Unacceptable Behavior
An Easy Way To Get Fired17 total reviews
Comment from gazzagodbod
lolol had to be didnt it lol enjoyed this tale with a twist thank you so much and all the best in the contest should do well gazzagodbod
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lolol had to be didnt it lol enjoyed this tale with a twist thank you so much and all the best in the contest should do well gazzagodbod
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
Comment from sgalletti
Great twist and play on words with "escort." I love it when strong women win in the end. What great fun to read these short little snippets with a whole variety of ideas for content. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
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Great twist and play on words with "escort." I love it when strong women win in the end. What great fun to read these short little snippets with a whole variety of ideas for content. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
Comment from terry drake
What a turn of events on a man we barely know but feel is so deserving. I enjoyed it the most and hope you win the contest. I laughed at the ending.
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What a turn of events on a man we barely know but feel is so deserving. I enjoyed it the most and hope you win the contest. I laughed at the ending.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
Comment from Curly Girly
Excellent! I was not sure when I started, but it certainly ended well. The only thing I wish to point out:
"Get undressed..., bitch?"
I don't believe it is possible to put a comma after dots. I am not entirely sure how this should be written, but I would suggest this:
"Get undressed? Bitch?"
Good humor.
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Excellent! I was not sure when I started, but it certainly ended well. The only thing I wish to point out:
"Get undressed..., bitch?"
I don't believe it is possible to put a comma after dots. I am not entirely sure how this should be written, but I would suggest this:
"Get undressed? Bitch?"
Good humor.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
Comment from EMB
Okay. I get the general idea of how this was supposed to be shocking and all, but how in the world did this happen? I can't really picture it. Where is he exactly? Is he in his office, waiting for the new owner to arrive? If so, this encounter makes no sense. Is he at his usually private place where he meets escorts "every day," and the owner just happens to waltz into this secret location? Well that's unlikely as well. So...how did this happen?
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Okay. I get the general idea of how this was supposed to be shocking and all, but how in the world did this happen? I can't really picture it. Where is he exactly? Is he in his office, waiting for the new owner to arrive? If so, this encounter makes no sense. Is he at his usually private place where he meets escorts "every day," and the owner just happens to waltz into this secret location? Well that's unlikely as well. So...how did this happen?
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
Comment from firenice
For under 100 words I think this is a great story made me laugh a bit. Thanks for sharing your work and good luck in the contest. Happy writing
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For under 100 words I think this is a great story made me laugh a bit. Thanks for sharing your work and good luck in the contest. Happy writing
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
Comment from playinaround
Very well done.. You are very good at making a mini story interesting and fun. I got to be the fly on the wall and I enjoyed it. thank you for sharing this 100 word story!
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Very well done.. You are very good at making a mini story interesting and fun. I got to be the fly on the wall and I enjoyed it. thank you for sharing this 100 word story!
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
