Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your poem is in good 5/7/5 form
nice alliteration of summer sun
strong use of beam as a high impact and mood-producing verb
lovely appeal to the senses and a cheerful tone :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012

Thanks for the great review and your time

Comment from TammyGail

Excellent

Great little entry for the contest LauraR
well expressed in few words
loved the color scheme
it works well with your poem
best of luck in the contest

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012

Thank you for the review and your kind words.

Comment from rushingwater

Good

I enjoy reading your 5/7/5. Your syllables meet the requirement. I thought provoking message as well. The color choice is well suited. Great job! Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012

Thank you. I appreciate the review and your time. Thank you for the kind words.

Comment from ennahanid

Excellent

I have such a bad habit of passing up writes when no picture to pull me in, I am trying to break that habit and I do believe I am improving somewhat. I am glad I did not pass this small gem over...perfect syllable count and so much said in so few words. Well done and welcome - Dinah

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012

Thank you so much for your kind words. And for your time. I greatly appreciate it.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Very good Laura!! A haiku that talk of the sun and how it shines on us to result in a beautiful glow. So beautiful it is.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012

Thank you. I appreciate your review and your time.

reply by Gungalo on 10-Aug-2012

My pleasure!!

Comment from G.B. Smith

Excellent

Hello there LauraR
I am pleased to be able read and review on this well thought out poem. You are new to Fanstory and I want to follow you if you don't mind
Bear

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012

I'm honored. You are very welcome to follow. Thank you for your kind words.

Comment from artemis53

Excellent

For your first submission you're on the right track. Many don't count their syllables. The poem makes perfect sense to me with the new day warmth beckoning the world to arise.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012

Thank you, your very kind. I appreciate you taking the time.

Comment from Curtis Hatch

Excellent

Ours is a planet that can only survive along as the sun shines. All plant life must have sunlight in the right amount and the accurate time to sprout, grow and produce. Without productive plant life, there will be no animal life... or human life. We need the summer sun so the world can rise. The poem engenders such beautiful thoughts. Curtis

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012

I am so honored. Thank you for your time and your kind words.

Comment from Selestia

Excellent

Hey . . . great first submission. So true . . . without the sun, the world literally would not "rise" . . . We depend on it in so many ways. Very nicely executed.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012

Your words are greatly appreciated. Thank you for your time and your review.

Comment from mshirachot

Excellent

Good work on the syllable count. Since 5-7-5 does not limit the content, you have made this about physical nature which is a nice touch. The "sunny" yellow background adds to the words you've chosen.

Perhaps you might think of including a lovely sunrise photo or piece of art to this work. Best wishes with your contest entry.

Blessings to you,
Marsha

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012

Thank you. I appreciate the time spent.