To a son of God
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Pleasure or Pain?"Metre ... Freeverse & Quatrain
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Comment from Opal H.
Though this poem is not as clear in meaning as I'd have liked, it is well written in a very chiiling way. The imagery is crystal clear throughout.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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Though this poem is not as clear in meaning as I'd have liked, it is well written in a very chiiling way. The imagery is crystal clear throughout.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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Many thanks Opal...just out of interest, what did you have in mind for "clear in meaning."
much obliged,
Bic.
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I'm still not sure exactly what pleasure and pain was being referred to, and why pleasure wasn't desirable after all.
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The best description I can give you is a little exercise; go to reviews, page 4 and look up Donaldww...
...afterwards I would be very interested to hear if it makes a clearer impression for you,
much obliged,
Bic.
Comment from Selestia
A very nice story that makes the reader chuckle, then realize the seriousness of the message. The dialogue contributes to the overall message and story nicely . . . without getting in the way. The last line is particularly endearing with its not so subtle admonition to the reader. I like it!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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A very nice story that makes the reader chuckle, then realize the seriousness of the message. The dialogue contributes to the overall message and story nicely . . . without getting in the way. The last line is particularly endearing with its not so subtle admonition to the reader. I like it!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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Excellent glad you could see it for what it actually means...
Much appreciated,
Bic.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Pleasure or Pain?' is an exceptionally well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work is a lesson in what to ask and not ask for. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this standard.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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'Pleasure or Pain?' is an exceptionally well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work is a lesson in what to ask and not ask for. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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Excellent Duchess, glad you enjoyed, much appreciated,
Your Pal...
...Bic.
Comment from THE FREAK
Once again you have taken a subject normal people would shy upon and added little characters to a brilliant poem demonstrating the easy temptations that is within everything. Unknown pleasures to which plague peoples soul, entering a store, the sin's to come whole. Great story, love them, really - really love them. They are a pleasure to read, don't stop, for it will be a sin!
THE FREAK
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Once again you have taken a subject normal people would shy upon and added little characters to a brilliant poem demonstrating the easy temptations that is within everything. Unknown pleasures to which plague peoples soul, entering a store, the sin's to come whole. Great story, love them, really - really love them. They are a pleasure to read, don't stop, for it will be a sin!
THE FREAK
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Many thanks THE FREAK, glad you could enjoy and appreciate...
Comment from Jendowoz
Most interesting poem, Bicpen. a lesson in not everything is as it appears to be. Reads well and the colours and pictures is very appropriate.
Regards, Jen
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Most interesting poem, Bicpen. a lesson in not everything is as it appears to be. Reads well and the colours and pictures is very appropriate.
Regards, Jen
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Excellent jen...
...once the veneer is removed maybe its not as healthy, spiritually spaeking, as it should or could be...
Comment from krazykats2011
I do sincerely wish I could have awarded another star, but unfortunately, I had none left to give this week. I do see why this poem was recognized as it was. As dark and eerie as it may seem, it does make one think.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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I do sincerely wish I could have awarded another star, but unfortunately, I had none left to give this week. I do see why this poem was recognized as it was. As dark and eerie as it may seem, it does make one think.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Thanks KrazyKats check out some of the review replies maybe you will find some answers to the questions,
much obliged,
Bic.
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I just may have to do that, bicpen. Thanks
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Anytime...
Comment from the_tronic_orb
This is a truly enthrawling poem. It paints a vivid picture of how we sometimes view the consequences of our actions and demand the bill.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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This is a truly enthrawling poem. It paints a vivid picture of how we sometimes view the consequences of our actions and demand the bill.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Believe me the bill for sin is not one anyone should desire...as death is also an existence without the love of God in any shape or form, common grace or otherwise.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Bicpen,
This poem is one that begs to be pondered. There are consequences in everything we do and even more so if we cross the line of sin. You have chosen expressive words, the colors are very apt for the theme and the flow is smooth. Well done.....chey
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Hi Bicpen,
This poem is one that begs to be pondered. There are consequences in everything we do and even more so if we cross the line of sin. You have chosen expressive words, the colors are very apt for the theme and the flow is smooth. Well done.....chey
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Thanks chey, much appreciated...
Comment from hari anand
Poets's interpretation of life's dark reality is awesome .......very thought ful.....I always feel poem is all about rhyme and reality,turned and twisted, to give a feel of poetic atmosphere around the one who reads it....
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Poets's interpretation of life's dark reality is awesome .......very thought ful.....I always feel poem is all about rhyme and reality,turned and twisted, to give a feel of poetic atmosphere around the one who reads it....
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Excellent many thanks...
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your thought-provoking, cautionary poem effectively reminds us that there are consequences to our actions--especially when we participate in actions that bring temporary, illicit pleasure.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Your thought-provoking, cautionary poem effectively reminds us that there are consequences to our actions--especially when we participate in actions that bring temporary, illicit pleasure.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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My point exactly...
