Summer Retreat, Life's Relief!
Seasons don't always improve with age.69 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I am disabled and rarely get out to enjoy the out of doors, something I truly miss Enjoy them while you can. Winters are difficult for those with poor balance and in wheelchairs. We had almost no snow last year and I did miss it~Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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I am disabled and rarely get out to enjoy the out of doors, something I truly miss Enjoy them while you can. Winters are difficult for those with poor balance and in wheelchairs. We had almost no snow last year and I did miss it~Debbie
Comment Written 04-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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I always try to and with my work, life can change on a dime. I thank you for this review and for sharing. Mike
Comment from Heaven Bound
I read writings such as your about growing older. As a middle-ager, I begin to get a hint. Some things become more challenging. But I hope I never forget that "real" age is in my mind. (I've known folks who were "old" in their 50s, and I know some you are "youngsters" in their 80s. Thanks.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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I read writings such as your about growing older. As a middle-ager, I begin to get a hint. Some things become more challenging. But I hope I never forget that "real" age is in my mind. (I've known folks who were "old" in their 50s, and I know some you are "youngsters" in their 80s. Thanks.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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I want to be like my grandfather was, the neighbors saw him get pinned down by the teenagers throwing snowballs at him, and were amazed at just how quickly they got nailed by him, and not with snowballs.
It's all how you look at things. I thank you very much for taking the time to read the poem, review it as well the compliments. Mike
Comment from Titanx9
I like how you've delineated the seasons into their own positives and negatives. There's something to love and accept in each season, but we cherish them all just being alive. Good rhyming and movement.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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I like how you've delineated the seasons into their own positives and negatives. There's something to love and accept in each season, but we cherish them all just being alive. Good rhyming and movement.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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It's strange for a summer poem, but I felt if I didn't bring winter up, it would appear I was complaining about summer and not that people have problems with both seasons. I guess I got the people that have difficulties with winter on board.
I also wanted to highlight what should always be good about summer. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from S.Yocom
Hi, Mike. I enjoyed your poem about growing older, and I understand it completely (I am 81). I hope you won't mind if I, as a former English teacher, ask for a small correction. Line 9 reads as if the kids are looking out the window. ("Looking out the windo3w, kids...") You could say "I see outside the window, kids play..." Other than that, your lines tell a true story about aging. Nicely done.
Sally
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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Hi, Mike. I enjoyed your poem about growing older, and I understand it completely (I am 81). I hope you won't mind if I, as a former English teacher, ask for a small correction. Line 9 reads as if the kids are looking out the window. ("Looking out the windo3w, kids...") You could say "I see outside the window, kids play..." Other than that, your lines tell a true story about aging. Nicely done.
Sally
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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I thank you for the suggested correction, but I am happy with that line as I like the gruffness about it, sort of a bit more of separation then should be. I enjoy this review and for sharing and the compliments too. Mike
Comment from Liilia
I love your spirit of writing a poem about summer even if you are not feeling quite up to doing it. You certainly did a great job of it and I like the poignant tone of one who considers youth, middle age and old age in relation to the seasons. The lines below are very lovely:
Looking out of the window, kids play a million ways,
reminds one just how little it takes to enjoy the day
As the poem goes along, flowing smoothly and with a great choice of words and thoughts, the positive spin comes on:
Comfort and effort become less a concern,
as you find reasons to come out and renew your spirit,
with another wonderful season to discern
There is always the bright side - even with health issues and the inevitability of aging - and your poem brings us to understand and look at the bright side.
Thank you for sharing this thought provoking work.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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I love your spirit of writing a poem about summer even if you are not feeling quite up to doing it. You certainly did a great job of it and I like the poignant tone of one who considers youth, middle age and old age in relation to the seasons. The lines below are very lovely:
Looking out of the window, kids play a million ways,
reminds one just how little it takes to enjoy the day
As the poem goes along, flowing smoothly and with a great choice of words and thoughts, the positive spin comes on:
Comfort and effort become less a concern,
as you find reasons to come out and renew your spirit,
with another wonderful season to discern
There is always the bright side - even with health issues and the inevitability of aging - and your poem brings us to understand and look at the bright side.
Thank you for sharing this thought provoking work.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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I really enjoyed reading this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from nancy_e_davis
It seems I am a juicy steak for every spider, ant or misquito in the neighborhood now. Maybe because my skin is paper thin now. I hate winter more. I would rather sweat then freeze. I just tollerate the seasons anymore, happy to see another,I think spring and fall are now my pick and they are almost non-existant where I live. LOL Honeycomb
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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It seems I am a juicy steak for every spider, ant or misquito in the neighborhood now. Maybe because my skin is paper thin now. I hate winter more. I would rather sweat then freeze. I just tollerate the seasons anymore, happy to see another,I think spring and fall are now my pick and they are almost non-existant where I live. LOL Honeycomb
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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LOL, enjoy every good day you do get. I thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from rashi kumar
So true! I felt this with my grandmother. She dies in 2010 at the age of 81. The climate used to affect her more. She could not bear the heat and used to shiver in AC too. But your moving poem has a better message to convey.
A very moving one, really!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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So true! I felt this with my grandmother. She dies in 2010 at the age of 81. The climate used to affect her more. She could not bear the heat and used to shiver in AC too. But your moving poem has a better message to convey.
A very moving one, really!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the compliments and the review. Also for sharing about your grandmother too. To live to that age, you have to be tough. There are aspects I like about India, and had I the resources, I would definitely visit, but I do fear the heat.
I had a photography teacher couple visit and get a splendid photograph of the Taj Mahal, but the heat and the food really made him suffer. His wife told the story, of him brushing his teeth and exclaiming, "Even the toothpaste is hot here!" Personally, I enjoy the food and occasionally get some. Mike
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It is hot, really. Where I live, the summers normally have 45 degree centigrade, at times 49 degrees too. Our AC stops working at times:)We dont see snow EVER, unless we visit the Northern India and Himalayas. I have been to Taj dozens of time as my father was brought up in that city. It is mesmerizing! Take care and do visit this simple,mismanaged, corrupted, colorful and spiritual nation some day!I love it.
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Love to. Maryland is easy to find as it is on the east coast of the US and the Chesepeake Bay is the easiest way. I try not to point out Washington, DC too much.
We have a good split of the seasons, but this summer was horrible hot or horrible wet. This weekend it wasn't overly hot, but I wondered if the humidity wasn't made of sugar water, everything just sticked. And we've been getting some pretty good storms.
The thing is, be it winter or summer, it can hit extremes in temp or weather, but usually this is fleeting. If you don't like it one year, just wait to the next. Spring and fall are enjoyable usually, but too fleeting as summer and winter want to battle over the other.
Something I would like to see around here is more spirituality! The political climate is a bit crazy, because if you are against any thing the democrats want, no matter how small, expect to be harrassed, ridiculed, called names, and bullied. I had my life threatened by a grown, obese man stuffed in a little girls, pink plastic toy car. What can I say! LOL
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So good to know this except that pink car man:)
In spite of all the differences, human beings are the same everywhere. Love, family, God, mistakes and lessons! Great talking to you!
Comment from Oldsteamer
I really enjoyed your pem. I understand I very well. As my health fails me
( I'm not that old ) the treats of the seasons elude me more And more.
Am I throwing the towel in. HELL no ! My interests may need some tweaking but I still love life.
Regards my friend,
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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I really enjoyed your pem. I understand I very well. As my health fails me
( I'm not that old ) the treats of the seasons elude me more And more.
Am I throwing the towel in. HELL no ! My interests may need some tweaking but I still love life.
Regards my friend,
- R -
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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I enjoyed this review and thank you for reading my poem and the compliments. Mike
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello MikeK2,
Your poem gracefully describes the seasons of life that dance so eloquently over a lifespan and through the never-ending winter, spring, summer and fall.
I especially liked:
Steamed crabs and barbecues, smells can't fail to imbibe
(Good imagery ~ one of the tasty smells of summer)
Keep the cool blue waters flowing ~ Autumn is near.
Regards, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Hello MikeK2,
Your poem gracefully describes the seasons of life that dance so eloquently over a lifespan and through the never-ending winter, spring, summer and fall.
I especially liked:
Steamed crabs and barbecues, smells can't fail to imbibe
(Good imagery ~ one of the tasty smells of summer)
Keep the cool blue waters flowing ~ Autumn is near.
Regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Definitely! I thank you for review and sharing with my favorites. I am flattered at the compliments. Mike
Comment from Selestia
Very nice free style poem about summer. Your work flows freely, and the ideas are especially meaningful to me as I am now one of those elderly who hasn't yet quite reconciled the fact that though there is still a child inside me that yearns to run, play, and frolic in the sun . . . my body won't do much of what I used to do because of stiffness, replaced joints, etc. I don't like the heat and humidity either . . . didn't as a child, but my joy as a child was to go barefoot . . . something I can't do outside now because even the grass hurts my feet.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Very nice free style poem about summer. Your work flows freely, and the ideas are especially meaningful to me as I am now one of those elderly who hasn't yet quite reconciled the fact that though there is still a child inside me that yearns to run, play, and frolic in the sun . . . my body won't do much of what I used to do because of stiffness, replaced joints, etc. I don't like the heat and humidity either . . . didn't as a child, but my joy as a child was to go barefoot . . . something I can't do outside now because even the grass hurts my feet.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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It's one of those things you just have to tolerate and work though. I enjoyed reading this review and thank you for it. Mike
