Sam
Romance with a Twist31 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Oh, I don't know about it not being scary. It seems like the type of story I used to see on "The Twilight Zone" when I was a kid. If you really think about it, it's pretty scary. Especially that part about wanting children and a school being nearby. I can almost hear the pair giggling sinisterly.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Oh, I don't know about it not being scary. It seems like the type of story I used to see on "The Twilight Zone" when I was a kid. If you really think about it, it's pretty scary. Especially that part about wanting children and a school being nearby. I can almost hear the pair giggling sinisterly.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you. I really appreciate this. Gretchen
Comment from Sanku
She fell in love with a scare crow and she was converted to a scarecrow?Or she too was a scare crow? I am quite confused...I liked the name of the town Bumfuck.. Tell me is it really a town or its your brilliance?
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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She fell in love with a scare crow and she was converted to a scarecrow?Or she too was a scare crow? I am quite confused...I liked the name of the town Bumfuck.. Tell me is it really a town or its your brilliance?
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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She was tricked into becoming a scarecrow. Bum fuck is a disrespectful reference to a town with nothing much going on. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Bumfuck is my favorite place now.... lol
Holy cow.... that's a very creepy tale, Gretchen. I love it! The imagery is spectacular. You would make a fabulous haiku poet.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2023
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Bumfuck is my favorite place now.... lol
Holy cow.... that's a very creepy tale, Gretchen. I love it! The imagery is spectacular. You would make a fabulous haiku poet.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2023
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I thank you for the compliment about the imagery, but as far as poetry goes, I'm not good at following directions. Lol. Maybe one day. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
Wow! This certainly was a weird tale. Didn't notice the Horror section till just now. Have to reserve some SIXES for Barbara, Ulla and Sally that turn up, tomorrow, Monday my time. So good you are posting, early.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2023
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Wow! This certainly was a weird tale. Didn't notice the Horror section till just now. Have to reserve some SIXES for Barbara, Ulla and Sally that turn up, tomorrow, Monday my time. So good you are posting, early.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2023
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It was weird, wasn't it? Lol. Thanks so much. Gretchen
Comment from LJbutterfly
You got me. I started out liking Sam. Then you said he was strange. But he turned out to be more strange than I ever imagined. This is a very creative tale about a girl who falls in love with, and turns into a scarecrow. Very imaginative.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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You got me. I started out liking Sam. Then you said he was strange. But he turned out to be more strange than I ever imagined. This is a very creative tale about a girl who falls in love with, and turns into a scarecrow. Very imaginative.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Had to categorize this one. Not horror but not romance. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from jmdg1954
Well, my dear, you got me.
This was written precisely authentic.I was believing in a story of love from first sight!
Then the trick part surfaced.
Nicely hidden and nicely written
John
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Well, my dear, you got me.
This was written precisely authentic.I was believing in a story of love from first sight!
Then the trick part surfaced.
Nicely hidden and nicely written
John
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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This was one of those stories that was not quite horror and not quite romance. Think Tom needs to add some categories. Lol. Thanks so much for this. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Never be sorry for deception, it's what keeps readers on their tops and minds working. It's all good. But I'm with you that it isn't scary enough for the horror category. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Never be sorry for deception, it's what keeps readers on their tops and minds working. It's all good. But I'm with you that it isn't scary enough for the horror category. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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I'm going to petition Tom for additional categories, I.e. uncomfortable, confused, and meh.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You do have an imagination. I don't think I've ever heard of a proposal from as scarecrow. And the love of his life becomes a scarecrow lady. It isn't really horror, unless you are afraid of scarecrows. It is well-written and fun to read.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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You do have an imagination. I don't think I've ever heard of a proposal from as scarecrow. And the love of his life becomes a scarecrow lady. It isn't really horror, unless you are afraid of scarecrows. It is well-written and fun to read.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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I am very frightened of Scarecrows. Lol. Thank you for enjoying my odd little story. Gretchen
Comment from JSD
Lol. Love it. Love the clever way you gradually hint at the straw / scarecrow idea as the piece goes on. Gripping and entertaining as ever. Well done and thanks for blowing the cobwebs off this one.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Lol. Love it. Love the clever way you gradually hint at the straw / scarecrow idea as the piece goes on. Gripping and entertaining as ever. Well done and thanks for blowing the cobwebs off this one.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Thanks so much for this. Gretchen
Comment from Irene Bratton
Hi, Gretchen. Umm. This is pretty darn scary lol. Personally, I think it should be in the horror category. Maybe it's just me, but it doesn't strike me as romantic unless you're going for twisted romance. (I hope that's not offensive.) It's especially creative, and you tell it very well.
There are a few things I would like to point out. First, a lot of people are offended by cursing. It doesn't offend me unless it gets out of hand, but I think writing can usually be done without it. Sometimes, it's warranted because there simply isn't anything else that fits; in that case, you can use symbols to get the point across. Too much profanity distracts from the story and the quality of the writing. As for the town's name -- I've lived in the country my whole life, and a popular word to use is "Podunk" (POE-dunk). It literally means "a small town regarded as dull or insignificant."
Next, there are problems with sentence structure and punctuation. There are commas placed where they shouldn't be and commas missing where needed. I won't go into detail because I don't want to bore you to tears; but if you're interested, I would be more than happy to help you fix it. Just shoot me a message.
Next are the typos:
along side --> alongside
peddling --> pedaling or pedalling (both are acceptable)
seemed to riding --> seemed to [be] riding
Lot's --> Lots
yellow-white hair --> towhead (a person with very light blonde hair; this is only a suggestion)
"This could all be yours" should move to a new line.
Finally -- the one thing I found questionable. Sam tells Jenny she's pretty, and "that's all it took." Really? For a person who seems rough and tumble, I find it difficult to accept that Jenny would fall that easily. I think it should take something a little more complex to gain her affections, but that's just my opinion.
I didn't read your reviews, so I may have simply repeated what others have already said. If so, I apologize for sounding like a broken record; and I hope I haven't offended you. I took the time for this because I enjoy the storyline. It's very original, and I think it has great potential. I would be interested in reading an entire book on this -- and watching the movie. ;)
Great work, Gretchen. Thank you for sharing, and I hope you enjoy your weekend.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Hi, Gretchen. Umm. This is pretty darn scary lol. Personally, I think it should be in the horror category. Maybe it's just me, but it doesn't strike me as romantic unless you're going for twisted romance. (I hope that's not offensive.) It's especially creative, and you tell it very well.
There are a few things I would like to point out. First, a lot of people are offended by cursing. It doesn't offend me unless it gets out of hand, but I think writing can usually be done without it. Sometimes, it's warranted because there simply isn't anything else that fits; in that case, you can use symbols to get the point across. Too much profanity distracts from the story and the quality of the writing. As for the town's name -- I've lived in the country my whole life, and a popular word to use is "Podunk" (POE-dunk). It literally means "a small town regarded as dull or insignificant."
Next, there are problems with sentence structure and punctuation. There are commas placed where they shouldn't be and commas missing where needed. I won't go into detail because I don't want to bore you to tears; but if you're interested, I would be more than happy to help you fix it. Just shoot me a message.
Next are the typos:
along side --> alongside
peddling --> pedaling or pedalling (both are acceptable)
seemed to riding --> seemed to [be] riding
Lot's --> Lots
yellow-white hair --> towhead (a person with very light blonde hair; this is only a suggestion)
"This could all be yours" should move to a new line.
Finally -- the one thing I found questionable. Sam tells Jenny she's pretty, and "that's all it took." Really? For a person who seems rough and tumble, I find it difficult to accept that Jenny would fall that easily. I think it should take something a little more complex to gain her affections, but that's just my opinion.
I didn't read your reviews, so I may have simply repeated what others have already said. If so, I apologize for sounding like a broken record; and I hope I haven't offended you. I took the time for this because I enjoy the storyline. It's very original, and I think it has great potential. I would be interested in reading an entire book on this -- and watching the movie. ;)
Great work, Gretchen. Thank you for sharing, and I hope you enjoy your weekend.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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It's a repost from years ago. I would have changed the category had I been paying attention. I will go back and look at those suggestions you offered. I appreciate you taking the time to review and critique. Gretchen
Yes, I noticed. That's why I mentioned others possibly making the same suggestions. It's my pleasure, Gretchen. Have a great day.
