To a son of God
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Pleasure or Pain?"Metre ... Freeverse & Quatrain
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Comment from Tina McKala
I loved this, it leaves its reader in a thoughts for a pretty long time. Pleasure or a pain? Is there really a good answer? Awesome poem!
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I loved this, it leaves its reader in a thoughts for a pretty long time. Pleasure or a pain? Is there really a good answer? Awesome poem!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Much obliged glad you enjoyed...
Comment from misscookie
This is a greast opicyure you post to go with your poem
You had my attention soi strong I had to hieht the pruint so I could see.
This is what I rtyuly call a food for thouyght poem... meaning after you read it you go Hmmmmm
thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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This is a greast opicyure you post to go with your poem
You had my attention soi strong I had to hieht the pruint so I could see.
This is what I rtyuly call a food for thouyght poem... meaning after you read it you go Hmmmmm
thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Excellent misscookie glad you enjoyed...
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until next time.
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Anytime misscookie...
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Have a nice day, until next time.
Misscookie
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a beautifully penned poem about spirituality. In our lives, we all have times that are painful.I think your friend was wrong. Pleasure when it is a sin and you hurt others is wrong~Debbie
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This is a beautifully penned poem about spirituality. In our lives, we all have times that are painful.I think your friend was wrong. Pleasure when it is a sin and you hurt others is wrong~Debbie
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
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You got it debbie and not only when you hurt others but yourself. Sin is personal and so is the judgement of it.
Comment from visionary1234
Well you certainly have a novel view of the devil and the devil's assistant! Pleasure or Pain? Hmmm ... let me think about that for a bit ... seems like a no brainer, yes? I like what you've left UNsaid!
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Well you certainly have a novel view of the devil and the devil's assistant! Pleasure or Pain? Hmmm ... let me think about that for a bit ... seems like a no brainer, yes? I like what you've left UNsaid!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
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Excellent much appreciated.
Comment from travisjy
it was good its kind of deep and sinister, but the meaning is vlear and its a true meaning at that good job i liked it.
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it was good its kind of deep and sinister, but the meaning is vlear and its a true meaning at that good job i liked it.
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Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
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Much obliged...
Comment from writingwithapencil
This is quite the quirky little story, though I am sometimes thrown off by the change in rhythm. Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading your devil's tale.
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This is quite the quirky little story, though I am sometimes thrown off by the change in rhythm. Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading your devil's tale.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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I write with a bicpen...
It was an experiment with the quatrain rhyme scheme I thought it worked a treat.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
This is an insightful look at the wages of sin. You tell the story well with vivid imagery leading the way. Life is a balance of pleasure and pain. We will each bow down before our grave and pray. The black background and red letters make a compelling case. I enjoyed your writing. Curtis
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This is an insightful look at the wages of sin. You tell the story well with vivid imagery leading the way. Life is a balance of pleasure and pain. We will each bow down before our grave and pray. The black background and red letters make a compelling case. I enjoyed your writing. Curtis
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Thanks curtis glad you enjoyed,
Much appreciated,
Bic.
Comment from c_lucas
The masochist pleaded, "Hurt me! Please Hurt me!" The sadist smiled and said, "No," This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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The masochist pleaded, "Hurt me! Please Hurt me!" The sadist smiled and said, "No," This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Charlie, you have been, quite clarly, to a different shop,
Much obliged,
Bic.
p.s. remind me not to take you out shopping again...!
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You're welcome, BP. Charlie
Comment from nighttripper
Interesting take on the entrance to hell. Well written and the question and answer between the two plays well. A great little twist at the end. I enjoyed this one. Thanks for sharing.
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Interesting take on the entrance to hell. Well written and the question and answer between the two plays well. A great little twist at the end. I enjoyed this one. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Excellent enjoy the nighttripping...I normally do...no illicit drugs involved.
Comment from Frank Atwood
Very interesting poem. Quite dark yet much truth within it. Thus I quote this from the Nag Hammadi for you to think about; "What is good is not good and what is bad is not bad."
I gave this six for your truth and ending is right on. Sin lives differently within us all depending on ones interpretation of all things, especially 'Words'. God bless and keep up the great writing.
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Very interesting poem. Quite dark yet much truth within it. Thus I quote this from the Nag Hammadi for you to think about; "What is good is not good and what is bad is not bad."
I gave this six for your truth and ending is right on. Sin lives differently within us all depending on ones interpretation of all things, especially 'Words'. God bless and keep up the great writing.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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mmmm....!
I tend to live in a black and white world...with a very good guide,
Much obliged,
Bic.
