Lovers Leap
A ghostly figure watches the sea.27 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Nancy,
Sweet, sweet girl, all alone with so much to deal with. So much grief and not enough love or bravery to face life alone with that wee one. Such a sad story!
One small note:
1.) it said "A baby's on the way"
I need you, please return to me.
--> I think your q marks need to be at the very end of the statement??
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Nancy,
Sweet, sweet girl, all alone with so much to deal with. So much grief and not enough love or bravery to face life alone with that wee one. Such a sad story!
One small note:
1.) it said "A baby's on the way"
I need you, please return to me.
--> I think your q marks need to be at the very end of the statement??
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thank you for catching that Typo, Robyn. I appreciate the help. Hugs. Nancy:)
Comment from Jane Johnson
Very nicely written and emotional. Words flowed well. Nice imagery and artwork chosen. Easy to read and understand. Good rhyme. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Very nicely written and emotional. Words flowed well. Nice imagery and artwork chosen. Easy to read and understand. Good rhyme. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Thank you very much for the encouraging review. Come back often! Nancy
Comment from leslie_harris
That was beautiful. Your work is so wonderful it just makes me want to write more. This poem was very well rhymed and the flow is perfect. I didnt find any discrepencies at all. :)
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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That was beautiful. Your work is so wonderful it just makes me want to write more. This poem was very well rhymed and the flow is perfect. I didnt find any discrepencies at all. :)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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I am happy to hear that. I almost always miss a comma or something. Thank you so much for reviewing and hope you keep writing. Regards. Nancy
Comment from heyjude
Nancy, I didn't see anything that you missed. What a
sad story in a poem. You should have entered it in
the contest. A great job of crafting.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Nancy, I didn't see anything that you missed. What a
sad story in a poem. You should have entered it in
the contest. A great job of crafting.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thanks for the review Judy. I always seem to write a poem before a contest opens and have already listed it. Hugs. Nancy
Comment from Bojenn
Awe... !
O so painful.
Well pinned and the emotional struggle is depicted in almost every sentence.
Very lovely words
Very deep emotions.
Loved it.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Awe... !
O so painful.
Well pinned and the emotional struggle is depicted in almost every sentence.
Very lovely words
Very deep emotions.
Loved it.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely Six! That is always nice! Honeycomb
Comment from percival86jack
You continue to impress, my dear Nancy!
She was watching for his Whaler
the one called Laura Lee,
When she learned it wasn't coming back
she jumped into the sea.
A very passionate write... kudos! Hugs, Jack xxxxxx
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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You continue to impress, my dear Nancy!
She was watching for his Whaler
the one called Laura Lee,
When she learned it wasn't coming back
she jumped into the sea.
A very passionate write... kudos! Hugs, Jack xxxxxx
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thanks Jack! I really appreciate the kind words. Sometimes I feel like a failure. I just don't seem to get the following other poets do. I wish I had a clue what to do. You my friend are loyal and a hoot! Cheers!!! Nancy xxxxx
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Thanks Jack! I really appreciate the kind words. Sometimes I feel like a failure. I just don't seem to get the following other poets do. I wish I had a clue what to do. You my friend are loyal and a hoot! Cheers!!! Nancy xxxxx
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Thanks Jack! I really appreciate the kind words. Sometimes I feel like a failure. I just don't seem to get the following other poets do. I wish I had a clue what to do. You my friend are loyal and a hoot! Cheers!!! Nancy xxxxx
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I've seen a noticeable drop off in the number of reviews for the last six months. Don't know the reason but it may just be a normal cycle and it will pick up again... hang in there friend! Hugs, Jack xxxxxxx
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Okay, It is discouraging sometimes I keep getting 14 reviews and I don't know wheather I should list them again or not. Is it worth it? Nancy.
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I just accept and more on to the next one and try not to get bent out of shape! LOL
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Oh I don't get bent, just disappointed, it happens so often. I have started giving other people that 15th review. That's as good as a six! LOL Nancy
Comment from Gert sherwood
Nancy you poem is what most poets refer to as Freestyle Poetry--
this is so sad I do see internal rhyme and some end rhye. Your poem is very vivid and makes on desire to cry.
One thing do you mean
silent ravine instead of ((silent reverie))
Gert
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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Nancy you poem is what most poets refer to as Freestyle Poetry--
this is so sad I do see internal rhyme and some end rhye. Your poem is very vivid and makes on desire to cry.
One thing do you mean
silent ravine instead of ((silent reverie))
Gert
Comment Written 16-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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Reverie, A museing, a daydream. She is remembering. Ye,p I meant
reverie. Thanks for asking. I could have made a Boo Boo. LOL Thanks for the review. Nancy
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Reverie, A museing, a daydream. She is remembering. Ye,p I meant
reverie. Thanks for asking. I could have made a Boo Boo. LOL Thanks for the review. Nancy
Hey you gave me the answer I added see her ghost in silent reverie. That's what it needed. I wrote see her there. It was confusing! Thanks! That helped a lot! Nancy
Comment from adewpearl
good use of abcb rhyming
tear-stained face - add hyphen
nice alliteration and sensory appeal in sea salt
What a dramatic story poem of true, deep love and tragic loss :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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good use of abcb rhyming
tear-stained face - add hyphen
nice alliteration and sensory appeal in sea salt
What a dramatic story poem of true, deep love and tragic loss :-) Brooke
Comment Written 16-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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Thank you Brooke for the correction and the review. Have a Great Day Nancy
Comment from Carole Rosa
Nancy, I just idealize your ability to compose a story within a poem. You have such an extraordinary imagination. This poem/story is excellent. Carole
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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Nancy, I just idealize your ability to compose a story within a poem. You have such an extraordinary imagination. This poem/story is excellent. Carole
Comment Written 16-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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Thank you Carole, thats seems to be the only talent I have. I can't seem to do a poem without it rhyming and I don't think I could write a story or a script so This is what I do! LOL I have evolved into this so I suppose it is what I do. Thank you for the kind praise and the review stars. Have a great
day Nancy
Comment from Jaxpoet
Help scmlp.. You're a champ. Us lakkies should write as well as you... Wonderful little story that read easy followed a nice line.. The only thing I did not like was the ending. (the dog died) I like happy endings better. What I like about reading you is you never know what the poem will be about, you are afar cry from some that I follow that are singularly focused
I really enjoyed this.
Thanks Jimmy
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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Help scmlp.. You're a champ. Us lakkies should write as well as you... Wonderful little story that read easy followed a nice line.. The only thing I did not like was the ending. (the dog died) I like happy endings better. What I like about reading you is you never know what the poem will be about, you are afar cry from some that I follow that are singularly focused
I really enjoyed this.
Thanks Jimmy
Comment Written 16-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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Well thank you Jimmy and let me be the first to say say Happy Fathers day to you. I have to have a sad ending once in a while to hold everyones interest. I fight being predictable. I even like to be funny now and then. You do well on your own Jimmy. Thank you for the praise and the lovely stars. Have a Great day. Nancy
