All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "We'll Take Two!"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from venika
A well-written Quatern for the contest. It has a good flow and I like the colors as well, especially the color. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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A well-written Quatern for the contest. It has a good flow and I like the colors as well, especially the color. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Venika!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This perfectly complies with the contest rules, and is a wonderful poem. One summer's gone, so we'll take two! What a great repeating line that is! Good luck in the contest,with this well written summer quatern! xsx
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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This perfectly complies with the contest rules, and is a wonderful poem. One summer's gone, so we'll take two! What a great repeating line that is! Good luck in the contest,with this well written summer quatern! xsx
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Sandy!
Comment from Quire's Gal
Hi Poet,
I'd love to take two, or three, or even four! Very creative opening line that flows really well and doesn't sound forced which seems to be the challenge of this form.
I particularly like...
Now let's fly south, out-run the sun,
To swim all year in turquoise blue,
Best wishes in the contest and I hope you enjoyed writing for it.
Katherine
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Hi Poet,
I'd love to take two, or three, or even four! Very creative opening line that flows really well and doesn't sound forced which seems to be the challenge of this form.
I particularly like...
Now let's fly south, out-run the sun,
To swim all year in turquoise blue,
Best wishes in the contest and I hope you enjoyed writing for it.
Katherine
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Katherine ... it is rather a challenging form, but I just had to try it - appreciate your review my dear! :) Sharyn
Comment from juliedickson55
Very nice, a good use of the form of quatern and a lovely beach image to go with it.
I actually love autumn, so it's not until that ends that I really dread winter...
Good luck in the contest and with your writing.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Very nice, a good use of the form of quatern and a lovely beach image to go with it.
I actually love autumn, so it's not until that ends that I really dread winter...
Good luck in the contest and with your writing.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Julie!
Comment from poesyapprentice
A pleasant cheerful piece of work. The ending was really cute. Long days keep love from growing old was the only line that stood out to me as being off a bit. It flowed well, of course, but what of the meaning? I'm not catching the relationship of the first to the last of the line, how so? Good work, and enjoyable read. Blessings!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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A pleasant cheerful piece of work. The ending was really cute. Long days keep love from growing old was the only line that stood out to me as being off a bit. It flowed well, of course, but what of the meaning? I'm not catching the relationship of the first to the last of the line, how so? Good work, and enjoyable read. Blessings!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx poesy - I changed that line specically for you as I'd been thinking about it for a while ... :)
Comment from sunnilicious
Enjoyable poem. Nice repeating line. I wish summer were longer too. Good form of 8-syllables per line. You seem to get too upbeat on the last verse. It completely changed the poetic tone. But hey, vacation is all a lot of us ever wanted. Nice work!
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Enjoyable poem. Nice repeating line. I wish summer were longer too. Good form of 8-syllables per line. You seem to get too upbeat on the last verse. It completely changed the poetic tone. But hey, vacation is all a lot of us ever wanted. Nice work!
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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hey sunni - aren't I allowed to be upbeat in the last verse? I thought that was the whole point of this one ... ??? :))))
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i dunno, but quatren is french. so monotone is in... really, the emotional pace seems jarred instead of a smooth slide from 3 into 4. still, i liked it. u're welcome for the review.
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no biggie dear - just curious!
Comment from Meta~Mark
Let's Take Two! is a vision of an excellent Summer Quatern writing prompt..seems like the font color and size has led me to this summer prize.. :) awesome possum!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Let's Take Two! is a vision of an excellent Summer Quatern writing prompt..seems like the font color and size has led me to this summer prize.. :) awesome possum!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx MM! :)
Comment from dmt1967
I like this poem I live in England so our summer lasts for two weeks lol so yes we want more and no it is not selfish thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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I like this poem I live in England so our summer lasts for two weeks lol so yes we want more and no it is not selfish thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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thx dmt!
Comment from Tina McKala
This was just great, I loved it and I am sure that the winter does not come in cases like this one ;) Beautiful repetition and form, it flew very smoothly and it made me smile as I was reading. Great! Tina
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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This was just great, I loved it and I am sure that the winter does not come in cases like this one ;) Beautiful repetition and form, it flew very smoothly and it made me smile as I was reading. Great! Tina
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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thx Tina!
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent alternate-line rhyming
I like your repeating/descending line and the alliteration in take two
I also like your use of the opening question to engage the reader
good assonance in please/agreed
nice alliteration in summer stays
and in south in search of sunb
You incorporate the repeating line well into each stanza in this excellent summer quatern :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Excellent alternate-line rhyming
I like your repeating/descending line and the alliteration in take two
I also like your use of the opening question to engage the reader
good assonance in please/agreed
nice alliteration in summer stays
and in south in search of sunb
You incorporate the repeating line well into each stanza in this excellent summer quatern :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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thx Brooke!
