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Comment from Cindy Warren
It's so sad that people with mental problems are treated with less respect than criminals. How are they supposed to get better. They need help and support, not the crap they get.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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It's so sad that people with mental problems are treated with less respect than criminals. How are they supposed to get better. They need help and support, not the crap they get.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Yes, so true.
They say it's OK and the stigmata has
Lessened but try and find a job today.
Most are in homeless shelters.
I rescue them and help them get on their feet again.
If just one time we all kicked in there would be know such thing!
That's what got me there this time for 23 days.
14 days three weeks before that for another stupid reason.
Over 7 weeks in in a 10 week period.
I almost didn't make it home for I fought theses people for human rights and dignity.
They are shattered beings being corralled.
State prisoners have more rights.
Its a damn shame which I will, as a LatterDay Saint Priest of the Church of Jesus Christ, will change.
Ricky 1024
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Some spelling errors, but otherwise a very good piece. Powerful and shocking in its honesty... especially the last stanza.
By the way, in your notes you wrote "I helped many and prevented two crisis's." NEVER, I mean NEVER, use an apostrophe to make a word plural! Save apostrophes for contractions and possessive nouns. To make a word plural, more than one, just add S or ES, whichever is called for. In this case, it's ES. The correct spelling is CRISES, pronounced CRY' SEEZ.
In the poem, fix these spellings:
frieght --> freight
clearity --> clarity
homo-sapians --> homo sapiens (no hyphen)
Also....
you have [less] priveleges << wrong word
you have fewer priveleges << correct word
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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Some spelling errors, but otherwise a very good piece. Powerful and shocking in its honesty... especially the last stanza.
By the way, in your notes you wrote "I helped many and prevented two crisis's." NEVER, I mean NEVER, use an apostrophe to make a word plural! Save apostrophes for contractions and possessive nouns. To make a word plural, more than one, just add S or ES, whichever is called for. In this case, it's ES. The correct spelling is CRISES, pronounced CRY' SEEZ.
In the poem, fix these spellings:
frieght --> freight
clearity --> clarity
homo-sapians --> homo sapiens (no hyphen)
Also....
you have [less] priveleges << wrong word
you have fewer priveleges << correct word
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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Damn u r good.
Wanna be my proof reader. It pays 100 million, billions.
{No apostrophe}, Tee, he.
Ricky1024
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Sure, may I have a week's pay in advance? ;)
