My Character Studies ... ! (Vol. 1)
Viewing comments for Prologue "A Creature"Metre ... Freeverse & Acrostic
10 total reviews
Comment from TammyGail
B.. rock on thank you ever much sweetie :) you made my night with this clever verse I'm stifled on sixes for you or indeed you would be getting one - thank you ever much for the dedication - love ya B -
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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B.. rock on thank you ever much sweetie :) you made my night with this clever verse I'm stifled on sixes for you or indeed you would be getting one - thank you ever much for the dedication - love ya B -
Comment Written 06-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Anytime T...
Comment from Meta~Mark
FKN Brilliant dude, you are an oak tree, resilient, strong and not full of sap unlike the pine tree, you are a man "unlike" any other man. You are a friend, a brother, a tree to grow and bloom !!!!
BRAVO, BRAVO!!!! 77777777777777777777777777777 STARS!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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FKN Brilliant dude, you are an oak tree, resilient, strong and not full of sap unlike the pine tree, you are a man "unlike" any other man. You are a friend, a brother, a tree to grow and bloom !!!!
BRAVO, BRAVO!!!! 77777777777777777777777777777 STARS!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Who wants to be a whine tree...laughing my socks off...love you all, my friends.
Comment from Tina McKala
what is "M"? ME? I liked it! Nice read, fresh wind :) great flow and rhymes, but I guess that is not what this poem wants to be about :) Tina
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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what is "M"? ME? I liked it! Nice read, fresh wind :) great flow and rhymes, but I guess that is not what this poem wants to be about :) Tina
Comment Written 04-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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M is a special friend my friend...
Comment from EMB
This had wonderful rhyming. This had lovely wording. This had an ugly, confusing picture accompanying it. Oh, and one other thing: "am" and "man" doesn't really rhyme.
Nicely done, B!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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This had wonderful rhyming. This had lovely wording. This had an ugly, confusing picture accompanying it. Oh, and one other thing: "am" and "man" doesn't really rhyme.
Nicely done, B!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Excellent I am glad you like but I tend to disagree am and man does rhyme in my vocabulary, sorry my friend but thats what I think. The picture suites the piece for its piquent nature...in other words it is pleasantly pungent...LOL.
Comment from Jendowoz
Thus is a cute poem. Loved all the creature descriptions, whole poem read really well and sounded rhythmic when read aloud.
Regards, Jen
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thus is a cute poem. Loved all the creature descriptions, whole poem read really well and sounded rhythmic when read aloud.
Regards, Jen
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Many thanks.
Comment from Cleo Belle
A rather piquant and interesting poem. Not sure about the last line where it is written that you'd like to be a tree, since in the beginning you wanted to be a butterfly. But the images are great - even the daftness of the rabbit with twitching nose! Lovely.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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A rather piquant and interesting poem. Not sure about the last line where it is written that you'd like to be a tree, since in the beginning you wanted to be a butterfly. But the images are great - even the daftness of the rabbit with twitching nose! Lovely.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Excellent...can I ask why the four, anything technically wrong with it?
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Hi Bicpen, I still think the poem needs editing. Check for spelling mistakes - is celerity supposed to be celebrity? Why the capitalisation of R for Rabbit, and not the F for Fish? Other similar little things, which if sorted, and the rhythm worked, would improve things. Hope this helps. Cleo Belle
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The R is sorted and could have been a typo: celerity (rapid motion) not celebrity. As far as I can read it the rhythm works fine as free verse it does not have to rhyme, thats a bonus. Free Verse no punctuation necessary. Be interested as to what spelling mistake please remember we are not all American...
Comment from juliedickson55
Very unique image.
You have some interesting words chosen, especially celerity
I like this line:
"each breath with joyous gills
sail the ocean for a cup of tea"
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Very unique image.
You have some interesting words chosen, especially celerity
I like this line:
"each breath with joyous gills
sail the ocean for a cup of tea"
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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I thank you I was checking another word and this one came to mind to replace it.
Comment from terry drake
Spread your branches out real wide for you welcome a poetic guide. This poem in it's review was entertaining and held a nice cadence to the end.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Spread your branches out real wide for you welcome a poetic guide. This poem in it's review was entertaining and held a nice cadence to the end.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from dmt1967
I like this I wish poem I wish I was an eagle soaring high above the earth and being a tree not sure if I would like that great poem very well written thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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I like this I wish poem I wish I was an eagle soaring high above the earth and being a tree not sure if I would like that great poem very well written thank you for sharing
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Excellent, many thanks...
Comment from Katherine2
Wonderful things to be, especially a tree! I like the part about the fish selflessly in the ocean looking for tea. This piece flowed so nicely. You have a great imagination with such a colorful way through your writing. I hope to read more soon! katherine
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Wonderful things to be, especially a tree! I like the part about the fish selflessly in the ocean looking for tea. This piece flowed so nicely. You have a great imagination with such a colorful way through your writing. I hope to read more soon! katherine
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Excellent, many thanks...
