All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "You are ... Are you?"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from missy98writer
Visionary1234,
Your free verse lyrical verse is excellently written.
The art work is out of sight you used.
I liked the lines:
You are ...
a flower child
in love
with Beatle'd bliss,
hair, down to there
and curled, not a care
in the JC Superstar World!
raise the bar, burn your bra
set your sights, on equal rights
yellow V-wees,
peace signs,
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend this poem to other reviewers.
Thanks,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Visionary1234,
Your free verse lyrical verse is excellently written.
The art work is out of sight you used.
I liked the lines:
You are ...
a flower child
in love
with Beatle'd bliss,
hair, down to there
and curled, not a care
in the JC Superstar World!
raise the bar, burn your bra
set your sights, on equal rights
yellow V-wees,
peace signs,
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend this poem to other reviewers.
Thanks,
Melissa.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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thx so much Melissa!
Comment from sunnilicious
That's a wonderful poem. I enjoyed the flip side of past and present. And my-my how we can change without even noticing it. Well thought out. Meticulously written. Superb.
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That's a wonderful poem. I enjoyed the flip side of past and present. And my-my how we can change without even noticing it. Well thought out. Meticulously written. Superb.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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and a double thank you sunni!
Comment from Aussie
Brilliant artwork to compliment your great story/poem. I can relate to your work, being a teenager in the sixties. A fun write, most enjoyable, lifted my spirits and took me back to the days when 'free love' was just that. Wouldn't it be nice to just go back and stay awhile in those happy-hippy days? Well done poet.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Brilliant artwork to compliment your great story/poem. I can relate to your work, being a teenager in the sixties. A fun write, most enjoyable, lifted my spirits and took me back to the days when 'free love' was just that. Wouldn't it be nice to just go back and stay awhile in those happy-hippy days? Well done poet.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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yes it certainly would Aussie!!! thx so much! :) Sharyn
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
Hilarious, witty, outrageous... beautiful! What more can I say? Oh, yeah, baby, you got the beads, snap, snap, tap, tap!
What a great mind you got! Loved this thing, all the way through!
Bingo! A six! Well-deserved! You're a superstar!!
Great luck for the contest. This one's a winner anywhere!
cheers
js
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Hilarious, witty, outrageous... beautiful! What more can I say? Oh, yeah, baby, you got the beads, snap, snap, tap, tap!
What a great mind you got! Loved this thing, all the way through!
Bingo! A six! Well-deserved! You're a superstar!!
Great luck for the contest. This one's a winner anywhere!
cheers
js
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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thx again js! made my morning - so glad you enjoyed!
Comment from dmt1967
This is a great poem about free love I just missed out dam I so wish I was born then that would have been cool very well written and well deserved win congratulations thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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This is a great poem about free love I just missed out dam I so wish I was born then that would have been cool very well written and well deserved win congratulations thank you for sharing
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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thx dmt - actually I missed out on it too as I was in high school, but definitely got the "vibe" of the times - glad you enjoyed!
best wishes
Sharyn :)
Comment from guinea
Excellent job with this poem. It brought back a lot of memories . I was born in this era too.
It was fun to read. I look forward to more .
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Excellent job with this poem. It brought back a lot of memories . I was born in this era too.
It was fun to read. I look forward to more .
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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thx guinea - glad you enjoyed it - so many closet hippies I'm finding, how delightful!
Best wishes
:) Sharyn
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Congrats, Sharyn! The win is well-deserved. How sad is it you had to add something of a glossary? We're not that old ... uh, ... are we? Good fun! :) nancy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Congrats, Sharyn! The win is well-deserved. How sad is it you had to add something of a glossary? We're not that old ... uh, ... are we? Good fun! :) nancy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Hey Nancy - yes, so silly, hmm? and apparently some of us did get older and rather straight-laced! Blessings for not being one of them!
:) Sharyn
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Hey, we all play our parts, Sharyn. But one never really knows. :D Nancy
Comment from TKField
I loved this nostalgic epic you've given birth to here. I grew up in the 60's so I know where you're coming from. My buddies and I once tried to eat some psychedelic mushrooms that grew out of cow turds, but we were already so pie-eyed we ate the turds instead of the shrooms! We still caught a pretty decent buzz.
Your poem took me back to the heady days of love beads, Beatles, Vietnam, Flower power, Haight Ashbury, the summer of love, Woodstick, Chubby Checker, Soupy Sales, Twiggy, and Super-Ball wackiness of that era. Nice updating in the second half. There are indeed a lot of ex hippies around still living the dream.
As Peter Fonda once said in Easy Rider, quote: "He's doin his own thing in his own time". Also:"We blew it". Yes we did. TKF
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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I loved this nostalgic epic you've given birth to here. I grew up in the 60's so I know where you're coming from. My buddies and I once tried to eat some psychedelic mushrooms that grew out of cow turds, but we were already so pie-eyed we ate the turds instead of the shrooms! We still caught a pretty decent buzz.
Your poem took me back to the heady days of love beads, Beatles, Vietnam, Flower power, Haight Ashbury, the summer of love, Woodstick, Chubby Checker, Soupy Sales, Twiggy, and Super-Ball wackiness of that era. Nice updating in the second half. There are indeed a lot of ex hippies around still living the dream.
As Peter Fonda once said in Easy Rider, quote: "He's doin his own thing in his own time". Also:"We blew it". Yes we did. TKF
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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thx TK for a lovely review! I cracked up hearing about your turd-rooms!!
:) Sharyn
Comment from Amazingelectron
Great piece of work. I really am very impressed. Its funny and amusing and feels so honest and true. Fantastic poetry. I love it.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Great piece of work. I really am very impressed. Its funny and amusing and feels so honest and true. Fantastic poetry. I love it.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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thx so much Ae (great name by the way!) - so glad you enjoyed it!
Best wishes
Sharyn :)
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Thanks for the comment about my name.
Comment from sgalletti
Congratulations on the contest win with this well written self-talk free verse poem. I was a sixties flower child myself and so could relate to your images and choice of words describing the period, as well as your back talk 45 years later. Great humor throughout. I enjoyed! Sue
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Congratulations on the contest win with this well written self-talk free verse poem. I was a sixties flower child myself and so could relate to your images and choice of words describing the period, as well as your back talk 45 years later. Great humor throughout. I enjoyed! Sue
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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thx so much Sue! Amazing the number of flower children who are coming out of the closet!
