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Comment from Chris Tee
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A night out in Paris alone becomes a tender love affair in no time and the passion is played out so beautifully. Great piece of poetic art here. Well done indeed!

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
    Thank you Chris - this was a fun one to write!
Comment from Meta~Mark
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Alone,in Paris is simply a gem and a creative and colorful masterpiece with originality and a style all it's,own the,words,and format flow perfectly and love this.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
    Thx MM!
Comment from Silverlock
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Ooh la la tres bon!
Well that's about the limit of my french!! LOL
Sensuous and evocative verse with great imagery - very nice.

Good luck in the contest ;)

Barb

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
    Mais merci ma cherie ... and now you've reached my limit too!
Comment from alexisleech
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Bravo! Being a lover of the French, or should I say, a French lover, your beautifully erotic poem expressed the excitement and intimacy of a first meeting so well. My eyes raced down the page! Good luck in the competition, you deserve to do well. Alexis x

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
    Merci Alexis! mon plaisir!
Comment from juliedickson55
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Quite steamy!

Nice form and visuals in this love poem.
This could easily way-lay into erotica poetry without much coaxing.
'I feel your heat
and draw away

you feel it too
I know you do"

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
    steamy is what it's meant to be Julie, so it's all good! :)
Comment from jjstar
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Oh my....oo la la, baby....what a seductive piece in the most romantic setting in the world! A perfect story in a poem. It was sizzling hot and perfectly worded! Passionate love poem just doesn't cut it for this piece. Wonderful!

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2012


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
    hey thanks jj! tried to follow the prompt and had a criminal amount of fun doing it! :)
reply by jjstar on 04-Oct-2012
    I'll bet you did..I'll say it again...ooo la la!
Comment from sunnilicious
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Well the Number 1 condom brand is in France. So if it happens just be safe about it. It's not my personality, but I like hearing wild stories. Sensually romantic poem about a private moment. Well thought out. Descriptive with vivid imagery. Nicely done. Great job!

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2012


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
    thx sunni - you do know this is fiction, right? sizzling, in black & white ???
Comment from Hitcher
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I loved the direction to were going, the cascading lines was a nice touch, the visuals were slowly starting to steam and I was getting ready for the next seductive move and it stopped... Why? I would have taken it all the way friend, but that's me, I always take it all the way :) that said you pulled me in instantly and held my attention throughout and I loved what I read so well done and good luck!

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2012


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
    aaah, but the prompt tells you otherwise Hitcher! in the style of old black & white movies, right? they have one steamy kiss, then politely close the bedroom door, leaving the rest to your imagination!
reply by Hitcher on 03-Oct-2012
    ha ha, Yes that is true, but you can still go all the way without being O.T.T and in need of a warning friend, and like i said; that's just me :) I still enjoyed every word and every seductive visual...
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
    you don't think it was too long? I was just thinking of getting my red pen out ...
reply by Hitcher on 03-Oct-2012
    There is nothing wrong with the length friend, I'm one who loves lengthy poetry, it showcases the poets talents, of which you have many :)
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
    oh thank you - I tend to write "long" but am always afraid of being long winded!! :)
reply by Hitcher on 04-Oct-2012
    When your write with a deft touch as you do friend there is no such thing as too long. I just posted a little... something that goes all the way, but it does not cross any lines friend, check it out... should it have a warning on it or not? i think not but i have placed one on anyway, love to hear what you think :)
Comment from Tina McKala
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This was definitely a passionate write! :) I loved how you were repeating "i don`t know you", it provided the poem with some kind of a mystery and anticipation. Great job! Tina

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2012


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
    Thanks so much Tina - glad you enjoyed some purple passion - oops ! sorry! black & white! :)
Comment from Carrie Carson
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Well done, made me wish for that chocolate to share, for sure. I like, too, that this meets the prompt and doesn't cross the line into vulgarity.

No spag, good form, though I'm not well versed in this style of poetry...pardon the pun.

Good luck in the contest...oh, to be in Paris...:) Carrie

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2012


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
    Thx Carrie - this is free verse - though Paris isn't free of course ... but chocolate is always a good alternative! :)