To a son of God
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Pleasure or Pain?"Metre ... Freeverse & Quatrain
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Comment from dmt1967
I like this poem very well written and most people will take pleasure over pain but sometimes the pleasure comes with a cost that is worse than pain thank you for sharing
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I like this poem very well written and most people will take pleasure over pain but sometimes the pleasure comes with a cost that is worse than pain thank you for sharing
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
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Many thanks, much appreciated.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Bicpen, I enjoyed this little skit between a demon and a little man, between temptation and a sinner.
Many spend their lives looking for a good time. Their creed, "We're here for a good time, not a long time!" But the Bible says, "Seek ye first the kingdom of God, and his righteousness, and all these things shall be added unto you." Matthew 12:33 ... because there is much more! This life is a drop in the bucket. How much more awaits us in Heaven!
You make your point, that "the wages of sin is death, but the gift of God is eternal life through Jesus Christ, our Lord". Romans 6:23
Nicely penned, and a good message!
blessings
Kimbob
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2012
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Hi Bicpen, I enjoyed this little skit between a demon and a little man, between temptation and a sinner.
Many spend their lives looking for a good time. Their creed, "We're here for a good time, not a long time!" But the Bible says, "Seek ye first the kingdom of God, and his righteousness, and all these things shall be added unto you." Matthew 12:33 ... because there is much more! This life is a drop in the bucket. How much more awaits us in Heaven!
You make your point, that "the wages of sin is death, but the gift of God is eternal life through Jesus Christ, our Lord". Romans 6:23
Nicely penned, and a good message!
blessings
Kimbob
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
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Excellent many thanks FF, I did not think about the second part until you mentioned it as I wished the little man to know his conviction. However, maybe someone might meet him after he left the shop and gave him the good news...after all that is what the gospel is about,
Much obliged,
Bic.
Comment from kra-z-ka-z
WOW! The way you put the whole pleasure or pain senerio was incredible! Having the little man knowingly curious of his payment with pain was powerful.
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WOW! The way you put the whole pleasure or pain senerio was incredible! Having the little man knowingly curious of his payment with pain was powerful.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
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Excellent, glad you enjoyed...
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes I liked this poem the poem unfolds really well reading smoothly from beginning to end and you have done very well with its presentation regards Jill
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Yes I liked this poem the poem unfolds really well reading smoothly from beginning to end and you have done very well with its presentation regards Jill
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
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Excellent jill, many thanks...
Comment from bowls
A very vivid way of making a statement without being "preachy". I like the metaphor of the shop and shopkeeper, as well. Very nicely done.
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A very vivid way of making a statement without being "preachy". I like the metaphor of the shop and shopkeeper, as well. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
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Excellent bowls, hope it moved you...
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Bicpen ...
You certainly have a most unusual theme in this free-thought writing, well presented in poetic format.
Introducing the Devil, as you have done, seems to indicate that he represents pleasure as opposed to pain but ...
for those who see and accept all things as being what God wants, then even physical pain can be a spiritual pleasure - if that doesn't sound too Irish! I speak from experience.
Thank you for sharing these thoughts with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
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Hullo Bicpen ...
You certainly have a most unusual theme in this free-thought writing, well presented in poetic format.
Introducing the Devil, as you have done, seems to indicate that he represents pleasure as opposed to pain but ...
for those who see and accept all things as being what God wants, then even physical pain can be a spiritual pleasure - if that doesn't sound too Irish! I speak from experience.
Thank you for sharing these thoughts with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
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What I intend it to read is that the sin of the soul is to a seared conscience pleasure, whereas, in the reality of Gods's eyes that sin is a pain and suffering in the soul that is under the goverment of the moral law or Ten Commandments as all men are.
The reason as to why he percieved the vice as a pleasure is because his soul is dead to the reality of the law, when he asked for pain he had an awakened conscience that is to say sin became its reality in the light of Holy goverment...I think...!
I think physical pain as a spiritual pleasure would denote some sort of mad distortion as far as I can see...
Much obliged,
Bic.
Comment from Mike K2
Usually, one can't have pleasure without pain, so I seek joy with the understanding that it won't always be that way. Interesting poem for sure, and being well written, I really enjoyed the premise.
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Usually, one can't have pleasure without pain, so I seek joy with the understanding that it won't always be that way. Interesting poem for sure, and being well written, I really enjoyed the premise.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
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Excellent...have a cigar.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with imagery. I don't fancy any either pleasure or pain from your devil.alola The display and the colors suit the poem well. Thanks for sharing. Mary
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A good write with imagery. I don't fancy any either pleasure or pain from your devil.alola The display and the colors suit the poem well. Thanks for sharing. Mary
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
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Well whether we realise it or not or whether we are aware of the these devil are there...beware, my friend.
Comment from amada
This was an startling read. An eye-opener, as if I don't know it already, but the way it was written, in the third person, made all the difference. The artwork adds emphasis to this great work.
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This was an startling read. An eye-opener, as if I don't know it already, but the way it was written, in the third person, made all the difference. The artwork adds emphasis to this great work.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
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Excellent amada, job accomplished...
Comment from TammyGail
Lol... had to laugh Bicpen
your such a trip I'm ever happy
to see your writing again
well written and expressed
loved your imagery and your last
line was priceless .... lol as well as the notes
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Lol... had to laugh Bicpen
your such a trip I'm ever happy
to see your writing again
well written and expressed
loved your imagery and your last
line was priceless .... lol as well as the notes
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
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Excellent T...
...glad you both enjoyed. Someone was basically wanting to rearrange the whole line, quite frankly I have no idea why...
Enjoy.
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welcome B... :)
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No worriies, T.
