All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Butterfly in a Box"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Cindy Warren
This poem resonates with me because I had a similar experience. Even though he's out of my life for good and the 'box' has been burned, it affects me to this day. Let that butterfly go free and forget about the crow.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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This poem resonates with me because I had a similar experience. Even though he's out of my life for good and the 'box' has been burned, it affects me to this day. Let that butterfly go free and forget about the crow.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you for resonating with this one Cindy. And I'm glad he's out of your life for good! In retrospect, the experience is not necessarily a negative in the long run, because it forced me to look at how I tied my self worth to another. When you get to that decision time in life, it actually strengthens you for whatever the future holds I think. (But you're right - the memory stays, and is easily rekindled). Thank you so much for keying into this one! Best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Visionary ...
Clearly, there is a story behind the story that you relate in this relatively short work which ends with an emphatic word of warning.
There is nothing to suggest changing. I believe you will give many of your readers something to think about through your well-chosen words in this posting.
Thank you for sharing it with us.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Hullo Visionary ...
Clearly, there is a story behind the story that you relate in this relatively short work which ends with an emphatic word of warning.
There is nothing to suggest changing. I believe you will give many of your readers something to think about through your well-chosen words in this posting.
Thank you for sharing it with us.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Yes, there is indeed a story behind this story Nanette Mary - thank you so much for reading and understanding my work.
Best wishes,
Sharyn
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
I like your free verse style and all the information and emotion you pack into so few words.
You indicate knowledge that relationships are fluid, "always in a state of flux." But, to me the greatest relationships are those that can be separated for varying periods of time and take up again as though there had been no separation. The worst relationships are those in which you have to start all over every time you meet. Your friend, Bob
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I like your free verse style and all the information and emotion you pack into so few words.
You indicate knowledge that relationships are fluid, "always in a state of flux." But, to me the greatest relationships are those that can be separated for varying periods of time and take up again as though there had been no separation. The worst relationships are those in which you have to start all over every time you meet. Your friend, Bob
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thx Bob - what you're describing is actually how I feel about my lifetime friends - we can not see each other for years at a time, but when we get together again, it's as if no time has passed at all. And yes, I agree, those are the BEST, aren't they!? :) Sharyn
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is so true in human relationships, you don't always get what think you have got. In every person, there is another hiding, or trying to get free. When that happens, anything goes, to your liking, or not. xsx
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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This is so true in human relationships, you don't always get what think you have got. In every person, there is another hiding, or trying to get free. When that happens, anything goes, to your liking, or not. xsx
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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You've got it! Thanks so much - again - Sandy!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow - this is an extremely powerful free verse, and I absolutely love it. The metaphor works wonderfully, although the last part of the poem is very threatening -(I'm not sure how much damage a butterfly could do to a bird.) :) Nonetheless, it was very evocative. Excellent. Very, very beautiful.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Wow - this is an extremely powerful free verse, and I absolutely love it. The metaphor works wonderfully, although the last part of the poem is very threatening -(I'm not sure how much damage a butterfly could do to a bird.) :) Nonetheless, it was very evocative. Excellent. Very, very beautiful.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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It's meant to be threatening Dawn, butterfly's mutating in there remember ... grrrrr! Glad you enjoyed! (if that's the right word) ... :)S
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Hmmmm, any gamma rays in there too? (Sorry, I can't resist - you know I'm teasing - I loved your poem darling Sharyn! I've aways loved fierce butterflies!)(Shit, I'm on a roll!) Forgive me? (I luv u...)
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plus claws & teeth!
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Hahahaha - were we having a bad day when we composed our poem little butterfly? (still luv u!)
Comment from santapola
A cool write, I like the way she emerges as the hunter not the hunted a sad indictment on society thought that this goes on and we do have to adapt to our environment and relationships
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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A cool write, I like the way she emerges as the hunter not the hunted a sad indictment on society thought that this goes on and we do have to adapt to our environment and relationships
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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and again - thank you my dear!
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This is a fascinating and thought provoking piece to read. It does make me ponder the change that occurs over time. Or even the change that occurs when a sudden shift from the norm takes place. Like my own which was change from disease.
Well penned Sharyn I enjoyed the read.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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This is a fascinating and thought provoking piece to read. It does make me ponder the change that occurs over time. Or even the change that occurs when a sudden shift from the norm takes place. Like my own which was change from disease.
Well penned Sharyn I enjoyed the read.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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thx Maureen!
Comment from Doc Holiday
Power and control are two demons that can destroy couples. Individuality and sharing are the anti-serum that you need right now. Time in the box will certainly sharpen your agressiveness for freedom. Hopefully you'll be spreading your wings again real soon! Cleverly written with a touch of darkness...
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Power and control are two demons that can destroy couples. Individuality and sharing are the anti-serum that you need right now. Time in the box will certainly sharpen your agressiveness for freedom. Hopefully you'll be spreading your wings again real soon! Cleverly written with a touch of darkness...
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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that was exactly the intent Doc - don't worry, he's still alive ...
Comment from Crystal Carey
Great story in this poem! It kind of reminded me of this season of true blood (There was a lot of don't waste your light talk!) I did not see any obvious errors!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Great story in this poem! It kind of reminded me of this season of true blood (There was a lot of don't waste your light talk!) I did not see any obvious errors!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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thx Crystal!
Comment from Dustybones
Great relationship poem/story. I like the "boxed" in analogy with the light coming to make the person trapped feel wholeness of self to speak out.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Great relationship poem/story. I like the "boxed" in analogy with the light coming to make the person trapped feel wholeness of self to speak out.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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You've "got" what I'm writing about Dusty - thank you for that! :) Sharyn
