Illusion
Don't Bother me, Can't you see I am busy.....18 total reviews
Comment from ennahanid
Unfortunately you state an absolute truth here and it really is a very sad situation. My family are kind of bad about this and I hate it, I really do...this is very well written and I am with you 100% - Dinah
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Unfortunately you state an absolute truth here and it really is a very sad situation. My family are kind of bad about this and I hate it, I really do...this is very well written and I am with you 100% - Dinah
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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It is said that the truth will set you free, so my prayer is that if 1 person who reads this will say "you know I need to stop doing this" then all is right with the world. Thank you so very much for the great comments...it is good so see your name again...have an awesome evening young lady! Mossmouse
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
How true this is. Too many families and friends never really talk to one another with out an electronic signal in between them . It is so sad that our children will not know how to communicate the real way. Good right!!!Debbie
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How true this is. Too many families and friends never really talk to one another with out an electronic signal in between them . It is so sad that our children will not know how to communicate the real way. Good right!!!Debbie
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you Debbie! I do hope you are having an awesome evening and as always, thank you for taking the time to read thru my words. Mossmouse
Comment from Heaven Bound
As for your writing, very nicely done. Easy to read; pretty good flow. If I might, one suggestion for the last line of the 4th stanza "Into the realm where none need chase". As for the topic, you are right on. Far too much wasted, precious time. It reminded me of the old song "Cat's in the Cradle" about not putting the priority on the right things. Thanks so much for sharing this.
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As for your writing, very nicely done. Easy to read; pretty good flow. If I might, one suggestion for the last line of the 4th stanza "Into the realm where none need chase". As for the topic, you are right on. Far too much wasted, precious time. It reminded me of the old song "Cat's in the Cradle" about not putting the priority on the right things. Thanks so much for sharing this.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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I always liked "pretty good", it is so much better than "pretty Bad!" Thank you so much for the most kind words and I will take a look at your suggestion...that's why we all are here. Have an awesome evening, unless you are in New Zealand and then Good Morning! Mossmouse
Comment from Patti R.
Your poem says so much that is relevant to me. A family can so easily get lost in the technology - instead of the reverie of being that many people sitting around a table with at least a few things in common...Is this what we're coming to? Silence in the presence of "loved ones?" Great poem.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Your poem says so much that is relevant to me. A family can so easily get lost in the technology - instead of the reverie of being that many people sitting around a table with at least a few things in common...Is this what we're coming to? Silence in the presence of "loved ones?" Great poem.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Patti...good to hear from you as always. This was something I saw just a few days ago and I promised myself I would write this piece. Thank you for the most gracious words...Mossmouse
Comment from Bindu Saxena
It's beautiful! You are very right. These days we spend so much time in being busy with something or the other that family time is reduced to zero.
Nice thoughts!
They sat so close, yet were so far away
No touch, no laugh was shared among the four
Forever forfeiting this time even for a "Hey"
How are you but simply typing words sent off to sway
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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It's beautiful! You are very right. These days we spend so much time in being busy with something or the other that family time is reduced to zero.
Nice thoughts!
They sat so close, yet were so far away
No touch, no laugh was shared among the four
Forever forfeiting this time even for a "Hey"
How are you but simply typing words sent off to sway
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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You are very kind with your comments and they are greatly appreciated. Are we too busy or simply letting things manage us...Go Figure. Again, thank you for reading the Illusion...Mossmuse
Comment from c_lucas
Cell phones has opened a brand new horizion. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good job.
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Cell phones has opened a brand new horizion. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good job.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to read my Illusion. The sad part of it is that this is today's reality...together but separate. Have an awesome evening! Mossmouse
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You're welcome, MM. Charlie
Comment from mshirachot
BRAVO!!! What a great message. I struggle so with seeing the same images...families together, yet miles apart because they are texting or gaming or whatever else except communicating with those that are nearby.
Nothing needs changing with this. Thanks for sharing it!
Blessings!
Marsha
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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BRAVO!!! What a great message. I struggle so with seeing the same images...families together, yet miles apart because they are texting or gaming or whatever else except communicating with those that are nearby.
Nothing needs changing with this. Thanks for sharing it!
Blessings!
Marsha
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the Caps BRAVO! I am smiling and enjoying your very flattering comments. Mossmouse
Comment from CheyLGwriter
This is so true. People don't even call each others names in the house anymore. They are either calling cell phones or texting. We do need to learn how to communicate without all these devices. There was a time where we didn't have a choice. Thank you for bringing light to such a untalked about subject.
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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This is so true. People don't even call each others names in the house anymore. They are either calling cell phones or texting. We do need to learn how to communicate without all these devices. There was a time where we didn't have a choice. Thank you for bringing light to such a untalked about subject.
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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As always, thank you for the great comments. I have been wanting to do this one for a while so I sat down after dinner and wrote it tonight. Again, thanks...Mossmouse
