Gently Falling Rain
This is a poem about the cycle of life.4 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
It was ok. The wording for me is not really there. But it is a good 5-7-5 poem. The first and third line worked for me. Well done
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It was ok. The wording for me is not really there. But it is a good 5-7-5 poem. The first and third line worked for me. Well done
Comment Written 06-Sep-2012
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 format
Vivid descriptive detail appeals to more senses than just the visual, which I like
patters is the perfect verb choice to convey a particular mood
and I love the strong verb of break as the flower breaks through
and cold dead skin is pitch perfect :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 format
Vivid descriptive detail appeals to more senses than just the visual, which I like
patters is the perfect verb choice to convey a particular mood
and I love the strong verb of break as the flower breaks through
and cold dead skin is pitch perfect :-) Brooke
Comment Written 06-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Thanks very much!
Comment from Earl of Oxford
VERY clever to infer rejuvination of your dead body, refreshed by nature's rain, blooms into a beautiful flower to continue nature's recycling.
Best wishes, Ray
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VERY clever to infer rejuvination of your dead body, refreshed by nature's rain, blooms into a beautiful flower to continue nature's recycling.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 06-Sep-2012
Comment from IndyElsie
Ooh, I really loved this. I enjoy poems that end with a twist or in a direction that one wasn't expecting. Well done! Thank you for sharing!
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Ooh, I really loved this. I enjoy poems that end with a twist or in a direction that one wasn't expecting. Well done! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2012
