To a son of God
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "I am Providence ...!"Metre ... Freeverse & Quatrain
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Comment from hari anand
I will kill your sons and daughters first with my word than with love , I am providence....thoughtful....I too believe providence comes on a white horse ....
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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I will kill your sons and daughters first with my word than with love , I am providence....thoughtful....I too believe providence comes on a white horse ....
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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that it will...
Comment from rama devi
This is powerful and thought provoking. Uniquely voiced and very effective use of enjambement for dramatic pause, sculpting your phrasing. Also, dramatic use of repetition.
These lines are shocking and wonderful-
I will kill your sons and daughters,
first with my words:
then with my love.
Stunning presentation.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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This is powerful and thought provoking. Uniquely voiced and very effective use of enjambement for dramatic pause, sculpting your phrasing. Also, dramatic use of repetition.
These lines are shocking and wonderful-
I will kill your sons and daughters,
first with my words:
then with my love.
Stunning presentation.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 12-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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much appreciated rama...
Comment from nomi338
I have read the Biblical accounts of how God's great day of vengeance will destroy possible millions of people who refuse to change their ways. Beware people ... Providence is coming.
Great piece of poetic work.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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I have read the Biblical accounts of how God's great day of vengeance will destroy possible millions of people who refuse to change their ways. Beware people ... Providence is coming.
Great piece of poetic work.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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That it will my friend...
Comment from snemes
I wasn't sure what this was about, but I knew it was well written. I looked at the other reviews and saw your comment about it being about Hitler. Now I understand the sinister tone. I will kill your sons and daughters, first with my words: then with my love. Superbly chosen words. You remind us how it all started with stirring speeches. Scary stuff.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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I wasn't sure what this was about, but I knew it was well written. I looked at the other reviews and saw your comment about it being about Hitler. Now I understand the sinister tone. I will kill your sons and daughters, first with my words: then with my love. Superbly chosen words. You remind us how it all started with stirring speeches. Scary stuff.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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Certainly is....
Comment from DianeLWood
This is a deep and thought provoking piece, expressed beautifully. You have captured something intangible and illusive with your words bicpen. I enjoyed the read very much. Thank you for sharing. Cheers, Diane.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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This is a deep and thought provoking piece, expressed beautifully. You have captured something intangible and illusive with your words bicpen. I enjoyed the read very much. Thank you for sharing. Cheers, Diane.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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Thanks D...
Comment from donaldww
Hi Bicpen,
I do remember you. But I didn't know you were bought with silken locks and rode a white horse. Last time you were here you were very dark and red.
[Can't say I like these lines.]
I will kill your sons and daughters,
first with my words:
then with my love.
Short, but not particularly sweet.
DW
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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Hi Bicpen,
I do remember you. But I didn't know you were bought with silken locks and rode a white horse. Last time you were here you were very dark and red.
[Can't say I like these lines.]
I will kill your sons and daughters,
first with my words:
then with my love.
Short, but not particularly sweet.
DW
Comment Written 12-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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Maybe you'd like to take a look at rushingwaters reply, have a nice day. Maybe you'll understand the lines better...
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As much as I appreciate your kind suggestion, I would rather take the meaning straight from your poem, rather than getting it from a commentary.
Otherwise, why bother with poetry? May as well just read commentaries.
Thanks.
DW
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No worries...
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...just a little something for you DWW...maybe you'll get a better feel for the poem...
...my grandfather was in a Lancaster Bomber and shot down by them...my grandfather and his crew were not even meant to be flying that day...how's that for a stroke of providence!
Comment from Selestia
Very nice! I really like the following:
I will kill your sons and daughters,
first with my words:
then with my love.
Poem has somewhat of a sinister feel. Levels of meaning. Nice form, nice cadence and pace.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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Very nice! I really like the following:
I will kill your sons and daughters,
first with my words:
then with my love.
Poem has somewhat of a sinister feel. Levels of meaning. Nice form, nice cadence and pace.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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Your toooo right it does.....!
Comment from Zombie's Woof
Gosh... I guess I lucked out on the sons
and daughters part, because I don't have
children... you think providence will
come and kill my goldfish, BP? That
would really suck! LOL
Excellent write! ZW
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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Gosh... I guess I lucked out on the sons
and daughters part, because I don't have
children... you think providence will
come and kill my goldfish, BP? That
would really suck! LOL
Excellent write! ZW
Comment Written 12-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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ZW...I'll tell you what, if you dont feed them like your meant to: it sure will...I like horse's...but I'd still like to be a tree?
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Oh... then it's not providence which
keeps killing every one that I buy
and put in the tank... you mean they
actually need to eat, too?
Yeah, we all wanna be trees...
maybe next life! :)
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No worries Z...
Comment from Gungalo
Well Bic you really made quite a stir with this one. Done in free verse, it is a beauty for sure. Remember me. I am providence. I am glad to hear you are not for sale.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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Well Bic you really made quite a stir with this one. Done in free verse, it is a beauty for sure. Remember me. I am providence. I am glad to hear you are not for sale.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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Excellent...G...
...I hope not.
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Sigh how wonderfully written.
Comment from Hitcher
This is an interesting offering bicpen, and I'm sure it will make for many an interesting review, some will remember and some won't want to because then they would have to change course. Excellent thought provoking Poem friend!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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This is an interesting offering bicpen, and I'm sure it will make for many an interesting review, some will remember and some won't want to because then they would have to change course. Excellent thought provoking Poem friend!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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Thanks Hitcher,
much obliged.
