the twister of wind
disaster of nature and its effects2 total reviews
Comment from Christina 201
This is a sad poem about the disastrous effect of a twister.
The first line has the essence of a twister being wind that blows, the next the swinging bat that creates huge damage for a few seconds and then the third line explains the real, lingering damage: that everything we hold precious can be destroyed in those few seconds. I feel like I have been invited into a horendous experience that I have only seen on the TV or other media. Emotive writing.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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This is a sad poem about the disastrous effect of a twister.
The first line has the essence of a twister being wind that blows, the next the swinging bat that creates huge damage for a few seconds and then the third line explains the real, lingering damage: that everything we hold precious can be destroyed in those few seconds. I feel like I have been invited into a horendous experience that I have only seen on the TV or other media. Emotive writing.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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thanks a lot....
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
This is a very though-provoking piece of work that challenges the reader to really think about what you wrote- I like that. You stated a mouthful in three short lines. The only thing that i can advise you on is that the first and third lines are more than the syllable count. Great work. Intelligent piece! Good luck in the contest! Holly
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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This is a very though-provoking piece of work that challenges the reader to really think about what you wrote- I like that. You stated a mouthful in three short lines. The only thing that i can advise you on is that the first and third lines are more than the syllable count. Great work. Intelligent piece! Good luck in the contest! Holly
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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thanks a lot......
