All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "We'll Take Two!"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from rashi kumar
Definitely! Why not?
A very hopeful and interesting poem to read!
Lovely rhyming,
adieu/two, sun/done. Nothing forced, it flows so smoothly.
Pleasure to read, all the best!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Definitely! Why not?
A very hopeful and interesting poem to read!
Lovely rhyming,
adieu/two, sun/done. Nothing forced, it flows so smoothly.
Pleasure to read, all the best!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx rashi!
Comment from Capricorn30
I agree your wonderful quatern;I do not believe it is selfish to request/want more of this glorious season;
I so much enjoye the descriptions"velvet green and gold"--lovely words in this bit of alliteration;
The tuquoise background emphasizes the tropical water
destinations,that we so all desire in winter's cold grip;a good color selection as your words say farewell to summer;the soft romance adds a special appeal to summer's end
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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I agree your wonderful quatern;I do not believe it is selfish to request/want more of this glorious season;
I so much enjoye the descriptions"velvet green and gold"--lovely words in this bit of alliteration;
The tuquoise background emphasizes the tropical water
destinations,that we so all desire in winter's cold grip;a good color selection as your words say farewell to summer;the soft romance adds a special appeal to summer's end
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx so much Cap!
Comment from sgalletti
Well, I'd take two any time! It's my favorite season of the year and it always goes by too fast. Wish I could afford to actually fly south - I love Mexico and the Caribbean. But, for me, the second summer is in my dreams. What a beautifully written quatern with all the elements in place - great choice of rhyming words, wonderful meter, beautiful imagery, appropriate repetition of the Summer line. Lots of fun...Best of luck in the contest with a strong contender. Sue
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Well, I'd take two any time! It's my favorite season of the year and it always goes by too fast. Wish I could afford to actually fly south - I love Mexico and the Caribbean. But, for me, the second summer is in my dreams. What a beautifully written quatern with all the elements in place - great choice of rhyming words, wonderful meter, beautiful imagery, appropriate repetition of the Summer line. Lots of fun...Best of luck in the contest with a strong contender. Sue
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx so much Sue!
Comment from Thesis
Great job and better idea. I agree wih the never ending summer concept. I enjoyed your poem and your rhyme scheme. You adhered o all the rules and I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Great job and better idea. I agree wih the never ending summer concept. I enjoyed your poem and your rhyme scheme. You adhered o all the rules and I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx Thesis!
Comment from artemis53
Excellent job and I find much humor and light-heartedness in it. It also makes pretty darned good sense to me. "To swim all year in turquoise blue," Yep! I'll meet you there ;)
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Excellent job and I find much humor and light-heartedness in it. It also makes pretty darned good sense to me. "To swim all year in turquoise blue," Yep! I'll meet you there ;)
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx Diane - we'll keep a bed made up for you!
Comment from I.L. Walton
A very nice poem that makes me wish that it were possible to give four and a half stars. The repeated line is employed cleverly and there is a refreshing dash of humour (such as 'no winters please, we have agreed' and 'warm days ablaze, let's not "adieu"') that lifts the imagery - which otherwise I would accuse of perhaps being a little bit 'standard'. Your idea of 'softly dancing' is a cracker though, very tender, nice one x
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A very nice poem that makes me wish that it were possible to give four and a half stars. The repeated line is employed cleverly and there is a refreshing dash of humour (such as 'no winters please, we have agreed' and 'warm days ablaze, let's not "adieu"') that lifts the imagery - which otherwise I would accuse of perhaps being a little bit 'standard'. Your idea of 'softly dancing' is a cracker though, very tender, nice one x
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Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Your generosity is exceeded only by your good looks my friend! Feel free to read the other 48 ratings!
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your poem is wonderfully written with rich imagery painted from your well composed quatern poem.
The art work is beautiful you used.
You used excellent rhyme and metaphor usage.
You used great meter.
You used very good alliteration.
I enjoyed your forth stanza:
Now let's fly south, out-run the sun,
To swim all year in turquoise blue,
And please tell Winter we're not done,
One Summer's gone, so we'll take two!
I'd recommend your quatern poem to other reviewers.
I wish you good luck in the Summer Quatern contest.
Missy.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Poet,
Your poem is wonderfully written with rich imagery painted from your well composed quatern poem.
The art work is beautiful you used.
You used excellent rhyme and metaphor usage.
You used great meter.
You used very good alliteration.
I enjoyed your forth stanza:
Now let's fly south, out-run the sun,
To swim all year in turquoise blue,
And please tell Winter we're not done,
One Summer's gone, so we'll take two!
I'd recommend your quatern poem to other reviewers.
I wish you good luck in the Summer Quatern contest.
Missy.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thx Missy!
Comment from kiwisteveh
Lovely quatern and a worthy entry for this contest where the standard is very high.
I enjoyed the lively, conversational tone of your piece and the almost cheeky suggestion that you can achieve the perfect seasonal life - having two of the nice seasons!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Lovely quatern and a worthy entry for this contest where the standard is very high.
I enjoyed the lively, conversational tone of your piece and the almost cheeky suggestion that you can achieve the perfect seasonal life - having two of the nice seasons!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thx Steve!
Comment from c_lucas
To be weathy enough to follow the sun and to choose our own weather. This is very well writteh with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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To be weathy enough to follow the sun and to choose our own weather. This is very well writteh with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx Charlie! in a perfect world ...
Comment from Titanx9
You've written a fantastic poem within the rules of this quatern prompt. I like your excellent word choice, rhyming, pacing and imagery; the last stanza is a nice wrap-up for this beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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You've written a fantastic poem within the rules of this quatern prompt. I like your excellent word choice, rhyming, pacing and imagery; the last stanza is a nice wrap-up for this beautiful poem.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx Titan - this was a fun write - what's not to like about eternal summer, hmm?
