The Wet-Willy's Duel
Outsmarting the adults.35 total reviews
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi humpwhistle,
What a cute story. Very imaginative, well written and smooth flow. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2012
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Hi humpwhistle,
What a cute story. Very imaginative, well written and smooth flow. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2012
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Thanks so much, mtnspirit. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Gregory K Shipman
Okay... Okay... Gosh durnit... I'm done (wait, I gotta wipe my eyes)... You are the UNDISPUTED CHAMP of story-telling! I would bow to you but I can't see your eyes and every kung fu movie ever made says watch your opponent's eyes when you bow!
You got my endorsement and... (goshdurnit, brain... let go!) my vote. The good thing for me is now I know who to steal (emulate) from!
First thing... absolute authentic down-home flavor... two... the funniest, most natural interaction between characters I've witnessed on this side of not-yet-famous... three... the most hilarious character mind-speak since Tom Sawyer... four... a story so compelling a politician couldn't ruin it...
I ain't had this much fun reading something since my paycheck had an extra fifty dollars in it...
Lee, you be numero uno!... goshdurnit!
And I ain't carin' who read it!
greg
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2012
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Okay... Okay... Gosh durnit... I'm done (wait, I gotta wipe my eyes)... You are the UNDISPUTED CHAMP of story-telling! I would bow to you but I can't see your eyes and every kung fu movie ever made says watch your opponent's eyes when you bow!
You got my endorsement and... (goshdurnit, brain... let go!) my vote. The good thing for me is now I know who to steal (emulate) from!
First thing... absolute authentic down-home flavor... two... the funniest, most natural interaction between characters I've witnessed on this side of not-yet-famous... three... the most hilarious character mind-speak since Tom Sawyer... four... a story so compelling a politician couldn't ruin it...
I ain't had this much fun reading something since my paycheck had an extra fifty dollars in it...
Lee, you be numero uno!... goshdurnit!
And I ain't carin' who read it!
greg
Comment Written 06-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much, greg. I love your comments, but I think you might have kissed the blarney stone a time or two. Frankly, I like that in a reviewer.
This means a lot, greg, because, as you know, I admire your storytelling/philosophizing. I can't come close to your Grit & Wit.
Thank you again. Peace, Lee
Comment from Cumbrianlass
So, I thought, how the heck did I miss this one? Then I saw the date. That was the week of my son's wedding, so I was kinda busy.
Still, caught it now. And loved it. You write with such charm, Lee. The dialogue in this is just amazing. The entire story is an absolute treasure. You write kids just as well as you do pensioners.
And the Sasquatch touch? Bloody brilliant, my friend.
Not surprised this was nominated.
Av
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2012
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So, I thought, how the heck did I miss this one? Then I saw the date. That was the week of my son's wedding, so I was kinda busy.
Still, caught it now. And loved it. You write with such charm, Lee. The dialogue in this is just amazing. The entire story is an absolute treasure. You write kids just as well as you do pensioners.
And the Sasquatch touch? Bloody brilliant, my friend.
Not surprised this was nominated.
Av
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2012
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Thank you, Av. I seem to have a penchant for writing either
kids or criminals. I'm sure something could be made of that.
Actually, this enite story began with the Sasquatch line. Odd.
Thanks again, Av. Peace, Lee
Comment from Carrie Carson
Yes, it was that long, but that's OK in a good story...smart kid to best the old goat.
No spag, good form.
This month is one of the better I've seen...good luck in the contest. I liked that it set me right at the end of summer. :) Carrie
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Yes, it was that long, but that's OK in a good story...smart kid to best the old goat.
No spag, good form.
This month is one of the better I've seen...good luck in the contest. I liked that it set me right at the end of summer. :) Carrie
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you, Carrie. Sorry it was long, but we country folk tend to be longwinded. I appreciate the review. Peace, Lee
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You're welcome. Did you see my chapter "Country humor in the city?" I've gotten reviews on in but no one said if the country tales were funny. If you're country folk, would you mind looking? If you don't have time, I totally get that. This is a long winded "you're welcome." :)
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You're welcome. Did you see my chapter "Country humor in the city?" I've gotten reviews on in but no one said if the country tales were funny. If you're country folk, would you mind looking? If you don't have time, I totally get that. This is a long winded "you're welcome." :)
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I will make it a point to look up your story, Carrie. Thanks for pointing it out. Lee
Comment from poetbear
Story grabbed and delighted me.
Reads well and flows well.
Great literary crafting.
Makes sense and stays with you a while.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Story grabbed and delighted me.
Reads well and flows well.
Great literary crafting.
Makes sense and stays with you a while.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thanks so much, poetbear. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Misrael
I love it. That was very funny and cute the way you told it. I can just see those boys squirming and looking at each other and wondering what the heck is going to happen next. Good read, good job and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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I love it. That was very funny and cute the way you told it. I can just see those boys squirming and looking at each other and wondering what the heck is going to happen next. Good read, good job and keep on writing.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Misrael. You read my mind, as well as the story. Peace, Lee
Comment from Titanx9
This was an engaging and engrossing story. It was a hoot listening to the old man's interactions with the "know-it-all boys. I like the ongoing backdrop conversation going on, it added a bit of spice to the story - great job! You might consider making a correction to this sentence: "yice principal."
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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This was an engaging and engrossing story. It was a hoot listening to the old man's interactions with the "know-it-all boys. I like the ongoing backdrop conversation going on, it added a bit of spice to the story - great job! You might consider making a correction to this sentence: "yice principal."
Comment Written 11-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much, Titanx. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am sorry for the late review. I teach first grade and it's the first few weeks of school and I am really behind, but as always, I enjoyed your writing.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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I am sorry for the late review. I teach first grade and it's the first few weeks of school and I am really behind, but as always, I enjoyed your writing.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Barbara, relax. We all have lives that interfer with our hobbies now again. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Spitfire
Magnificent! Love the ups and downs and the Grandpa and kids see-saw their replies. Also your wonderful gift for images:
Our four fragile hearts hiccupped in harmony. (just to name one)
Good use of italics for inner thoughts.
Ray comes as off as the likeable nerd of the group.
LOL at the ending with the popular phrases of an era.
A fun read. And delightful joke.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Magnificent! Love the ups and downs and the Grandpa and kids see-saw their replies. Also your wonderful gift for images:
Our four fragile hearts hiccupped in harmony. (just to name one)
Good use of italics for inner thoughts.
Ray comes as off as the likeable nerd of the group.
LOL at the ending with the popular phrases of an era.
A fun read. And delightful joke.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Shari. You always get the nuances in my dialogue.
I like your 'see-saw' observation. Yeah, Ray is the hero.
I'm so glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from sugardog
Lee, you just get better and better... excellent dialogue that really brings the story to life along with incredible characters that are real. Some cute, funny stuff here. Lots of fun lines and great story!! this really is your thing. Hope you are well. Sorry I have been a bad FS friend. I haven't been around here much. Dana
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Lee, you just get better and better... excellent dialogue that really brings the story to life along with incredible characters that are real. Some cute, funny stuff here. Lots of fun lines and great story!! this really is your thing. Hope you are well. Sorry I have been a bad FS friend. I haven't been around here much. Dana
Comment Written 10-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Hey, Sug! I've been thinking about you. I figured it was about time for you to poke your head up again. Don't worry about your absences, I'm just glad to hear from you.
And I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece.
I'm as well as I can be, and I trust you are holding your own.
Write something for me.
Great to hear from you, Dana. Thanks again.
Peace, Lee
