To a son of God
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "I am Providence ...!"Metre ... Freeverse & Quatrain
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Comment from bhogg
Your author notes did bring a smile my way. Happy reading ...NOT. There have been some bad folks who could be included. Many meglomaniacs are unfortunately in positions of authority.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Your author notes did bring a smile my way. Happy reading ...NOT. There have been some bad folks who could be included. Many meglomaniacs are unfortunately in positions of authority.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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I quite agree...
Comment from artemis53
Not very happy reading. We are often tempted by appearances and promises that are hollow only to find that a drastic mistake was made much too late.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Not very happy reading. We are often tempted by appearances and promises that are hollow only to find that a drastic mistake was made much too late.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Well, I suppose there the necessity for repentance could come into the equation.
Comment from cvcopac
The second coming of Christ. God. The ultimate CEO. Universal and personal deliverance. Predetermined fate.
Very dramatic delivery, Bicpen, why the mystery? What about redemtion?
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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The second coming of Christ. God. The ultimate CEO. Universal and personal deliverance. Predetermined fate.
Very dramatic delivery, Bicpen, why the mystery? What about redemtion?
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Well, I really dont believe Hitler had any redemption to be quite honest, maybe, I'm reading something into it your not...would be interested to here how you read these interpretations...much obliged...
your old pal bic...
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Well, I had no idea this was a dedication to Hitler and his list of atrocities. You should include some reference to that fact within the poem. For Hitler, retribution, I would imagine--not redemption. We all play a part, I believe, in providence.
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Well cv theres a very good reason for not enquiring about his deeds except this one...try donaldww's review and work from there...and also christianspirit...!
get back to me if you want a talk about it,
much obliged,
Bic.
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Well, I deduct, from our conversation, that your poem is the embellishment of Hitlers twisted ideology--inasmuch as he views himself as providence, and by a fatalistic consequence of his actions; you are in some sense a victim.
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That is true my friend, much obliged...
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Good luck in your quest. I'm no stranger to misfortune.
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Know the feeling cv...take care...and Gods Blessings...!
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Hi, Bic.
This is certainly very well written, dramatic and thought-provoking free verse.
Who indeed is 'providence'? It could be a general liar on his metaphoric 'white horse', it could be Satan himself, or the really cynical may think it's an un-caring God.
Excellent!
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Hi, Bic.
This is certainly very well written, dramatic and thought-provoking free verse.
Who indeed is 'providence'? It could be a general liar on his metaphoric 'white horse', it could be Satan himself, or the really cynical may think it's an un-caring God.
Excellent!
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Excellent Ray, much though provokingness...much appreciaated,
your old pal,
Bic.
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My pleasure, Bic.
Hey, you don't look that 'old' in your profile pic.
I'm wondering if 'old pal' is just a nice term of endearment, or whether we knew each other in a past term at 'FS'.
My old pseudonym began with 'D', though that's as much as I'll divulge in public. :-) x
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term of endearment, my friend...loved the bird spotting...the eagle was great.
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'endearment' back to you, Bic. Thanks for reading and complimenting my old 'Eagle' poem.
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no worries...
Comment from Ure Connection
This is kind of dark.
Assuming that you mean providence to be a form of wisdom from God or another being. It leaves me questioning where wisdom comes from, Big G or little g?
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This is kind of dark.
Assuming that you mean providence to be a form of wisdom from God or another being. It leaves me questioning where wisdom comes from, Big G or little g?
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Please check: Christianpowers, for providence correction and donaldww for explanation...much appreciated...not sure will check...?
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Ok I thought your symbolism was great, as for killing your children etc. well isn't that what God big G and gods little g do. First enticing children from our aprons with words then severing the connection with love.This is how they grow up and become individuals. I love the deeper parts that can be gleaned from this.
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Excellent reply...I am glad you can understand it and yes both big G and little g have a part in it...!
The love that seperates is the ideology they follow which unless suitable will "kill" them, that is the mainthrust of the idea but we are to aware, also, of the quite literal reference...!
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork you posted to go with your poem.
You had my attention from the first line to the last.
I found this to be a very strong poem with a message one can't forget! within it.
Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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I love the artwork you posted to go with your poem.
You had my attention from the first line to the last.
I found this to be a very strong poem with a message one can't forget! within it.
Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Much obliged...
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My pleasure. Have a nice day.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
I will say this is well written my friend it has a strong feeling coming through the work I am providence I will confess I do not understand it fully but I will look into it and do research well done my friend regards Jill
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I will say this is well written my friend it has a strong feeling coming through the work I am providence I will confess I do not understand it fully but I will look into it and do research well done my friend regards Jill
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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excellent, read Ure Connection...many thanks...
Comment from squid152
A little background in your notes would help to the reader to make sense of this poem. You may know a lot about Providence but I don't
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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A little background in your notes would help to the reader to make sense of this poem. You may know a lot about Providence but I don't
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Two reviews worth reading: For knowlege of providence: check the review by christianpowers and for an explanation check out donaldww's review...it will explain.
Comment from smudge
We are all born to die. It is the living in the middle that makes the difference. The white horse is a most beautiful creature. Lovely picture
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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We are all born to die. It is the living in the middle that makes the difference. The white horse is a most beautiful creature. Lovely picture
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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The white horse is but the man sitting on this one isnt so pleasant.
Comment from honeytree
The art work is great and the words interesting.
I don't want to walk anywhere near this horse
Who seems to be very nasty.
Somewhere, Somehow, This Horse Must Change
Honey tree
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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The art work is great and the words interesting.
I don't want to walk anywhere near this horse
Who seems to be very nasty.
Somewhere, Somehow, This Horse Must Change
Honey tree
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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It may be just a little bit too late for this horse...see donalww's review and follow,
much obliged.
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I will check out donalww's review.
all the best.
Annie
