesting quatrain form - I like the four feet at the end of each line ... moves us through very quickly this wonderful legend of ghosts & mystery!!! Great write!!!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review this. It is a bit of an experiment. I wrote it originally with the fourth line having the repeat refrain of a monotetra. It got good reviews, but I just wasn't satisfied with the form and thought I'd try it this way. I appreciate the mention of it.
Comment from EMB
Well, this was certainly a great piece, and I couldn't help but place Christopher Walken in this piece. I'm wondering if the film had any inspiration toward this piece. At any rate, I loved the narration and the rhyming scheme.
Very nice work here.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Well, this was certainly a great piece, and I couldn't help but place Christopher Walken in this piece. I'm wondering if the film had any inspiration toward this piece. At any rate, I loved the narration and the rhyming scheme.
Very nice work here.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Good afternoon Mr Edward M. I never saw the movie, but the story was one of my childhood favorites. Disney did a cartoon version, but no one had done a poem that I knew of. So, I decided to try and scrunch it into verse. I thank you for the read and the review and for letting me know what you thought of the rhyme scheme that I am trying out.
Comment from Nhala
This one grew on me in the reading, in saying that I am referring to the syncopated rhymes in each fourth line. Quite a few are abbreviated abruptly and seem out of time with the flow of the rest of the lines instead of playing all the way out, feel me? But I ended up liking that about it just fine and gave it an altogether new quality I wasn't expecting from this classic tell. And you tell it very well. Sets the tone for the season nicely, well done!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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This one grew on me in the reading, in saying that I am referring to the syncopated rhymes in each fourth line. Quite a few are abbreviated abruptly and seem out of time with the flow of the rest of the lines instead of playing all the way out, feel me? But I ended up liking that about it just fine and gave it an altogether new quality I wasn't expecting from this classic tell. And you tell it very well. Sets the tone for the season nicely, well done!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the very honest and succinct review. This is a new format that I am testing here. I originally wrote the piece with a monotetra style, repeat in the fourth line. It has been posted both ways now and I am comparing the reviews. Again, thank you for giving me reasons why instead of just a, "yes!" or some stars. Much appreciated.
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ahh that makes total sense to me. It had that experimental quality to it that was very noticable because I knew you wrote at a calibur as high as you prefer, if you catch my meaning. Stylish. But you could go more traditional, and I don't know either which is better, heh gluck! And good reading. =)
Comment from GWHARGIS
What a great retelling of the Washington Irving story. I love the way you summarized the story in verse. I think more people would have read it if your version were out there. It was good old fashioned scary poetry. Nice job.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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What a great retelling of the Washington Irving story. I love the way you summarized the story in verse. I think more people would have read it if your version were out there. It was good old fashioned scary poetry. Nice job.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for the read and review of my poem. It is one of my favorite scary tales and I had great fun trying to squish it into verse. I may go back at some point and try to get the Hessian in there more securely, but didn't want it to turn into the poetic version of War and Peace. Thanks for the stars!
Comment from terry drake
Your poem was extremely delightful and fulfills the challenge of Halloween stories and excels in the delivery. Your absurdity rings false wisdom through the lines just as Edgar Allen Poe's raven screamed nevermore. You should be proud of this piece and publish it for the next generation to read and behold.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Your poem was extremely delightful and fulfills the challenge of Halloween stories and excels in the delivery. Your absurdity rings false wisdom through the lines just as Edgar Allen Poe's raven screamed nevermore. You should be proud of this piece and publish it for the next generation to read and behold.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Wow, Terry, I so appreciate your kind words and the 6th star. This story has always been a favorite of mine and it was fun to try and mold it into a poem. As to the publishing, I believe the saying is, "From your mouth to God's ear."
