An end to loneliness
God delivers love in its purest form17 total reviews
Comment from hollyleann
The picture is beautiful. The message you are writing here is beautiful. It flowed nicely until the end with the word sidle. I think I would have tried to find a better word, the flow may have been a bit better in that verse. Other than that, nice work!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2012
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The picture is beautiful. The message you are writing here is beautiful. It flowed nicely until the end with the word sidle. I think I would have tried to find a better word, the flow may have been a bit better in that verse. Other than that, nice work!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2012
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Hi Hollyleann. Thanks for reading and reviewing. A lot of people had trouble with the word sidle. It says heaps to me about God coming quietly along side of us, so I am resisting the pressure to change it. I appreciate you taking the time to be specific about what you thought needed reviewing.
Comment from gwbunde
It is a simple poem displaying a message that is repeated in many forms and many ways. Nothing new in the words; no surprise; no zest. The rhymes are good except for the last. Simply because it rhymes does not make it good. Bible and sidle rhyme, but do little to endure the poem. Also, the third line does not read well--the first stanza needs work. The second and third stanza's are great, and could possibly stand alone, but with work the entire poem could develop into something better.
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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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It is a simple poem displaying a message that is repeated in many forms and many ways. Nothing new in the words; no surprise; no zest. The rhymes are good except for the last. Simply because it rhymes does not make it good. Bible and sidle rhyme, but do little to endure the poem. Also, the third line does not read well--the first stanza needs work. The second and third stanza's are great, and could possibly stand alone, but with work the entire poem could develop into something better.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from terry drake
I didn't know the word sidle but it is a distant rhyme to Bible. Your spiritual poem was well written and the rhyme scheme contributed to your message.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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I didn't know the word sidle but it is a distant rhyme to Bible. Your spiritual poem was well written and the rhyme scheme contributed to your message.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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Thanks Terry for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from jaded831
I enjoyed your poem. The rhyme scheme was a bit different but it made your poem flow well. I turn to the Lord in good times and bad. In good I praise him, in bad times I ask for help. He always comes through, but not always in the way that I want. Great poem.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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I enjoyed your poem. The rhyme scheme was a bit different but it made your poem flow well. I turn to the Lord in good times and bad. In good I praise him, in bad times I ask for help. He always comes through, but not always in the way that I want. Great poem.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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Thanks Jaded for enjoying and reviewing my poem.
Comment from bossladyone
I like it. Nice rhyme. The poem is written well and flows nicely. Although the picture adds to the impact of the poem. It is strong enough to stand alone. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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I like it. Nice rhyme. The poem is written well and flows nicely. Although the picture adds to the impact of the poem. It is strong enough to stand alone. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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Thank you for liking my poem.
Comment from coolcatkev
Good morning. As a Christian trying my best also to walk with the Lord each day I love the thoughts and simplicity of your message and how it was delivered in a clear concise format. However I wish you shared more of your struggles to draw me into your story about how the Lord worked and is working in your life. I never tire of listening to the miracles of how He works in other's lives. Great job and I look forward to more.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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Good morning. As a Christian trying my best also to walk with the Lord each day I love the thoughts and simplicity of your message and how it was delivered in a clear concise format. However I wish you shared more of your struggles to draw me into your story about how the Lord worked and is working in your life. I never tire of listening to the miracles of how He works in other's lives. Great job and I look forward to more.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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Thanks Kev for suggesting a way of improving. I struggle to find the time to just enjoy fellowship with the Lord. Many people who read the poem had trouble with the word sidle. I live for those moments when my divine love comes and visits with me and I with Him. These times are my key to strength in times of weakness . Perhaps I should turn those thoughts into a poem. Thanks for the comments.
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You nailed it on the head. It's those moments when we run out of ideas, strength, will or ability and He lifts us up that is so amazing. Pray about it and I'd love to see more of your work.
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Thank you.
Comment from Winslow
Dear Christina,
Great rhyming in this poem about our loving God. For turn to Him as you say, not just in troubled times but always. For He will bring you joy.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Dear Christina,
Great rhyming in this poem about our loving God. For turn to Him as you say, not just in troubled times but always. For He will bring you joy.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Maria C.
You deliver a lovely message. It makes me think of the passage, "Draw near to the Lord and he will draw near to you." I love spiritual poetry and enjoyed your verses. I like how you had an opening line and then a rhyming couplet. Good strong rhyme with Bible/sidle.
Blessings,
Maria
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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You deliver a lovely message. It makes me think of the passage, "Draw near to the Lord and he will draw near to you." I love spiritual poetry and enjoyed your verses. I like how you had an opening line and then a rhyming couplet. Good strong rhyme with Bible/sidle.
Blessings,
Maria
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you Maria, that's the verse I was writing about. It means a great deal to me. Thank you for understanding "sidle".
Comment from adewpearl
I like how each tercet ends with a rhyming couplet
I like the walk with, worship, love, draw near the Lord progression
A most thoughtful poem of faith :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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I like how each tercet ends with a rhyming couplet
I like the walk with, worship, love, draw near the Lord progression
A most thoughtful poem of faith :-) Brooke
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2012
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Thank you Brooke, that is a very kind and thoughtful review.
Robyn
Comment from amarherig14
We should praise the Lord in good times and bad times.Let others see Jesus in us, this way others would praise His Holy name. Well written with a good message . The art used defines your write ,good rhyme and flow.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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We should praise the Lord in good times and bad times.Let others see Jesus in us, this way others would praise His Holy name. Well written with a good message . The art used defines your write ,good rhyme and flow.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I love it that you called my humble photo art. Wow. That made me feel good. Very generous thank you.
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Thanks,Christina, It is beautiful. Look like a path we have to go through when our day comes.Blessings,Margie
