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My Self Biograpy

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Comment from tbacha58
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

The sand's of man trickle and tickle, but God
Dear Lord take my HAND!!!
I am never again, never to be me.
I can not win.
For I am Lost Within.

Hi bro, My heart follows you everywhere, carrying your pain with you.
Maybe another mothers heart can ease your everlasting pain. Much Love Terry (M) Happy New Year, even if it does not matter for you......xoxoxo

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2013


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2013
    Happy New Year!!
    24.
Comment from RaymondJohn
Excellent
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How did you get all the room for the author notes. When I try to post them, I get about a line and a half. It is a very poignant story. The imagery and choice of words build the mood.
Very fine work. Best wishes. Ray.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
    A better computer or I pray a hell of a lot!
    Thanks Sir John,
    Ricky1024{Richard}
    'the Ricketier.'
Comment from dragonpoet
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This is a very sad poem. It seems like poetry has become your life. That nothing else matters and you see no way out. Maybe the last stanza is your only hope. Could it be time to try to write a humorous poem.

The darkness of the shadows looses the walker like the poet is lost in the words he is writing.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
    Thanks, "Toilet Bowl Humor" coming tomorrow!
    Ricky1024
reply by dragonpoet on 20-Sep-2012
    You're welcome, Ricky.

    Joan