My Broken Heart
Can't help myself39 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
This one says everything a body needs to say when it comes to being truly in love. Short sweet directly to the point and the heart will eventually see the truth, eventually! Well done. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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This one says everything a body needs to say when it comes to being truly in love. Short sweet directly to the point and the heart will eventually see the truth, eventually! Well done. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you Kiwi. I haven't been ableto come on here for ages, well haven't written for ages, so to see alovely review means a lot, thank you so much xxxxxxxxxx
Comment from reconciled
hey you...thank you for reminding what is most important. Yes maam if we are to be forgiven we must forgive first.....we think this is weakness but it is the most strength depleating thing (sacrifice) that one can do....and it takes a commitment to an unseen faith to accomplish it....the weak wont even try. Love Michael
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2012
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hey you...thank you for reminding what is most important. Yes maam if we are to be forgiven we must forgive first.....we think this is weakness but it is the most strength depleating thing (sacrifice) that one can do....and it takes a commitment to an unseen faith to accomplish it....the weak wont even try. Love Michael
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2012
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WOW, thank you so much Michael, forgiving is not always easy, This means so much xx
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thank you....
Comment from Aaron James
In the proverb you use, it is almost always in reference to emotional pain and certainly here that can also be the case. However I think your simple little poem can be interpreted as physical pain too from an abusive relationship. In such relationships the abused believe they love the abuser and over and over again they forgive.
Either way the 5-7-5 fits the competition's criteria well and is an interesting and pleasant read. Good luck.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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In the proverb you use, it is almost always in reference to emotional pain and certainly here that can also be the case. However I think your simple little poem can be interpreted as physical pain too from an abusive relationship. In such relationships the abused believe they love the abuser and over and over again they forgive.
Either way the 5-7-5 fits the competition's criteria well and is an interesting and pleasant read. Good luck.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your great review x
Comment from Ure Connection
I like this, in a way. It reminds me of my mothers struggle to free herself of violent men and our families cry, where, as children, we longed for a father, even a bad one.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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I like this, in a way. It reminds me of my mothers struggle to free herself of violent men and our families cry, where, as children, we longed for a father, even a bad one.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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I am glad you likes my poem. It is a sad thing when this happens, you sound like you have moved on from this so that is good news x
Comment from mjordahl
I think this is great. Many women (like me)can relate to this poem.It was emotional with very little words with the 5 7 5 guidelines.Nice Title to go with it.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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I think this is great. Many women (like me)can relate to this poem.It was emotional with very little words with the 5 7 5 guidelines.Nice Title to go with it.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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SO pleased you liked it, and thank you x
Comment from lilyg
you did a good job on this with the few words allowed. You penned your thought perfectly. i like the last line, which is a summary of how love is..it forgives. Great picture as well.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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you did a good job on this with the few words allowed. You penned your thought perfectly. i like the last line, which is a summary of how love is..it forgives. Great picture as well.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your very kind words xx
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Phil1:6
Very Good. A Haiku though? A good 5-7-5 Good subject tells a story; not much of an aha moment in my opinion. Must have had a great impact on you though and God bless you for forgiving again. That is a rare and exciting thought. If you are married you have a high purpose. How will you ever have level footing again? God can do whatever you ask Him. Stay well.
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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Very Good. A Haiku though? A good 5-7-5 Good subject tells a story; not much of an aha moment in my opinion. Must have had a great impact on you though and God bless you for forgiving again. That is a rare and exciting thought. If you are married you have a high purpose. How will you ever have level footing again? God can do whatever you ask Him. Stay well.
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Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Thank you for enjoying my poem, and thinking it very good. I believe the contest rules said just 5 7 5, not a Haiku or senryu, so any subject, rhyming or not as long as the proverb was in there.
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your Proverb 5-7-5 Poem, My Broken Heart, is well written with a perfect syllable form. Your poem also has a wonderful proverb: Where there is love, there is pain. I guess without pain, we would not know what love was?
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Your Proverb 5-7-5 Poem, My Broken Heart, is well written with a perfect syllable form. Your poem also has a wonderful proverb: Where there is love, there is pain. I guess without pain, we would not know what love was?
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your great review xx
Comment from Bobbi22
Your proverbial poem very smoothly includes the proverb along with your added explanation. Very well written 5-7-5 poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Your proverbial poem very smoothly includes the proverb along with your added explanation. Very well written 5-7-5 poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your good wishes, and glad you enjoyed it xx
Comment from Doc Holiday
Well-written 5-7-5 poem with a proverb.
Forgiveness may mend a broken heart, but the pain is still there. Well-done! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Well-written 5-7-5 poem with a proverb.
Forgiveness may mend a broken heart, but the pain is still there. Well-done! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2012
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Thanks Doc, means a lot xx
