No Such Luck
Revision of an earlier poem145 total reviews
Comment from Bobbi22
I do believe that luck is part of life - nothing that a rabbit's foot can add to or a broken mirror can take away. Nice strong closing stanza. Very well written.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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I do believe that luck is part of life - nothing that a rabbit's foot can add to or a broken mirror can take away. Nice strong closing stanza. Very well written.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you Pics.
Comment from cce29
Perfect photo for your poem. Although I may not totally agree with your opinion, you did write a great poem. I don't nessecarilly believe in rabbit foots, etc. but I don't believe some things are from good and bad luck. I used to believe more your way, but I've been pretty ill for the last 1 1/2 years, and I don't believe that "god" would put me through this. Anyways, great poem, it has nice rhyme and it flows well.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Perfect photo for your poem. Although I may not totally agree with your opinion, you did write a great poem. I don't nessecarilly believe in rabbit foots, etc. but I don't believe some things are from good and bad luck. I used to believe more your way, but I've been pretty ill for the last 1 1/2 years, and I don't believe that "god" would put me through this. Anyways, great poem, it has nice rhyme and it flows well.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you cce.
Comment from Healthyheartpoet
The phenomena of luck, truly does exist. The reason this is true is because statistically speaking, some individuals are always winning. I personally know of several who goes to the casino on a regular basis,and are way ahead of the game. I like your picture, it really drives what you believe, but are you completely accurate?
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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The phenomena of luck, truly does exist. The reason this is true is because statistically speaking, some individuals are always winning. I personally know of several who goes to the casino on a regular basis,and are way ahead of the game. I like your picture, it really drives what you believe, but are you completely accurate?
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you heart.
Comment from sibhus
Good poem with some well thoght out practical ideas. I think that it flowed well with a message that so many can really use in this day and age. This was an enjoyable read and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Good poem with some well thoght out practical ideas. I think that it flowed well with a message that so many can really use in this day and age. This was an enjoyable read and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thanks Sib.
Comment from Elizabeth Daniels
While I agree that 'lucky' symbols such as rabbit's feet are pure folly, I do believe that people can create their own luck, good or bad, through how they live and treat others. Although it debatable whether that can really be called luck. Elizabeth Daniels.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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While I agree that 'lucky' symbols such as rabbit's feet are pure folly, I do believe that people can create their own luck, good or bad, through how they live and treat others. Although it debatable whether that can really be called luck. Elizabeth Daniels.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thanks Elizabeth.
Comment from fayesh
Some good advice in your poem. To live a life finding strength in faith is the way to go. However, your poem is narrow and not universal in nature since it is meant only for a Christian audience. You seem to be proselytizing in the last stanza.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Some good advice in your poem. To live a life finding strength in faith is the way to go. However, your poem is narrow and not universal in nature since it is meant only for a Christian audience. You seem to be proselytizing in the last stanza.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you Fayesh.
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
Hi Justin
To be honest I don't believe in good luck or Jesus Christ - wonder what that says about me, LOL
For me your poem reads a little awkwardly in places, hence the 4 star rating.
Kind regards, Pete
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Hi Justin
To be honest I don't believe in good luck or Jesus Christ - wonder what that says about me, LOL
For me your poem reads a little awkwardly in places, hence the 4 star rating.
Kind regards, Pete
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your honesty Pete.
Comment from Scarbrems
This is interesting. Some nice parts, a bit of humour, but there's not much of a rhythm to it. Some of the lines are far too long, upsetting the scansion and this line:
"Ladders and black cats are too stagnant to be a bore."
is a contradiction. I am intrigued that in a poem about the fooloshness of superstition, you end by endorsing the biggest superstition of all time.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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This is interesting. Some nice parts, a bit of humour, but there's not much of a rhythm to it. Some of the lines are far too long, upsetting the scansion and this line:
"Ladders and black cats are too stagnant to be a bore."
is a contradiction. I am intrigued that in a poem about the fooloshness of superstition, you end by endorsing the biggest superstition of all time.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your honesty emsey.
Comment from candi lester
Very nicely done I liked the meaning of this poem It has a great message in it.... Thanks so much for sharing it with us.
Candi Jo Lester
Soon to be known as
SWEETNESS JOLEEN WINTERS
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Very nicely done I liked the meaning of this poem It has a great message in it.... Thanks so much for sharing it with us.
Candi Jo Lester
Soon to be known as
SWEETNESS JOLEEN WINTERS
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you Joleen.
Comment from kiwisteveh
You make a strong point, and one I agree with, but I found your expression of it ordinary rather than poetic. You have chosen not to use fixed meter and your rhyme is a little random, which is OK but as a reader I hope to be compensated by some striking imagery or forceful, imaginative language. Instead I get some rather curious expressions:
a world old fables - what does that mean (or is it a typo old = of?)
Ladders and black cats are too stagnant to be a bore - meaning is unclear again
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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You make a strong point, and one I agree with, but I found your expression of it ordinary rather than poetic. You have chosen not to use fixed meter and your rhyme is a little random, which is OK but as a reader I hope to be compensated by some striking imagery or forceful, imaginative language. Instead I get some rather curious expressions:
a world old fables - what does that mean (or is it a typo old = of?)
Ladders and black cats are too stagnant to be a bore - meaning is unclear again
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your advice kiwi.
