THE GIFT
Tough Love33 total reviews
Comment from Tasha_Tyrant
This was very interesting, and had me in engaged until it was over. I wanted to know more. It didn't go in the direction that I wanted it to. It would have been nice to have a conversation between the patient and the doctor. Or perhaps the parents saying something more unsettling that makes the doctor want to do more. Otherwise, I did enjoy reading it.
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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This was very interesting, and had me in engaged until it was over. I wanted to know more. It didn't go in the direction that I wanted it to. It would have been nice to have a conversation between the patient and the doctor. Or perhaps the parents saying something more unsettling that makes the doctor want to do more. Otherwise, I did enjoy reading it.
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you.
Comment from ennahanid
I am not really good at reading these scripts but I thought that this one was very good, I got it and appreciated the voices involved in this one. Unbelievable parents and a compassionate Doctor obviously not on the same wave-length at all. I might give scripts more of a go after this reading - thank you - Dinah
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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I am not really good at reading these scripts but I thought that this one was very good, I got it and appreciated the voices involved in this one. Unbelievable parents and a compassionate Doctor obviously not on the same wave-length at all. I might give scripts more of a go after this reading - thank you - Dinah
Comment Written 29-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Dinah, I think you would be excellent with the scriptwriting. They are mostly dialogue driven - something I think you would take to naturally. Please do consider!
Thanks for your the great review and consideration. Very much appreciated! Hugs, Bev
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your script, THE GIFT, is very interesting. I too find it odd to give the gun the brother shot himself with to his younger brother. I see the way the mom and dad see it too... it is just a gun and worth a lot of money. If they sold it; it wouldn't be from great grandpa and from Austria; priceless heirloom. I really don't put much stock in psychologist talking visits myself either. GREAT story!!!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Your script, THE GIFT, is very interesting. I too find it odd to give the gun the brother shot himself with to his younger brother. I see the way the mom and dad see it too... it is just a gun and worth a lot of money. If they sold it; it wouldn't be from great grandpa and from Austria; priceless heirloom. I really don't put much stock in psychologist talking visits myself either. GREAT story!!!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much for the generous review, billy. I really appreciate you taking time to read my script. And your insights are really intriguing. Always nice to get a reader's perspective. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hey talented lady! I enjoyed your script very much but I sure hope you continue on with what happens to Gabriel. I don't know anything about script formatting, but this was easy to read and follow. I did get the feeling that the characters used each other's names a little too much in conversation ... something that doesn't occur much in real conversation. I also found two name usage that felt out of place??
Today was your last state-paid
visit (doctor?)Gabriel, wasn't it?
Doctor Preston, (Gabriel)Daniel is OUR son
Smiles,
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Hey talented lady! I enjoyed your script very much but I sure hope you continue on with what happens to Gabriel. I don't know anything about script formatting, but this was easy to read and follow. I did get the feeling that the characters used each other's names a little too much in conversation ... something that doesn't occur much in real conversation. I also found two name usage that felt out of place??
Today was your last state-paid
visit (doctor?)Gabriel, wasn't it?
Doctor Preston, (Gabriel)Daniel is OUR son
Smiles,
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Hi, Karyn. Thank you so for this awesome review. I really appreciate your good eye for detail and suggestions. And
changes are on their way! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from BadEducation
An enjoyable read. The story flowed particularly well and it was a pleasure reading it. Beautifully phrased. Parents are never wrong so they make us believe, but how often are they wrong? You have proved my point.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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An enjoyable read. The story flowed particularly well and it was a pleasure reading it. Beautifully phrased. Parents are never wrong so they make us believe, but how often are they wrong? You have proved my point.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Thank you for taking time to read and review my screeplay BE. I appreciate your generosity. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Connie C
This is another very impressive piece of writing from you, dear Bev. Will there be more coming on this one? I hope so. Seems like you could really continue in a few different directions with this, and I'd love to see more of the story. Of course, it is already a story as it is. You are becoming so versatile a writer, my friend. And you should be proud. This is great dialogue and a good story too! Hugs, Connie
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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This is another very impressive piece of writing from you, dear Bev. Will there be more coming on this one? I hope so. Seems like you could really continue in a few different directions with this, and I'd love to see more of the story. Of course, it is already a story as it is. You are becoming so versatile a writer, my friend. And you should be proud. This is great dialogue and a good story too! Hugs, Connie
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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What an awesome review, Connie. It does seem as if the story is not quite finished to me, too. And what a truly encouraging friend you are. Your words touch my spirit deeply. This is an area of writing that I want to explore more. The class has been incredibly fun! I so appreciate your generous rating, my friend. You are so good to me. Love, Bev
Comment from AlvinTEthington
I am glad this was released to the general public for several reasons. One is that the membership could see basically how to format a screenplay. The other is that Interesting Ron gave you good feedback, though I disagree with him about the use of Dissolve. A cast of characters is not needed in a screen play. I have never seen O. S. (off screen) used in a screenplay. Remember to center the character's name above his or her dialogue and to center the dialogue. I don't understand the use of Interrupts. Correct the singular possessive Lynch's to the simple plural Lynchs. Put stage directions in ALL CAPS.
The development of characters is quite good and that is the reason for the six stars.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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I am glad this was released to the general public for several reasons. One is that the membership could see basically how to format a screenplay. The other is that Interesting Ron gave you good feedback, though I disagree with him about the use of Dissolve. A cast of characters is not needed in a screen play. I have never seen O. S. (off screen) used in a screenplay. Remember to center the character's name above his or her dialogue and to center the dialogue. I don't understand the use of Interrupts. Correct the singular possessive Lynch's to the simple plural Lynchs. Put stage directions in ALL CAPS.
The development of characters is quite good and that is the reason for the six stars.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Teach. Corrections are on the way! I had the points you mentioned centered and then changed it - not sure why. Interrupts is out and Lynchs is in. I thought you might find the advice of the reviewers, especially Ron, interesting. See you in a bit. Really appreciate your help AND generosity. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
This one really sparkles with reality. It's as if the reviewer were there inside the scenes you weave with such a purposeful direction and flawless pacing. Well done. Thanks for sharing your talent with us here...
cheers
js
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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This one really sparkles with reality. It's as if the reviewer were there inside the scenes you weave with such a purposeful direction and flawless pacing. Well done. Thanks for sharing your talent with us here...
cheers
js
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you, js. I really appreciate your generous review and insights. Werm regards, Bev
Comment from Silverlock
Oh my goodness, what a terrible tale. Not the writing, I assure you, but the fact that it is based on a true story..
Very realistic script, the dialogue allows us to get a real feel of the characters, and you certainly elicited a response in this reader! Well done, Wfd.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Oh my goodness, what a terrible tale. Not the writing, I assure you, but the fact that it is based on a true story..
Very realistic script, the dialogue allows us to get a real feel of the characters, and you certainly elicited a response in this reader! Well done, Wfd.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Hi, Silverlock. Thank you for sharing your insights and reading my script. I really appreciate the support and your generous review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from c_lucas
It looks like Evil Eddie has had a field day with the formatting of your story. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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It looks like Evil Eddie has had a field day with the formatting of your story. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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You've no idea, charlie! Thanks so much ... Bev
