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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from cinnamongirl
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How sad this poem is - true yes but sad none the less. I don't believe people should have to live like this but they do for whatever reason. I lived this image of "walking parellel lives" thank goodness i found You're never to old to fall in love again or even for the first time. Hallmark cards are overrated- i'm sure you've written beautiful hand written cards that say just the right thing. Nice but sad free verse thanks for telling the truth.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    thx so much cinnamongirl - truthful write based on observations of others, fortunately not for me :) Sharyn
reply by cinnamongirl on 24-Sep-2012
    That's good to hear like i said - i was.
Comment from Hitcher
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Lonely can be a state of mind, an old squeaking hinge that is crying out for a tiny drop of oil, a tender touch long forgotten, a whispered word the strokes and caresses. You have offered up a very sad and lonely reality, well done, and good luck :)

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    thank you Hitcher - I didn't win this one, but I enjoyed it as a somewhat challenging write (I usually write happy!)
    Best wishes
    Sharyn
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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I think the loneliness of the married is deeper than that of single people! So many married people have sold themselves the bill of goods movingly described in your poem. Good job

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    They have indeed, Janice ... and even writing a poem like this has made me appreciate my own husband much more. People go "unconscious" for years at a time, and that's when "dead" happens. Blessings for reading my piece my dear.
    Best wishes
    Sharyn
Comment from cvcopac
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Wow, you turned this one around. I know of a couple like this and they're not that old and I'm sure there's more. I like the words, expressions--perfect seperation but still bonded. Good luck in the contest. cvc

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    thx cvc - didn't win, but it was an interesting challenge to write! (And no, it's not my marriage, thank goodness!)
    Best wishes
    Sharyn :)
reply by cvcopac on 24-Sep-2012
    Well that's good news. Kenny
Comment from sibhus
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Ba ha ha, ja, that would make an interesting line of cards. You could call them Scidmark Cards. Honey after 25 years of wedded misery I just want you to know that you suck ya frigid bitch ha, ha, A really amusing poem with a good point. Makes for an excellent entry to the contest and good luck.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    oh you nasty thing! fortunately this piece isn't autobiographical dear, otherwise I'd be slashing my wrists by now? :) Sharyn
Comment from GWHARGIS
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How sad that some people come to that state in their relationship. It was a very visual poem you wrote, right down to the Wal Mart card. Nice job on this. It was honest, and quite melancholy.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    Yes, it is - and we do see it a lot, unfortunately. Lucky this piece isn't autobiographical, yes? :) Sharyn
Comment from Curtis Hatch
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As a veteran of forty-seven years of marriage, this couple is missing out on a lot. Soon the majority of years will be behind. When they look back...what a waste. Curtis

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    47 years ? good for you Curtis! I agree - Lucky this piece isn't autobiographical, yes? :) Sharyn
Comment from Tina McKala
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Great poem, you hit the point! Firstly I didn`t even want to read this with a fear of another poem talking about big life-lasting love, but this piece really took my breath away. It was written very well with a great style and seems to me that it shows more honest picture of a married life than any other "so in love" poem. Thanks for sharing! Tina

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    oh lord I HATE those sappy ones Tina - they drive me nuts. So glad you were game to try mine. Lucky this piece isn't autobiographical, yes? :) Sharyn
reply by Tina McKala on 24-Sep-2012
    I am glad it is not biographical! :) honestly, I skipped it few times, then I noticed your name under the title, so I told myself "this might not be that bad" and it really was not! ;)))
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    ha ha - that makes me feel good Tina - I don't usually go for the mushy stuff, so you're usually pretty safe. Thx for the vote of confidence! :)
Comment from EMB
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LOL This was excellent. The truth is that far too many of us don't bother tending to a marriage the way we all know we're supposed to tend to a garden. (And who's too old to tend to gardens, which seem like much more work?) It doesn't take more than consistency to keep the candle going, but for many, their consistency schedule is dictated by birthdays, Christmas, and Valentine's Day.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    You've got the picture Edward, that's for sure. Thank you for your intelligent reading. I do get tired of people assuming that I'm whining about my marriage - sometimes members on the site forget that this isn't a Dorothy Dix column! So a special "thx" for your review! :) Sharyn
reply by EMB on 24-Sep-2012
    LOL I hear ya, Dorothy!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    beast!
Comment from jmdg1954
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The lines in your poem hold so true today. Do people stay together nowadays after so many years because of financial reasons even though they walk straight ahead with that dead look.
Your poem was very well written and so true....
John

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
    thanks John!