A New Day
Quatrains a/a/b/b15 total reviews
Comment from Elaine E
Hi, A lovely poem. I like the sentiments. It flowed well. I particularly liked the line 'embrace each new morn with passion' its a good thing for us all to try and do!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Hi, A lovely poem. I like the sentiments. It flowed well. I particularly liked the line 'embrace each new morn with passion' its a good thing for us all to try and do!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much!!! Debbie
Comment from Heaven Bound
Very, very nice poem. Good flow; easy to follow. I especially like that you used a word I had to look up - "sate". Thanks for expanding our horizon.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Very, very nice poem. Good flow; easy to follow. I especially like that you used a word I had to look up - "sate". Thanks for expanding our horizon.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much!!! Debbie
Comment from Bindu Saxena
beautiful words! i enjoyed your poem and can not give you less than five stars.
Enjoy your time as a treasure
What is left, we cannot measure
Embrace each new morn with passion
With self and others engage compassion
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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beautiful words! i enjoyed your poem and can not give you less than five stars.
Enjoy your time as a treasure
What is left, we cannot measure
Embrace each new morn with passion
With self and others engage compassion
Comment Written 01-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much!!! Debbie
Comment from BadEducation
Thank you for the good advice you gave me in this smooth, well written, jumping with care poem. You have a talent to bring out the obvious in a subtle way. I like it.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the good advice you gave me in this smooth, well written, jumping with care poem. You have a talent to bring out the obvious in a subtle way. I like it.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much!!! Debbie
Comment from deb552
This a beautifully written piece Debbie. Your poetic skills are obvious with great rhyming, rhythm and imagery. It's a very positive piece, that has a profound message that I'm taking from it; to be grateful for what we have, and stay open to new opportunities that may present themselves. Every day can bring something exciting if we allow it to. It's a great write in every way as far as I'm concerned and deserves the 6 stars I have to give! xxxx deb
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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This a beautifully written piece Debbie. Your poetic skills are obvious with great rhyming, rhythm and imagery. It's a very positive piece, that has a profound message that I'm taking from it; to be grateful for what we have, and stay open to new opportunities that may present themselves. Every day can bring something exciting if we allow it to. It's a great write in every way as far as I'm concerned and deserves the 6 stars I have to give! xxxx deb
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Deb. This is how I try to live my life!!! Debbie
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It's a great way, and I try to too, even though it's not always easy! deb
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is a beautiful poem so much beauty enclosed in your lines well done very well written and presented I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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This is a beautiful poem so much beauty enclosed in your lines well done very well written and presented I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 29-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much!!! Debbie
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This was lovely, and I enjoyed reading it very much:)
Great rhyme, rhythm in this piece and it promoted some deeper contemplations within me.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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This was lovely, and I enjoyed reading it very much:)
Great rhyme, rhythm in this piece and it promoted some deeper contemplations within me.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 29-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you very much. I does have a deeper meaning than many reading get~Debbie
Comment from Gungalo
Wow Debbie this is awesome. Quatrains but with a verve of their own. I really enjoyed this:
Sun rays drop below horizon, evening ends
Be thankful for good times and friends
Our day's experiences, poor and great
Increase our next morning's sate
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Wow Debbie this is awesome. Quatrains but with a verve of their own. I really enjoyed this:
Sun rays drop below horizon, evening ends
Be thankful for good times and friends
Our day's experiences, poor and great
Increase our next morning's sate
Comment Written 29-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you. SO glad you enjoyed it!!! Debbie
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Smile.
Comment from TammyGail
what a lovely poem ... there is nothing
better than catching mother nature at
her best .. early morning walks are the best
for me watching every bud awaken
thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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what a lovely poem ... there is nothing
better than catching mother nature at
her best .. early morning walks are the best
for me watching every bud awaken
thanks for sharing
Comment Written 29-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much for the lovely review!!! Debbie
Comment from kalstorytlr
I love the positive focus of this but there are a couple of spots that are a bit rough. For instance, the last line of the 1st and last stanzas. It might flow better if it said "A new beginning this day will bring." I know you were trying to do the poetic thing but because you are trying to rhyme, you may want to reconsider the way you phrase it to fit the rhyme and smooth out the flow of the reading.
For the most part, I really like it, though. Even if you left it as is, it is okay. I just think that the change suggested might make it a bit smoother to read.
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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I love the positive focus of this but there are a couple of spots that are a bit rough. For instance, the last line of the 1st and last stanzas. It might flow better if it said "A new beginning this day will bring." I know you were trying to do the poetic thing but because you are trying to rhyme, you may want to reconsider the way you phrase it to fit the rhyme and smooth out the flow of the reading.
For the most part, I really like it, though. Even if you left it as is, it is okay. I just think that the change suggested might make it a bit smoother to read.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thanks-I will take a look at that~Debbie
