Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Needs Improvement

This needs a major rewrite this does not conform to the contest rules you have to have a three line poem with 17 syllables in the poem 5/7/5 sorry regards Jill

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2012

Comment from Scarbrems

Average

You've got a good theme here, but I'm afraid the text-speak just puts me off. (Must be my age). You've used "their" instead of "there" throughout. This is not a 5/7/5. A 5/7/5 is a three-line poem with 5 syllables in the first line. 7 in the next and 5 in the last, so unfortunately you won't succeed in the contest. Sorry I can't be more positive on this one, but it is just not for me.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012

ok so what type of poem you searching for :)

reply by Scarbrems on 15-Aug-2012

Sorry, perhaps I should have skipped. It's the text-speak. "may b" - that isn't a word.
"u"? Poems are all about language. This may be your language, and this is probably the coming thing, but it doesn't do it for me. I reviewed you because you hadn't had any yet and I think this style might put a few people off, but hey, it's your style.

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012

umm... ya ...you are right... but hey can you tell me how to post my poems in this fanstory... as i am new so asking

reply by Scarbrems on 15-Aug-2012

You are posting them fine. Don't enter a contest without reading the rules. If you want to write something just click "write" on your profile page and follow instructions.