Forget Me Not
After I'm gone what will my loved ones say about me.5 total reviews
Comment from missy1977
haikus say so much with so little. what is expressed here defines the poet as a person. obviously caring, hard working, loving and dedicated. perhaps a single father? i love this poem.
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haikus say so much with so little. what is expressed here defines the poet as a person. obviously caring, hard working, loving and dedicated. perhaps a single father? i love this poem.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
Comment from arman khan
The loved ones feel for a short span of time. Then every thing becomes normal.IT IS NATURAL DESIRE TO BE REMEMBERED BY THE LOVED ONES after we have gone.poem teaches a great thought provoking reflection, an insight rather.language is simlpe.but idea is great.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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The loved ones feel for a short span of time. Then every thing becomes normal.IT IS NATURAL DESIRE TO BE REMEMBERED BY THE LOVED ONES after we have gone.poem teaches a great thought provoking reflection, an insight rather.language is simlpe.but idea is great.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Thank you Arman. I an grateful that you fully comprehend the feeling in my Haiku Poem.
Comment from Liilia
Will she when she's grown
Speak well of me when I've gone
If I do my best
You have packed a lot into this 17 syllable poem. The question asked by quite a few is expressed in the first two lines. The last line, however, is more rare. This is a fine work and I wish you much luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Will she when she's grown
Speak well of me when I've gone
If I do my best
You have packed a lot into this 17 syllable poem. The question asked by quite a few is expressed in the first two lines. The last line, however, is more rare. This is a fine work and I wish you much luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much. You hit the nail on the head. The first two lines are a somber reflection, the last line rei forces the convictions of the previous two. Great feedback.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from terry drake
We will never know for sure unless God let's us hear in on the lives we leave behind. Thank you for your 5-7-5 format poem for review, it was thought provoking.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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We will never know for sure unless God let's us hear in on the lives we leave behind. Thank you for your 5-7-5 format poem for review, it was thought provoking.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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So true, faith based is our religion. We should do well in life so as not to wonder what legacy we may have left behind. Than you.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
If I do my best - this means a lot in this short. Means that if you do your worst you aren't going to be remembered. Great write.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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If I do my best - this means a lot in this short. Means that if you do your worst you aren't going to be remembered. Great write.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Awesome! The last line is gut wrenching. It's just the thing I imagine anyo e would say at some crossroad in their life or at a life altering event. Will I win, can I win, don't look back, "if I do my best!"
