Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Sigh, my storyteller. It's apparent that he could not decide on what his first moment of action would be. Poor guy, unless Mildred was there. he wasn't ... really.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2012

Hi there! I am always so glad you enjoy my little sob stories...I hope to do a happier one soon. Maybe. I will try. I will. Thank you so much! xoxo...Susan

reply by Gungalo on 08-Jun-2012

I don't care. They are all good.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

This is very well written you have expressed the thoughts of the man really strongly you have done really well in this flash fiction regards Jill

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2012

Hi there! I am always so glad you enjoy my little sob stories...I hope to do a happier one soon. Maybe. I will try. I will. Thank you so much! xoxo...Susan

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Once again you wrote an excellent flash fiction. And yes we should make every minute of our lives count. You said it very well in this story.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2012

Hi there! I am always so glad you enjoy my little sob stories...I hope to do a happier one soon. Maybe. I will try. I will. Thank you so much! xoxo...Susan

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Mixed emotions well expressed. Nicely written as you gradually reveal that she was not a great wife to him. But he's going to miss that stability and need time to adjust.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2012

Hi there! I am always so glad you enjoy my little sob stories...I hope to do a happier one soon. Maybe. I will try. I will. Thank you so much! xoxo...Susan

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

"Pregnant with rain." (verb good imagery) This is well written ith a smooth flow of words, making for an excellent read. Good job.

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 Comment Written 07-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2012

Hi there! I am always so glad you enjoy my little sob stories...I hope to do a happier one soon. Maybe. I will try. I will. Thank you so much! xoxo...Susan

reply by c_lucas on 08-Jun-2012

Ready made sadness
problems become tear jerkers
Faith bring survival
************unedited.

You're welcome, Susan.

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Ah, Suse, there is so much more to this story. Why was she grey? Why was he always away? Why were there no appropriate words? You turn some wonderful phrases, but You leave me wanting more.

Peace, Lee

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 Comment Written 07-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2012

Hi Lee...I love leaving some to the imagination? I tried to convey that he wasn't the best hubby either...'never there'...There's always two sides to every story I guess. And most are comfortable in their 'secure misery'. It's a shame. Anyway, thank you my friend. Good to hear from you! Susan